|Reviews for Harry Potter and the Greatest Gift|
| Priya Ashok chapter 13 . 2/22
Excellent so far. Thank you.
| NaiaLune chapter 13 . 2/3
I really do adore this and I really hope that you will update soon!
| valmente chapter 13 . 1/29
Ignore Benjamin Goldberg's review. Your story is great and having to overcome the whole "how to raise a baby" thing and dumbledore's persistent lack of sense when it comes to magical baby custody arrangements (not to mention, you know, defeating voldemort) there is enough trouble in Harry's life. I hate stories where bad things keep happening over and over again to the protagonist. It gets boring and too much like a soap opera.
Also, it sounds to me like he has a typical ministry opinion on magical creatures being less than wizards. Hermione should have a talk with him. With all of the goblin rebellions I imagine they'd have more rights than most creatures because they demanded them. Your portrayal of the goblins is perfectly acceptable to me. They may be a little more helpful than canon but I prefer that to the negative portrayals other fanfics give them. Besides I'm sure they're paid handsomely for their services.
| littlespite chapter 13 . 1/27
Well that was good story so far and i need more so please update...
| KonohasBlackReaper chapter 13 . 1/23
Quite well written... Waiting for more... Come back to this fic soon.
| Rosario2634 chapter 13 . 1/18
next chapter of harry potter and the greatest gift please!
| Shadow Eclipse chapter 13 . 1/11
love it! love love love
i just hope Harry doesn't end up with Ginny
She's just so immature
| xxnarufanxx chapter 13 . 12/8/2013
very nice story! i am looking forward to the next chapzer
| Slightly Phycotic chapter 13 . 12/7/2013
I really like this fic, its very unique! I always thought that Harry would make a great dad. I find it ironic that Harry is getting more done on his own than he would be with the Order. I hope you update soon all your stories are wonderful!
| jil chapter 13 . 11/30/2013
Please update soon.
| Paloma Gomes chapter 13 . 11/28/2013
| Demiwizard 4 chapter 13 . 11/8/2013
This is really good :)
If u chose 2 continue writing it I'll glady read it! It's soooooo sweet :) :)
| Alaiana Potter chapter 13 . 11/4/2013
I like the story so far and o have to ask if collin's question about Harry being pregnant had anything to do with how many mpreg stories there are for hp or was it just random...also why exactly did fred swar loudly?
| Benjamin Goldberg chapter 3 . 10/27/2013
No offense, but too many good things are happening to Harry! If you want an engaging story, take a character who you love, and throw disasters (or at least, inconveniences) at him, and show us readers his strength of character, how he copes, how he overcomes.
I love the idea of sixteen year old Harry deciding to grow up for the sake of his cousin Rose, and be more responsible than the Dursleys, more responsible than Dumbledore (what kind of nut leaves a baby on a doorstep, anyway?!), more responsible than the Weasleys.
But Rose shouldn't magically make things better. A baby is a big responsibility, and responsibility makes people grow up, and behaving as a grown up can make other problems easier to deal with... but the baby itself is a lot of work, and those other problems don't (shouldn't) go away on their own.
Based on the books, I expect the Gringotts Goblins to be surly and avaricious, rather than nice and helpful. They're not going to help unless they can make a profit. If the goblins had a brief chat with each other in Gobbledygook, secretly deciding how to fleece the obviously young and naive Harry of as much money as they possibly could, it would be more believable.
Next, things like custody of children are generally handled by the government, not by bankers. They might have copies of the forms, and be able (with some $incentive$) to help Harry fill them out and file them, but the forms would have to be filed with the ministry of magic. Naturally, this would result in people in the ministry learning about Rose faster than they otherwise would.
Also, considering how goblins aren't legally allowed to own wands, there's no reason why they'd be able to remove The Trace from Harry's wand... assuming that The Trace is, in fact, attached to the wands, rather than to the young wizards... or even to the homes or neighborhoods of young muggleborn wizards. How the Ministry of Magic tracks the use of underage magic was never clearly shown. Make a decision on how it works in *your* story, and then be consistent.
Personally... I expect the Ministry of Magic to not make things easy for anybody, least of all for Harry.
It would be a more interesting story if the underage magic tracking spell were to remain intact, on Harry or his wand, and someone from the DMLE visited him and Rose in Harry's new home, after Harry casting a spell there (due to an injury, or to Rose being in danger, or to revert some accidental magic done by Rose, etc). Then, show us how Harry deals with the officials being nosy, noisy, officious, and offensive... and perhaps with Rose throwing a tantrum and accidental magic due to being frightened by the strangers.
Why Gringotts would happen to own several wizarding properties? Given how the Ministry treats the non-humans in general, and Goblins in particular, it's quite possibly illegal to own property that's not underground, except for the bank entrance.
Regardless of how the goblins got a hold of those properties, I would not expect them to sell them. Goblins have a rather peculiar sense of ownership - as far as they're concerned, anything once owned by goblins will *always* be owned by goblins, even if (as in the case of Gryffindor's sword), over a thousand years have passed. This includes things which were sold by goblins to wizards. A goblin might say he's selling you something, but he'll never ever ever ever really mean it, and instead mean that he's renting it to you. Yes, this is absurd, and means that the goblins have basically insane cultural values, but that's how the original story was written.
I could go on, but you get the idea. Bad things have to happen to good people, or else the story's not exciting.
Another problem you might want to heap upon our hero, is a more limited budget. Lots of problems can be made to go away if you throw enough money at them - don't give Harry that option. Just because the movie chose to depict Harry's vault as being like Scrooge McDuck's vault (ok, I exaggerate), doesn't mean it's has to be a walk-in room. Given how vague the book's description of the vault was... if you went with a stone compartment who's inside is about the size of a school trunk, it would still be a lot of money, but not necessarily enough to buy a house (especially if lots of it is sickles and knuts).
| Paddy Gurl chapter 13 . 10/14/2013
Love it cant wait to read more