|Reviews for SpIdER MAnnn aTACKT 1|
| Suki-Alanna chapter 1 . 5/22/2012
I just read this, and I think it was pretty good, but there's a lot to improve. For example, a huge block of text like that is hard to read, so you should space it more.
Also, you should probably read over it again to make sure you wrote "Mary Jane" instead of "jary mane." Of course, you don't have to take my suggestions, I just wanted to help if you're interested in writing more often.
One more thing... what's a snikt?
| Newoaf chapter 1 . 3/28/2012
This guy is a genius. I bet he also has a gigantic shlong.
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/28/2012
needs more sex
| Bob The Other Zombie chapter 1 . 3/28/2012
this iz rly good its rly interesting i hope u continue it