|Reviews for The Final Mission|
| Morbane chapter 1 . 6/16/2012
In the movie, the "final thing"/"myself" was always a bit mysterious. I really like your take on it here. I also really like the idea of a fantasy-world scene in which each of the "five things" is actually represented.
Some of your vocabulary choices seem a bit odd to me. For example, when you said, "he addressed us with profundity" - what do you actually mean, how are you picturing that?
"My lacy pink undies not concealing much of my adolescent form" - this is not a complete sentence. For that you need a finite verb. For example, you could say, "did not conceal" rather than "not concealing".
| James888 chapter 1 . 5/26/2012
Nice twist. Robert J. Oppenheimer quoted those worlds when he witnessed the first nuclear explosion.. At least they free & saved all those people. A bit sad but very brave of all of them.
| Famaniel chapter 1 . 3/15/2012
You need not to explain your quotes though. Those who understand the twist with the nuclear bomb will know that quote anyway. And those who don't won't get the turn. ;-)