Reviews for Grounded
Guest chapter 22 . 8/6/2016
Got to the part with the tree, and VIRDI WHYYY. VIRIDI YOUR SUPPOSED TO HELP WHERE ARE YOU! AT LEAST SEND PHOSPHORA! (Sorry, I got emotional.)
Guest chapter 9 . 8/5/2016
Whoa. This puts a whole new meaning onto chapter 22(possibly 21) in game. Geez.
Kyofume chapter 24 . 6/10/2016
Beautiful story. Great writing. Lovely imagery. You stuck through with it to. Good job. This story was very well done. A
JJB2002 chapter 24 . 2/10/2016
Its a great book! you've created a masterpiece and I look forward to the sequel.
Kenzie chapter 24 . 7/13/2015
I love it, this story is epic! This is honestly one of my favorites now. I especially love the ending.
Kenzie chapter 8 . 7/7/2015
This is honestly one of the best KI:U fanfics I have read so far!
Kenzie chapter 4 . 7/6/2015
Can't. Stop. Reading. This is really good & things are gettin' interesting!
Ghost Angel14 chapter 4 . 7/5/2015
And this is where things get interesting
Hi chapter 24 . 4/19/2015
It is great story, you should do it for a living!
TheZeldakid101 chapter 24 . 2/22/2015
You know what, I don't even care that it's almost three years since this fic came out. I'm reviewing it. While crying into my hot chocolate. (Emotional breakdown) ARRRRGH! The ending was so sad and sweet!
Anyways, I read the whole thing in a day. I personally could find nothing wrong with this. Even if I tried, which I won't. Your writing is beautiful and flows so easily. I only wish to be a good writer like you. You made it sad or serious or funny or sweet at just the right times. And now I am going to write a full out review in the entire thing. Enjoy.
Okay, on the first chapter, I thought it kind of funny how Pit is like Link from The Legend if Zelda, even if it wasn't intentional. Sleeping in is apparently a thing for world-saving heroes, angelic or not. Nighthawk is a pretty awesome character too.
The next few chapters were amazing and I laughed in all the right places. I completely burst when Pit saw Kaitlyn the first time. I was all: " PFFFFFFTHAHAHAHAAAA" Or something... Yeah. Mark and the teachers are pretty cool characters too. Somehow you can add character to people you rarely see ever, whereas I can't. Sigh.
From the beginning I could tell Jenny would have a big impact on Pit. I kind of expected her to become his legal guardian. She's an amazing character. I can tell you spent a little time developing her. She's also apparently got a thing for warming up to innocent angels. She's awesome.
I read the part about Pit liking Nutella. Let's just say that after that I found myself back at the computer with a jar of it a while later. Haven't had it in FOREVER and am now eating it by the spoonful. Why, Pit... Just why. Also, the Dark Pit being Prince Kuro thing was a little hard to get used to, but I got it down eventually. I love Kuro's change in personality. It's just lovely.
Also, every scenario where a character cried made me at least sniffle. I am probably going to have dreams about it tonight, ugh. Wake up sweating and crying. ...Anywaysmovingon!
Pit's growing relationship and flexibility with humans at first didn't surprise me - I mean, in game he's always genuinely concerned for them. But like this? I kinda sided with Kuro a little here: PIT U 2 COMFY ROUND HUMANZ! Inner me was all, "Pit! You're an angel! Why could this be happening! You lost part of your angelness!" Which was actually a goodish thing in the end.
Ryan was pretty cool. So was the part in Cali. I live in Utah so I've never been to either place... Oh well. I can picture.
Then Mr. Laurel is an angel. I want to say I laughed and said "What?" Five million times for this, but no. I fell off if the chair in shock. I kid you not! It actually happened! I did say "What" a lot though...
Awwwwwwww Kaitlyn and Pit went to a movie! Kaitlyn and Pit, sitting in a tree, k-I-s ...Ih wait that's later.
Then Kuro falls from the sky (I like imagining that, it's funny) and beats up some Shadow Dudes and the world is okay... Kind of. I mean, seriously, Pit, you just got YOUR BUTT KICKED in a battle vs. Kuro. Though it was a nice change. Pit losttttttyaaaaaaaaysarcasmmmmm. Inner me: "Pit! Man up! He's your doppelgänger! You can DO IT! YEAH!" And the silent cheers were answered.
