|Reviews for Heir to Chaos|
| Lotusbitch chapter 28 . 2/7
How are you doing? Glad to see that you are back with another new chapter for HTC :)
I feel sorry for Caius now that he has found out the truth about Ellinoir and Yeul. I always thought that Yeul was the one who was aware of what she did was wrong for tormenting Light and Ellinoir’s miscarriage. But it appears that Chaos is the one that is behind it all.
I like the part where you describe Caius’s realization on what he has done with his hands out before him and the flames engulfing Paddra. His life never became the same after everything and everyone that he has ever known in his long life as an immortal guardian has turned into a nightmare of chaos, betrayal, death, and despair. Which explains Caius’s sick and twisted desires based on his own selfishness and his distrustfulness towards others.
But there is one question that is left unanswered. Is Caius loyal to Yeul or to Light? Seeing that he has sworn loyalty to the Seeress, Light is of course nothing more than a ‘dead ringer’ of his first wife and the woman who will bear him his heir. So there will be some problems and consequences coming later on now that Light has been ruined by him. I still feel that Light doesn’t deserve to even be under his obligation, although she will be freed once their child is old enough to take of himself. But I know there is still some hope and chance for Caius to regain redemption and begin anew with Light.
As always excellent job on this chapter. Alot of revelations being revealed in the most unpleasant and gruesome way possible where human nature destroys people’s trust in others and the choices they make in order to get what they want. Even if it is for the sake of someone they love and love can be a scary thing too. So I’m looking forward to reading your next suspense-filled chapter and what’s in store for Caius and Light ;)
| i chapter 28 . 2/5
Hello dearest Nirianne with the NEW chapter of HTC which encraved seriously my heart. First thing to say: a HUGE congratulation about your writing, you gave your best, the recite was... beyond words. Honestly.
Oh, speaking about narration, that was the very first thing which shows this story, and especially this chapter, to perefectness. Everything were flowing into... such an harmony, if that's a right way to describe it. I know that is a comment-always-hear, but I cant just... I ... Maybe this is the first time for me, to WANT to review, to GIVE a proper review, but I don't know exactly how to express myself.
Speaking about harmony, how is to read a story, and not only feel, but also to SEE what the writer SEES? That's something I lived through this chapter. The moves were fluid, then, after a second's pass, they errupt into action! So marvelously tighted together, keeping up and refreshing the agony every passing moment. Caius, for example, I didn't only felt his pain, but also the fires of Paddra got refected before my eyes, watching the arrow stabbed on his thigh. Maybe, truthfully, that's the first time to experience something like that.
Going straight to the end; this chapter is its messenger. I don't know how many chapters are still to appear, but, as we got to learn Caius' past -the key and the whole mystery- we got to learn about it in the right time, and many unsolved things got finally solved. Someone may say, why Caius was so cruel to Light, and here we come and confront a different Caius?
What did I see?
I see a Caius to be himself. I see a Caius to be cruel to the ones who are going against his Focus, even if that one is Ellinoir herself. I see a Caius who stayed a servant of Etro and a Guerdian of Yeul after everything. I see a Caius who, after everything, IS human and had loved a woman with his all heart.
Now that he learned the truth from Yeul, I will see a Caius who is no villain to me, but a person who seeks catharsis and a better future... without actually death. THATS a truth to get learned, but you need first to read the whole story to find out this man's heart.
That's the other reason why I loved this chapter, and I can't wait (even if this saddens me) to see HTC getting an ending which it deserves. Do your best, we are by you :)
| Cascade00 chapter 28 . 2/5
Oh god! Now he know s the truth what is he goibg to do next!
| Warrior of Spectra chapter 27 . 11/12/2013
Had a feeling chaos Yuel was up to her normal cruel mischief...makes sense now why "Yuel" killed Ellinoir's two children. Since it wasn't really Yuel...
Nice work as usual :)
| Lotusbitch chapter 27 . 11/11/2013
Looks like Etro’s time is coming to an end. Light who now bears half of her heart is going to carry the burden of the Goddess’s will. The two Uridimmu puppies bringing the bundled infant to her was so adorable, however it was sad that they had to die. Seriously, they’re too CUTE to die! T_T
I have mentioned this a few times before, I hope that Light will have her justice and revenge on Caius soon. Especially, since she is still traumatized by her experience with forcing himself on her.
Chaos Yeul is still her creepy self lol I wonder if what she said was true about Light’s protectiveness over her son will bring an end to her which I hope is wrong. But we’ll see what happens later on.
