|Reviews for Shinigami|
| Leez chapter 5 . 3/6
Sora eh? Or at least that's my guess.
I am really finding myself liking the new Naruto. He's strong, competent, and doesn't have that massive ego that most other ninjas/ people of his level do. His personality is much more suited to his work and his life and his view on humans is something that I can relate to. I'm honestly quite glad that I found this fic.
Please update soon.
| skooglie chapter 5 . 2/27
This is cool, using naruto and bleach elements like this is cool! Naruto is OP to the max and his secrets are also an element that makes this story interesting, especially the unanswered question of where the hell the Bijuu are going? His split personality is good too and quite useful for being able to show naruto as a mindless killing machine without facing the guilt of the whole situation.
Trying to think on it I can normally pick at least some faults in a story, however mabey its because its still short or something else I find none within yours, even the spelling and grammer is good, whoever does your Beta'ring is good, even if its yourself.
Will there be any parings in this story?
Will Naruto beat pain into a pulp?
Will Naruto make Hokage? I hope so
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK YOUR AWSOME!
| tavin93 chapter 5 . 2/17
Oh this is really good. I hope you don't forget and abandon this story. I really look forward to your updates.
| Hikari no Suzaku chapter 5 . 1/10
Considering Naru would never endanger one of his friends, I take it he was successful in removing Kyuu from hiself before going to Gaara for Shukaku. Still, he could've explained it to them, woulda saved him a lot of bitching from Temari
| Hikari no Suzaku chapter 2 . 1/10
Holy cow; he's gonna try to use the life drain technique to steal Kyuubi's life?!
If I had to guess, my best bet would be the SW Life Drain Force technique, but I'm not 100% sure...
| Hells Mercenary chapter 3 . 1/3
Nice to see a new story from you. I'm still hoping on an update with your unlimited chakra story but any update is nice to see.
Interesting story but I'm honestly a bit disappointed that you resorted to the split personality archetype. Split personality is probably what I view to be the cheesiest development when implemented in fiction.
I often view it as being a sort of cop out when it comes to emotional development because it tends to give the main personality an automatic out when it comes to dealing with crisis. Have a possible moral crisis? Shove it off to the Mary sue personality. And by Mary sue I don't mean overpowered or anything but one that can just take emotional punishment.
Another minor criticism. In the middle of this chapter you wrote an inner monologue with the use of '!'. Only to describe the thought with the term dispassionately. It just seems awkward to have a character put so much emphasis on the thought to put ! Only to have it followed by a term to downplay his emotional investment in the observation.
Can't wait to read more and see where this story goes.
| mikaelsommervold chapter 5 . 12/21/2013
| karthik9 chapter 5 . 12/13/2013
It is excellent chapter.I look forward to future updates.
| OoOXylionOoO chapter 5 . 11/23/2013
Great chapter I can't wait to read more :)
| OoOXylionOoO chapter 4 . 11/23/2013
GOod chapter that one.
| OoOXylionOoO chapter 3 . 11/23/2013
I really would like to know the point of view of Naruto of this "second personality".
| OoOXylionOoO chapter 2 . 11/23/2013
SO Naruto just forgive Jiraiya like that ?
Jiraiya is so useless and idiot that he didn't even train Naruto body ?
What the fuck ? It is just impossible. You make Jiraiya an idiot and he is anything BUT that ? I don't understand you.
| OoOXylionOoO chapter 1 . 11/23/2013
Hum not bad...
What I find weird, is that Jiraiya let Naruto go on his mission alone. I don't think he has enough confidence that Naruto will complete a C rank mission all by himself. After all for Jiraiya he is as weak as 4 month ago.
| Guest chapter 5 . 10/17/2013
Please please please PLEASE update zhis is so creative and thrill to read il simply just love it
| Zatarra12345 chapter 5 . 10/16/2013
Type your review for this chapter here...