|Reviews for The Forgotten Contract|
| WerewolfHokage chapter 28 . 8/21
Excellent story! An unusual pairing in Harry and Susan but you write it so well, and I loved the "left-field-ness" of Riddle getting caught between the vanishing cabinets and passing that way.
| Romily chapter 28 . 8/16
I really enjoyed your story, but to make it even more enjoyable i suggest you go through it once and straighten out all the mixed up their, they're, there and here and hear and were, wear and we're. Sometimes those mix ups can be a little confusing
| The Rouge Captain chapter 23 . 7/19
this is a fantastic read, I absolutely loved it!
| Marmot95 chapter 28 . 6/15
just another awesome story from you.
By now I've read 3 of your storys and I'm flabbergasted... you simply write spectaculary awesome... of cause there are some minor mistakes here and there but they vanish in the wole story!
I hope you keep on writing as, like I already told you in an other review, you've realy got talent and it would be a shame to waste this talent...
Hopefully till soon...
| Myrddin Emrys II chapter 1 . 6/9
A beautiful story
| Kingofclubs8129 chapter 28 . 5/10
Interesting story. I like Susan and Harry but I'm more a Haphne guy I think. I like your writing regardless though.
| kauthreader chapter 28 . 5/4
okay, great so far but I NEED to start reading the sequel...I hate cliffhangers, but I understand that you need time to write it...just can't wait now for it to post
| williamhaysjr chapter 14 . 5/4
need to focus on who your characters are when you are writing and where they are and try not to mix them up like Malfoy and Harry in that last paragraph.
| ArielSakura chapter 1 . 4/27
I rhave ally enjoyed this story, you're a fantastic writer. Thank you
| Undeniably Uzumaki chapter 24 . 4/26
So I'm just going to point this out, but you repeat events a fair bit. Like the love issue. In the confession of the engagement they both say they love the other. You e done this a few times like with robes for school from the alley or other things. I'm not sure if it's just because you forgot or if you are actually trying to make your characters into idiots. If it's the former come back and fix these inconsistencies and if it's the latter I have to ask why, as it makes no sense.
| Undeniably Uzumaki chapter 5 . 4/26
So this is a pretty good story, but it has a major flaw too. The characters reactions are too mature. In particular, Harry is too mature. The fact is that Harry is the type to lash out against things in his life being controlled, and anyone would be lashing out about this. No one can argue he needs to grow up about something like this, because that's unfair and disregards him as a human being. What has happened is he's been told "You have to be the one to kill a dark wizard so skilled most can't even say his name for fear, and then even if you somehow win you will have to get married to someone without even the slightest say in it. Where is his desire to avoid it? To see the contract to at least TRY and break it. Every contract has a separation clause. It might be extreme but until he tries how can he know? And yes, he might think she's attractive, but in his shoes I'd never admit it, and might even basically say the opposite. His life has been miserable until now, and now he's told one of his greatest desires, to have a family of his own, is going to be corrupted by a forced marriage. People lash out. They don't wallow in confusion just because "it's not as bad as it could have been."
| G the Headmaster chapter 18 . 4/20
A smart Ron.
| G the Headmaster chapter 11 . 4/20
Dum de dum dum!
| G the Headmaster chapter 2 . 4/19
I can tell that I'm going to like this story!
| Leroy-San chapter 28 . 3/20