Reviews for battle of the bands
JealousYouCantHearTheVoices chapter 7 . 7/19/2012
I am sooooooo sorry if i sound rude but this story is kinda messed up. I mean you got a good plot but you are putting too much stuff in one paragraph and trying to work it out with the weirdest of things... example: A love potion
Panda-Goddess chapter 7 . 7/10/2012
its good but theres alot of fixing that it needs mostly spelling check and caps thats all but its good
Jacovy chapter 6 . 7/10/2012
Okay! I don't mean to be mean but... I COULD BARELY READ WHAT YOU WERE SAYING! Is Clikoki your OC? Because your making too many people like her and that's not fair. I can't even READ your sentences. Please get a beta reader. You put it in one whole paragraph that I could BARELY read. You don't even bother capitalizing their names. Or spell them right. Don't make every one like your OC. That's unfair. Gaara pretty much wouldn't like her. You put that people loved people they didn't even meet. KARIN DOESN'T EVEN KNOW CHOUJI! Kin doesn't know Shino, and Sai doesn't know Tayuya!

xBitterSweetDreamsx chapter 7 . 4/11/2012
I agree with honeyangel123, im not saying that's it's bad to have many ideas, but your first few chapters was rather list like. If you want describe the characters, you should write about them separately, for example havin one paragraph just dedicated to describing Sakura. 2)There are quite a few spelling mistakes (typos) in there, make sure you re read your chapters before posting it. 3) Finally, you need to work on the structure of your fic. You need to put in more paragraphs, this would make the story

Much clearer.
HoneyAngel123 chapter 1 . 4/7/2012
This is to confusing...u put i to many ideas in one paragraph and it is kinda short