Reviews for A Flame in the Dark
ALLENDKJSLJJACFKASHILRIO chapter 1 . 4/5/2012
ELLO
ThunderClouds7 chapter 3 . 3/22/2012
don't you EVER say that youre not a good writer. EVER. cause that's not true. you've got a lot of potential, you've just got a few things to work on, like the rest of us. all of them are easily fixed too. try to work on having smaller paragraphs, cause the really big ones are hard to read. and whenever you have a new speaker you have to have a new paragraph. and you should work on your punctuation within quotations. here's an example: We were running down the hallway. "Hey!" I yelled. "Did you hear that?"

but keep writing! and don't say you're a bad writer. cause you're not. have some self confidence, kid!
ThunderClouds7 chapter 2 . 3/21/2012
couple of suggestions. (although i do like it) paragraphs! you need to use more paragraphs! one big one can get really hard to read. also, each time you switch speakers you need a new paragraph. and punctuation goes inside the quotation mark. so yup! but good job so far! i hope you keep going!