|Reviews for The Clock's Boy|
| Guest chapter 6 . 7/17/2012
That was a very nice ending! I'm so sorry I didn't review sooner.
I love the descriptions and the dialogue seemed very natural. I also like the idea that the automaton does seem a bit humane in this chapter, as if it were a human itself. Machines aren't supposed to feel guilt or regret, yet this one does. It has a hidden concept in it, I think.
There are some phrases that could be changed. For example, "The automaton was looking intensely to Hugo" should be "The automaton was looking intensely at Hugo". Also, try to refrain from using "and" at the beginning of sentences.
Well, that's basically it. Seeing as you didn't put "The End" or "Fin" at the end of this chapter, I hope that means you're going to write more?
| louisalibi chapter 6 . 5/7/2012
Aw ! I'm waiting for the next chapter, this is a so good story :)
| TheBFG chapter 5 . 4/15/2012
I like the storyline so far, but I hope Chapter 5 isn't the end. There has to be more to it... there has to be a catch to the automaton's deal. I'll leave it to you to figure out- it would be something I would look forward to reading. :)
Overall, I like the plot and several spots have very vivid figurative language. There are some grammar mistakes here and there, but that's fine. I would love to read more. CONTINUE PLEASE! :D
| louisalibi chapter 2 . 4/2/2012
Wow, That's a bit weird, but very good too ! I want a 3rd chapter ! Will there be one ?