Well-written as always. But, I find myself wondering "Is Spock trying to commit suicide here? If so, why. If not, then why walk away from any chance of help?"

Wow that was beutifull

Beautiful and poignant. I can't help but think he's following the cowardly path, though. Instead of making a decision to accept her or to seek another mate, he picks the non-decision. Instead of dealing with the reality of his life and his needs, he chooses to escape it all. Choosing Gol is not so different from suicide; it is the death of who he is.

Most of the time when I read, I scan the descriptive text, looking for the next action or words. The descriptions bore me and I only care about the interactions. But in your writing, the descriptions are so vivid and so much a part of the story that I read them all and let them build visions in my mind that inform the words and actions of the characters and enhance the entire story. I know I've read this story before (but I've apparently never left feedback), but I'm looking forward to reading it again and letting the imagery bring it all to life. Thank you!

Ahem.

Definition of INCENSE
1
archaic : to cause (a passion or emotion) to become aroused
2
: to arouse the extreme anger or indignation of

About the middle of this chapter, you use the word 'incense' do describe an increase in his need. I understand the feeling you were trying to convey, however, that word is not used correctly. It means: 1) an aromatic gum or other substance producing a sweet odor when burned, used in religious ceremonies, to enhance a mood, etc.; 2) the perfume or smoke arising from such a substance when burned; 3) any pleasant perfume or fragrance. A better word would be 'intensify'.

I am enjoying the story, as I have many of your earlier Spock/Christine stories. They are the only ones in which I am interested. Thank you for them.

You really need to write a sequel to this set during that god-awful movie when they finally meet again.

This was just perfect. Spock's feelings and thoughts were so real, and then Christine is there and even more vivid descriptions of his needs and how she answers them. Just amazing, thank you for writing this.

You've got some amazing description here, of desert and exhaustion and utter desolation. And you even managed to give Spock a real alternative, while making it sound so unpleasant that dying alone in the desert could seem like a better choice...

One word : beautiful!

Wow! Don't know how I missed this story 'til now! I agree with the 10 reviews in before mine-word for word, and yet, I have a little more to add (were it not so late, I'd have a lot more to add!). A-N, I think your writing has matured beautifully, since earlier tales (which I also enjoyed). Again, I agree with all the others have said-I don't usually care for lots of description: I like dialog, story and character development. However, in this piece, your descriptions were not a bit superfluous. They achieved the rare effect of making me feel 'present.' Fantastic! I loved your Spock and depictions of his thoughts and experiences, but what I appreciated even more was your balanced, intelligent approach to Chapel. Almost inevitably, others write her as the static character of TOS, or they rewrite her character all together. You portrayed her as having grown and yet remained true to her nature-KUDOS, thanks, and admiration. Now, down to business, what can we expect next?

Thanks for this wonderful story.

This is the best Pon Farr story I have ever read! Your descriptions of Spock's thoughts, his pain and how he perceives his body and his mind through his Time are described so exquisitely and so realistically that I could see just the events! Fantastic story!

Wow this is like angst and then some. I don't know where to begin. The story does a terrific job of setting up Pon Far as a horrible experience. Moreso than any story I've read to date. It is not the sex as much as it is the madness. The last part of Chapter 7 is ust heartbreaking and at the same time utterly logical. I do admit reading the romance stories, but in reality, I would have to agree with Spock about the problems of having a relationship with someone on a ship, as part of a military organizaiton. I really liked the story.