|Reviews for The Wonderful Winston of Oz|
| mark3232 chapter 1 . 4/26/2012
The Real Ghostbusters comic published by Marvel UK once parodied The Wizard of Oz.
| deepfathom chapter 4 . 4/16/2012
Woot! What a clever and funny story! Loooooved it :D
| ThePowerOfFriendship chapter 1 . 3/24/2012
LOLOLOLOLLLO! Ray, you and your epic fails..
| deepfathom chapter 2 . 3/19/2012
Hee hee! I am really loving this! Especially the flying armadillo! :D I almost laughed out loud at that one, but I literally had to stop myself because I'm sitting in a University computer lab at the moment.
Couple quick suggestions:
1. Some of the descriptive sentences are just a tiny bit short or choppy. Maybe consider putting some of them together. These sentences, for example:
"Dana laughed. They finally finished crossing the slime. Scarecrow and Tinman set Dana down."
could be revised to "Dana laughed as they finally finished crossing the slime and set her down."
It might make things flow a little smoother and make it easier to read. :)
2. The part where the point of view switches over the the Ghastly Ghost should probably be separated either by an extra space or something else like the "xxxx"'s I use in my stories. That way, we can tell that the narrative is coming from a different character's perspective. It was just a little confusing how it is right now.
Great job, though. I'm really excited to see what happens next! Keep it up! :D
| deepfathom chapter 1 . 3/16/2012
GAAA! I love this! Such an original idea :)
You are a very good writer. The dialog is really funny and the writing is concise, not too complicated and very clean. You've got the characterization nailed down, too! Even more so considering how well each one of the Ghostbusters slips right into their Wizard of Oz counterparts. Fantastic!
I'm excited to see where this goes! Keep up the good work :D