Reviews for Bad Luck Sonic
InsertUnoriginalPenNameHere chapter 2 . 4/6/2012
This is really good and I see you missed a couple punctuation. But its also really hard to read. Try separating the lines. And make paragraphs. And abit grammar errors, but all in all, I can't wait for chapter 3 :)
Yuli Ban chapter 1 . 4/5/2012
Interesting concept, but I didn't really see any development. Finally, separate each paragraph when a new speaker says something.

"Yo, Eggman! Didn't your mom ever tell you not to overpower your opponents," Rocket asked. "My mother never said that," Eggman replied. "Fair enough. Time for me to kick some robot ass," Rocket said before he mowed some of the Swatbots Shadow and Rouge were fighting.

vs.

"Yo, Eggman! Didn't your mom ever tell you not to overpower your opponents," Rocket asked.

"My mother never said that," Eggman replied.

"Fair enough. Time for me to kick some robot ass," Rocket said before he mowed some of the Swatbots Shadow and Rouge were fighting.

The second's way easier to read.