Reviews for An Otaku's Wish
EmperorofRome chapter 1 . 12/15/2014
Your back, oh how wonderful and what a great chapter to come back with.
UnflinchingResolve chapter 11 . 12/12/2014
*Does a happy jig*
Yay this story is not dead! Can't wait to see more.
Lonewolf685 chapter 11 . 12/12/2014
Felicity: if Torey ends up in Iscariot I swear-

Anderson: *sprays with water bottle* enough with you!

Not so much a hardy-har-har chapter, but good to see another update from you after so long.
UnflinchingResolve chapter 10 . 3/26/2014
You should continue this story I have enjoyed it immensely.
Fang Okami chapter 10 . 7/7/2013
this is a great chapter rite more! rite more!
NoLife-QueenCarly chapter 10 . 5/15/2013
wow love the ending of the 10th chapter

God damn you've really grown on me. I can't even stay mad at you. i love it

carly- should i be scared of what ur going to do to me
CaptianvKickass chapter 10 . 5/14/2013
Why hello Felicity what are you doing, killing assholes as usual I see. BTW still waiting for that Felicity, Rip, and Krysta three-way
Lonewolf685 chapter 10 . 5/14/2013
I bow to the master of fucked up origins!

Felicity: how sweet of you to give me a cameo :3 I love you guys.

Of all the stuff in the chapter, what surprised me most was that Krysta so easily forgave Zorin for that trip down memory lane.

Felicity: when you get to see me, there is nothing to forgive.
CaptianvKickass chapter 9 . 5/14/2013
Jesus cocksucking Christ randomnesss eveywhere! Good to have this story back, i've been waiting a while for it and it was worth it.
Lonewolf685 chapter 9 . 5/14/2013
It's delightful to have you guys back.
Felicity: worth the wait! And don't touch my Rip!
Wonder what is in Joey's porn stash, and why are there non nazis on base. I look forward to another update within...the next two months!
Guest chapter 8 . 2/9/2013
i have read lonewolfs story and am glad the korean AA guns failed to end him
FollieOfMadness chapter 1 . 1/28/2013
Any and all complaints I have are grammar and punctuation related; therefore, it would be both long-winded and stupid to make a list of all mistakes you made during this chapter.


What I can give is tips. One tip is simple. The detail in this is satisfactory, but not excellent. A simple thing to remember about detail, a simple trick to remember if you have enough detail is this:
Where? As in, have you described the whereabouts?
When? Have you described the sequential order of events?
Why? Have you used an adverb of adjective to 'add' to the scene?
How? Same as above.
Who? Is it clear who is doing what?
What? Are the events clear enough to understand?

I follow that as a simple guideline; you might want to take something from it. :P All Authors learn over time, but taking advice is always a must. Even by those that don't exactly have that much seniority over you. :P
Karly-The Mexican Wolf chapter 8 . 1/25/2013
Whew! Just finished readin' all chapters... And let me say that this story is freakin' AWESOME *with all of its capital letters xD* Keep it up! I'll enter into 'awaiting next chapter mode' while I put the finishing touches to my first English fic :3
EmperorofRome chapter 8 . 1/25/2013
I just have to ask will krysta in later chapters be turned in to a vampire because if she does she will just kick ass.
CaptianvKickass chapter 8 . 1/25/2013
You already know im reading both,other than that nice chapter
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