Oh yeah! Yay Kestrel! Rebellions are auper satisfying even if they cost you. Standing up to something higher than yourself... Yay! Kestrel is amaze! Plus, I am super glad Nighthawk was there to stop Kuro. That would have ended sadly and I probably would have cried. Again.
Kaitlyn's backstory and that chapter in general: (Bawls) WAAAHAHHHHAAHHH ARGH THE WORLD HATES ME! It was ...Touching. I ate half a jar of Nutella to calm myself.
Ok, when Pit said bye to his mortal friends, I cried. A little. But the saying bye to Jenny totally broke my structures. I had to fling myself in bed for an hour with two jars of Nutella for an hour before reading more. Your writing talent is amazing. No one else has ever done that to me. But seriously! So sad and sweet I couldn't help myself! Poor Pit!
The battle/action scenes were awesome! Yay Kuro standing up vs. Medusa! But Pit is a bit of an idiot when it comes to battle strategies... "Yep go fight Medusa there's absolutely no consequence!" Except maybe getting burned. Or shocked. Or anything like.
And now, the final chapter impression. Crap, my eyes are getting shiny just thinking about it. Anyways, here's my reaction pretty much word for word.
"Ok, cool. ...Kaitlyn has awesome wings. ...Okay, and NOW: Kaitlyn and Pit, sitting in a tree! K-i-s-s-i-n-g! ...Nighthawk again! Cool! ...No, don't eat more- great now I need more Nutella too. Thanks Pit. ...His CELL PHONE? AT FIVE BARS? WHAT IS THIS MADNESS? ...'Hello? This is Jenny speaking.' (Me:) SOB SOBSOBSOBBBB WHY?! 'Mom?' (Me:) (No hold backs) AUUUUUUGH CRYING... Mom, I'm fine. Get out that last jar of Nutella. I'm gonna need it."
Long story short, the writing is amazing. I don't care if people think I cry easy, because I do sometimes. But rarely is it like this. It may sound weird, but this fanfic has really found its way to the bottom of my heart. I may forget exactly what is was about, but I'm pretty sure Ill always remember this. It is amazing, it has perfect flow, no flaws (ok, some typos), beautiful structure, and perfect emotion. I loved it. Plus, I developed a liking for Nutella again! Yay! I really do mean that though - this fanfic will have its spot at the top in my fanfic top ten (awesomest fics ever) and I absolutely flat out loved it! PM me if you wanna! It was awesome!
Allycattiny chapter 1 . 10/31/2014
The whole 'cloud barrier' thing is completely copied out of the legend of zelda skyward sword I remember link and zelda having the exact same convosation (obviouly in a dialoge box and obviously one sided (you know cus link doesnt talk)). Oh and palutena isnt a queen she's a goddess so it woud be lady Palutena not queen Great story though! Sorry i was nitpicking I don't mean to just stating the obvious, obviously (I said that too many times in this comment).
SkYeLiMiT chapter 24 . 9/25/2014
That ending was truly an icing to the cake. It's like finishing a great song where it crescendo's at the end and just leaves you happy and satisfied. Amazing job!
Isodrink chapter 1 . 9/18/2014
I'm going to stop it here (ch.10) because I can't agree with your character-interpretations and other content-relevant things. I'm not going to write the whole thing out here because I doubt that I can remain on the lines of contructive criticism if I don't take my time and at the moment I'm not sure if I want to do that. If you want a further explanation what I mean you can ask, otherwise I'd like to remain at the statement that I didn't like the way you set up your setting, your character-interpretations and several plot points so far.

Your writing style by itself was fine though, you can nicely bring out settings and body language in your texts, that's something quite remarkable actually, especially for your first fic.
Bion chapter 24 . 8/14/2014
Oh. My. Gods. This is so effing beautiful. It is a true piece of art. You have done a WONDERFUL job on this story.
Messenger chapter 24 . 8/10/2014
I kinda have to agree. I love this story but I think Kaitlyn ruins the whole story. She is a lot like other OC's in other stories I have read on fanfiction. Your an amazing writer but I think the story would have been more enjoyable if Kaitlyn was less mary - sue , but it's your story and you have a right to make any character the way you want. This was just my opinion. Love the story. Keep up the good work.
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