As always, wonderful job on this chapter. Looking forward to reading your next chapter ;)
| CrystariumRose chapter 27 . 11/11/2013
LOL. I'd kick the Uridimuu pups into the see if they did that to me. That or I would have simply glared at him and cursed them, aha. At first I wa trying to remember what the Gogmagog looked like till I looked it up, it was that beast that Noel and Serah fought. Silly me. Anywho, the way that Light fought him was good, using the chaos to help her win against the Goamagog and also using it as a double edge sword, I like it! I forgot that Light had the ability to control chaos. o-o I like it how the baby just simply still sleeping when his mother was fighting. Made me 'awww' out loud.
When you said that I wouldn't like Yuel in this chapter, GIRL! I DON"T LIKE HER! Lol. Chaos Yuel to be exact. I was like 'oh shit!' when it was Chaos Yuel who killed Ellinoir's two pregnancy. Mixed feelings right there TT Asdfjkl; worse mistake she ever made?! I sense something chaotic coming soon. I should get my feelings ready, lol. LIGHT PROTECT YO BABY.
That is all xD
| DemonExorcist12 chapter 1 . 11/11/2013
| Cascade00 chapter 27 . 11/10/2013
| i chapter 27 . 11/7/2013
Hey Nirianne, I'm so glad you're back! You're back with a BEAUTIFUL chapter continuing the story of Heir To Chaos, with such an intrigue!
The first comment I wanted to make about this one, is that many questions are answered and many things are settled. First things first, Etro made a stunning intro to the whole chapter, with her inner monologue which I came to love so terribly much. She waits for Lightning to come and safe her, but still, she denies to refuse her power as a goddess refusing to die because of a ''mortal'' woman, who doesn't still come to sacrifice her heart. Still, I loved mostly the turmoil of her emotions, the anguish behind her mask of pride, the pain surging from her dying form. Somehow, she reminded me of Cosmos (In dissidia) when she said everything is going to get swallowed in the darkness. (Don't mind me, I'm just a bit stuck with Dissidia this time, I wonder, have you played it? :)
After the monologue, we are still wondering if trully Lightning is going to give her heart as she wanted.
The most surprising fact, Lightning doesn't feel New Bodham as her home. No. As time passes, more and more she comes one with death, one with Chaos, as much as with the timeless realm of Valhalla. As Caius himself had showed her when they first met in ''Nothing to Lose''.
Then, there comes the big fight with the Gogmagog. Light repeated Caius' word of commanding the Chaos, or it's just me? Even if she doesn't want it, I think she feels more and more attached to him. (Where is Caius anyway? I am lost a bit...) :)
I liked the idea about the Chaos' double edged effects. Light should be really careful using that. I loved the power of your writing, you expression and the words which you used. Even some of them were ''heavy and lyrical'' you used them rightly and beautifully.
The last part, is actually unlocking the mystery of the story... partially. So, Chaos Yeul is behind everything, huh? Really I hated that creepy version of Yeul from FFXIII-2, but I though she was a Chaos strange reincarnation. Ah! You just brought in my mind the noval FFXIII Fragments After. I think it;s translation is out. If you can find it, go and read it!
Now, mystery and more mystery passes with us, as we are all shocked to learn which is going to be her role. I can't wait to read the continuation of it! Please update soon, sweetie!
| i chapter 26 . 10/28/2013
Hey Nirianne, where are you? :(
| Lotusbitch chapter 26 . 9/10/2013
I see that you have updated your fanfic with a new chapter now, which is a good thing xD
Since Lightning now bears half of Etro's heart, she'll probably will bear the burden of protecting her and the world as well by sacrificing her body in exhange with a piece of Etro's legacy. I'm happy to see that Caius has finally realized on what he has done to Light which was very satisfying. The guy always gets away without getting his hands dirty, so him feeling remorseful is enough for me to do justice for Light xD
I'm also happy that Light is able to meet with Serah again, although it is a eternal time paradox which is neverending. Every tragedy will repeat itself over and over again with no end to Light's suffering as well as for everyone else that is involved.
Anyways, thank you for the wonderful chapter. It is a bit depressing, but it gives some hope for the characters to find a future where everyone can indeed live and smile with happiness in their hearts. So I will be looking forward to your next future story of this unforgettable tale as well as the release of the final game for the XIII series. I really hope that Square will have a happy ending as promised. (Maybe with Caius and Light together...or not XD;)
| Cascade00 chapter 26 . 9/10/2013
Damm! This was so good! It made me craving for more!
| CrystariumRose chapter 26 . 9/9/2013
I immediately squealed when Caius was holding his new born son! I really like the moment that he had with the baby. So cute! So then, Lightning will be a demi-god like Caius? Since she's 'gonna' recieve Etro's heart and the heart of Chaos? Will more like she did. Had to re-read the passage way.
