|Reviews for Macaline's struggle|
| Amitydoesntkill chapter 2 . 4/6/2012
For the story itself, it would help a lot if you explained the back story to Marceline. The story itself just jumped into the action without introducing the character well, especially since it is an OC.
For your writing, make sure that the words you put in are correct! There are a few mistakes when it comes to the actual words and grammar. (Nothing that can't be improved though!)
It is a promising story, just make sure you develop the story and why they are in the situation to make it better :)