Nice story. Looking forward to reading the sequel.

That was sad. Please write the sequel, I would like to read it.

a new story sounds great cant wait 2 read it :)

You're doing good. The writing is still vivid and the characters (SM's) are in tune with the way that she meant for them to be. However, not much is known about these, so whatever you want them to be is up to your imagination. Your character seems neutral for the situation, sarcastic, but not content or too cynical. Good job!

good job!

This story is very good and has potential. You have excellent skills and describe everything sufficiently, but I should point out that you may attract more readers if you made the chapters longer.

I'm interested. I will put this one on alert.