What the actual fuck... No seriously what the actual living breathing fuck. This was to good for words I pysically can't describe how amazing this story is, and there's more. I'm suddenly tempted to pray DC gets the rights to Danny Phantom and run this story through young justice.
14/10

I'm very tempted to add 'pixie dust' to this list

This is absolutely amazing. I'm definitely reading the next two.

good story

I just can't read this any more.

I don't know why. The writing is solid enough and the story seems thought out if a little slow paced.

I guess it is the lowbrow humor and character development. (There is no lack of humor and character development, its just so... undramatic and overdone. Like a superhero story...)

Wow, Danny is burning a lot of quest items.
Also, at this point, why not war?

1 so spirit has a spider sense?
2 why would superman let the GIW be heroes for kill stealing his and phantom's work? AND threatening a hero!

I had a thought: given how it's all set up, I know it's not your plan, but it almost seems like Danny in the justice league and Danielle in young justice would make more sense.

1 hell, I ship it.
2 the action scene was as good as your drama, if a bit short

So the elementals like nocturn and vortex aren't s-class?

I know it's not what you have planned, but if his obsession became "seeing them again" then Danny the necromancer could be an interesting direction to go with this.

What ever else may come, you are AMAZING at the dramatic scenes

I always love how ff writers play with the "obsession" idea of Danny phantom in a way the show never did, it has so many great implications. Another great one is "hidden phantom" an x men dp cross, I hope this one is as cool

Ok that was pretty fucked up

Dude… Fucking Worth It…

It was kinda a slow build up, but it had a really good pace. You could see your writing style change every few chapters, it just keeps getting better and better. And don't even get me started on your O.C.'s, man what a trip.

A lot of new and old authors should follow you example in how to REALLY integrate your own character into a plot and changing of the world, a lot of authors will JUST throw a character into a story and not change the it at all, about only 10% of the storyline would actually be different and the remaining 90% would still be the same. 10% is coming from dialogue and physical ACTION, not fighting but actually influencing the world, 5% to dialogue and 5% to action. And the sad part is sometimes it's not even that, they will reshuffle the speeches or actions from one character to the xcross over character and even then there is no REACTION from the villains from the ACTIONS of the new character, other than:

" Hmm, a new hero… this may complicate things… So let change absolutely NOTHING!"

Sorry, went on a bit of a rant.

And the support and villains were exceptional, you really fleshed them out and gave life to them, hmm besides that I don't know what else to say?

Sentence structure was really good, characterization was excellent, your pace was a tad slow but a lot of awesome stories have to build up to where they are going but it really picked up mid way through. And the plot … GOD the integration… I'm not kidding, a lot author can lear from this.

It's be a joy to read this, it the kind where you say "Just one more chapter" … then it's 9:50 AM the next day,
you're hungry, tired and GOD DAMN DO YOUR EYES HURT FROM NOT BLINKING!