Ah man, I would do the same thing as Lightning, crawling out of bed to search for my son. I like the little family moment that they had. So nice, lol. Speaking of family moment, it was nice for Lightning to reunite with Serah.
Ahh! Noel! Gah! WHY DIDN"T YOU LEAVE ALREADY! I was nearly at the edge of my seat when Noel didn't leave and the Uridimmus came along and brought the bundle. ahh! Dx Me no likey! My feelings! ASDFJKL;
Can't wait for the next chapter! xD
| i chapter 26 . 9/8/2013
Hey! Hey! Nirianne, welcome back! You've made my day with this new breathing chapter of HTC! I'm so glad that you've made it and you are back with us! I'm so happy! I knew of course that you were not going to give up, so I was keeping waiting, and now, wow! The most pleasant surprise:)
Now, that you're back, I believe you are strong to continue this MARVELOUS story! I hope that everything is alright now. Look, I read your profile, but I didn't want to sent a public review like this, but a personal one. I'm sorry, though. Due to some problems I can't sign in so... Yeah...
But it doesn't matter now, I'm so glad you're back!
(Forgive my excitement, but I love you soooo much! Like all your fans do!)
Okay, okay, I will cry later, but now lets focus on this chapter. First; the title. It somewhat reminded me or our ''Reunion'', and surely, it's a beautiful title, appropriate for this soft and heart chapter. Ready to open a door to light, to hope, to happiness and the final adventure.
Then, I'd like to go to Caius. Oh, dear! I was sure he was going to be such a good father. As he was with Yeul. All the scenes with him and the child were so touching. Singing to his son, confessing his mistakes with Lightning, really, this was so heartbreaking. About Light, yeah, I don't really believe she is going to have serious problems with her son, as she grew up Serah. And, admitting that Caius is her husband, that's something. We are making progress! Especially now that Etro showed her that Serah is alive. But... what will Caius choose in the end? Yeul, or his family? Will he risk to lose again that which is most dear to him, to just make Yeul to live forever? Etro, is impatient about him to harbor Lightning the half of the heart. Maybe, that's why she wants Lightning to go to the temple. We will see...
But, I trust Caius. And Etro will take care of Yeul somehow. Both will be happy. I don't know, it's just this chapter filled me with sparkling hope, and made me to see things better. Thank you Nirianne for that.
About Serah and Noel, the scene you described, it reminded me somewhat of when Serah and Noel found Lightning into the ''dead'' Bodhum. Oh, please don't ask me about chronologies, I can't really remember them all, but I am sure that 700 AM is the one. Anyways, things are changing. Here is a completely different story. I can't imagine nobody's end. But! Noel came to see something that he DIDN'T exprect to see. Light's son. And he knew the father... ah but that's, terrific! I can't wait to see how Noel will react towards Caius. (But surely I don't want the last to die! :(
By the way, the Uridimmus' idea was so nice! I expected though, Caius to realise something. But, anyway...
Wow! As we realise here, Caius helds more secrets from Lightning. Lightning has now to take Caius' half heart, and both have now to take care of the next Heir to Chaos. Thinking of this, the story has... I believe... many things to clear out yet. So... dearest Niranne, I want you to bring this to an end (with the way you know better; by taking our breaths away :) but MOSTLY I wish for you to be alright. Sometimes, stories can wait. First, it's us who must fight for hope, light and love. Keep your good job up, teach us many things, and bare your beautiful smile and fight! Like Lightning. Our hero, isn't she?
I want you to be strong as her. I want this story, bearing your sign to be done! All your fans are with you!
And yes! We are also waiting for the BEAUTIFUL FFXIII- Lightning Returns.
(By the way, I didn't say anything about your writing style, because it was just... PROFESSIONALLY AWESOME! I mean it! I think, you already know this, you are a beautiful and amazing writer. You don't stop surprising me. So...not much words, I was clear. BEAUTIFUL! )
Kisses! And I will make patience until the next!
| CrystariumRose chapter 25 . 6/4/2013
They are finally a family!
I felt like tons of boxes fell on top of me when Light gave birth and Caius was behind her doing his best to comfort her. You did the right choice Light! I'd do the same too if it would bring my kid back to life. Hope you update soon!
Oh! Are you also gonna update Dohnovan also? I'm like literally waiting for the next chapter. Haha. Take your time in updating. Forever a fan of your writings!