Good chapter

Screw that 3:00 in the morning shit, this was great! Way better than that shit BIOWARE force fed us! Making self-determination the ending was defiant to bioware and what the refusal ending should have been. I loved it and I look forward to reading the rest of your story

Great story. Many of the sections of Miranda's conversation with Hannah were pure artistry - organic yet perfectly formulated. Though talking about formulated, can't Miranda take a page out of her father's book and randomise a mix of her and John's DNA if they want kids?

Looking forward to more.

Excellent as always!kudos

Mmm jobs...Can't live with them, can't live without them...actually you could probably do away with the former. Especially if you like your job. Anyway...

Once again, I will spare you the usual cliched praise and move on. lol I know exactly what you mean about having to 'get back on the horse' as it were. I'm having that problem with something I'm writing as well. Although, my troubles stem purely from disinterest as opposed to your lack of available time.

While this chapter was fairly short, it was still good, and in a way, having a small one to transition out of the previous section was probably the way to go, even without being in danger of falling off that horse.

Hope to see another update soon, blah, blah, blah.

Great chapter. This is a great story, I do hope you continue.

First of all, congratulations on getting a job. Second, this was still a fun chapter to read. The typos during their conversation actually caught me off guard because there had been so few prior to them. I hope you can still pump out a couple chapters per month, but don't push yourself.

I had a nice chuckle at Shep's 'ruminations upon eggs'.

"Why don't you just use a stick?" - Sweet. 5 cookie points for Liara. ;)

I love Ori's typing goofs. Very natural.

Congrats on the job, glad to see an update here, still my favorite fan fic and am happy you plan to finish it.

I really like what you've done so far, focusing on the main couple and the reconstruction. It really feels like a sequel of the game and the way you write makes it impossible to know what's going to happen next. Will people get to a consensus or will they fall into their old demons and have the Reapers come back to wipe them out for good?

It's entertaining and all the characters are themselves the way you write them which is very enjoyable. Overall it's a very good story.

The only thing that bugs me a little bit is how you portrayed Traynor; don't get me wrong I like the fact that Miranda 'manipulated' her in a way, that's a very Miranda-thing to do, but I think Traynor is too smart to fall into that kind of trap; maybe you should have been more subtle like you did with James? As in 'I'm helping out' and not 'I'm rubbing Commander Shepard all over your face because he's so cool and shit"

You also mention Jack; and I may be biased because she's a favorite of mine but I honestly think that her destructive impulses push her to disfigure herself (shaved head) so people don't get too close to her and she doesn't have to deal with them but I don't see her going as far as neglecting personal hygiene.

Anyway that was just little things I caught here and there, I'm sorry if I came out as bitchy that's not my intention and as previously mentioned I like this story very much, keep writing!

Great to finally see a update! Please continue.

I really like this story, mate, but I think you got too many balls in the air. Maybe you should focus on one story and then work on the others when you lack inspiration for the main one or something like that.

Glad to see you back! I guess I kinda missed Miranda too.

Great chapter. Good job with the Miranda/Oriana conversation and Miranda/Shepard romantic interlude. Thanks for updating and looking forward to more.

Also: There's money to be made on curing such an illness. Money, man. MONEY!