while the story is good, is also a mess with har to many characters and concepts smoshed together.
it's just a bit of a mess.
but with a bit of tightening and removing some names it has potential to be a decent stand alone sci-fi series.

It's getting too magical for my blood, author. I might bail. Audiences are fickle like that.

...I mean slapping a few names from Harry Potter on things doesn't give you licence to add a cursed magic mask thing to your crossover.

Aw man. I liked the cool murder mystery stuff on the Citadel. Why'd you have to go all Star Warsy crap with the magic mask and anime swordsman? The sheer jrpgness already eclipsed the twist you're pulling with swapping Liara with a vampire (which is a cool idea).

Laying it on a bit thick, there.

Well done, author! You pulled off the murder mystery brilliantly.

Neat assassin.

I notice Benezia doesn't say we killed Shepard. So I'm gonna refrain from booing you as a hack just yet, author.

So he just let the exploding skycar fall on the highway? Thought Jensen was trying specifically to not be a cowboy cop.

Also, go back to the murder mystery. We all know Shep's killer can't be Saren's goons, would be too obvious.
(if it turns out that it really is Saren I'm gonna boo you as a hack)

Cool cyberpunk but what happened to the murder mystery?

Neat start, author. Hope the murder mystery will actually be mysterious.

Sarah Walker isn't who I thought she was.

That seems like a Chuck reference it appears he was working with Cerberus the whole time.

Really enjoying the story

I bet the quarians hate the Omars

I adore this story but I swear every one of your meaningful antagonists are invulnerable bullet sponges