Well, that was a nice story, thank for sharing it.

I think you have a perfect ending you should change it to "Complete" then start a new if you want to continue

Kaiba means Baby Dragon
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What can i say but so far this story ROCKs your are a dam good writer i feel like i am there.I dont usually comment at this stage but felt I had to.I will definatly check out your other works.

... and they roflstomped happily ever after (or at least until the Black Moon invasion...)

This is an awesome story so far.

It is nice to see a serious Ranma / Sailor moon story.

I find it a little hard to believe that with the powers the martial artists have someone has not been injured or even killed with ryoga rage.

Please update.

this is really awesome i would love to see more of it please continue!

For what I consider one of the best fics ever this is also one of the most under reviewed fics ever. You could tag it complete, but if you have an epilogue for it then please post it as soon as you can. Post even notes or an outline if you feel you can't quite finish it. Thanks.

Very good. A bit too dark for my taste but that doesn't matter. :)

It's very unfortunate that this story has so few reviews, it deserves more.

That was great! I never really thought about Ranma in quite that way before. Guilt, anger, remorse, naivete...they all make up parts of his character, but to bring them out by killing Ryouga and Ukyou...wow. That was brilliant! Very few fics manage to be so in-character and yet so different at the same time, and I think you really pulled it off well. Ok...enough gushing, now for constructive criticism.

As much as I liked how you explored the dark aspect of Ranma's thoughts when I 'spoke' above, I think you could have gone just a touch further with it. It was almost like you skimmed over the grieving to get to the end result. Perhaps Ran-chan should be a bit more introspective after each death?

Another thing that bothers me is the lack of a lead-in to the whole 'demons in Nerima' bit. It is after all a crossover so some things are left to the assumption of the reader, but it was like they just suddenly dropped into the Ranmaverse and it was never discussed how familiar with them the Ranma cast was. They deal with a few in the series, but never anything like what happens in Sailor Moon.

The voices in Kaiba-Ranma's head were nearly impossible to tell apart, and I got the feeling there was a third voice in there from the 'dialog' but was never really able to identify whether or not I was correct. If this was unintentional, I think you might correct it by couching the internals in-paragraph like you did with the speach communication. You might also use italics to highlight the difference between spoken word and thoughts, but it sometimes gets messy when you need to emphasize something and you end up un-italicizing a piece of thought just to make it stand out.

Finally, I wanted to say that this is a good place to end it but I hope you go a little longer. The way Kaiba and Akane seem to rebound at the end is great, but an epilogue would be a good way to show some additional character development for Kaiba and guide the reader's opinion of how their relationship might proceed. If you wanted it to be more open-ended then by all means don't ruin your vision, but...well, it's my review and thus my opinion. Hope it helps!

~ Wrin

An excellent and fun story, and a plot that isn't very common - usually it's Ranma adding to the Senshi (Fist of the Moon) or being one of the Senshi from the beginning (Contrast Match), not replacing one fallen in battle. While this can be a natural stopping point for the story, with Kaiba united in mind as well as body and Akane having made her decision both to stick with Kaiba and become a Senshi herself, it does leave the enemy they've been fighting still hanging out there, it would be great to see how Akane's decision actually worked out in practice, and other players in Ranma's chaotic life besides the now-dead Ryoga and Ukyo haven't shown up yet. All in all, plenty of room for more storytelling, and I'd love to see this continued.

Could use a little detail in some parts and akane/ranma [not kaiba]/nabiki are a bit ooc, but not much. Otherwise a great fic.

I've read this before and it remains a very good story even the second time.

I like this story and i hope that there will be more in the future.

Aww! That was sweet!