|Reviews for After the Ashes|
| Runawaymetaphor chapter 13 . 7/28/2012
"He could tell that Talith wanted to speak, knew that she must - but there had been too many betrayals already and she would not readily add her own to the ones committed against her. She would need to be told that her oath no longer bound her, or else, be given a reason to break it."
A crushing image of a tired soldier, one whom solace may never find. I can't help but put it beside the image of yet another, seemingly so long ago, if always present in my mind's eye:
"And in a simple but elegantly furnished study on a leafy estate in California, a retired admiral, holding hands with his wife, felt a burden lift from his shoulders - one he had carried for many years."
May peace find more of those who work for the greater public good. And may those who would see beyond ideological agenda, election cycles, and crude self-interest finally be rewarded with respite- somewhere warm, and always green.
| ChicoryChickadee chapter 12 . 7/18/2012
This chapter reminds me of the Monean incident. I don't know if that was your intention or just my mind drawing its own conclusions. The situations are vastly different, yet similar. On Monea, the inhabitants were destroying a natural phenomenon with their technology for their own benefit. Here, The Denarian and Talari are facing a devastating natural phenomenon and are willing to use the technology of others for their benefit. Granted, without help both planets would face destruction.
It's interesting how one planet was being destroyed by technology and another needs technology to save it, yet in both situations, politicians are willing to sacrifice lives in order to remain in power. It's ironic to see how in both cases, neither party is willing to let nature take its own course; not because of the effect that it would have on their planets or even the welfare of their people, but because of the selfish lust for power.
| Guest chapter 12 . 7/17/2012
That, my dear, was one hell of a chapter. My mind is still reeling from it. I love how responsible Tom is now, and how cheeky yet smart Harry is as his First Officer. And Janeway. Still love her :)
But yeah, wow.
| winjan chapter 12 . 7/16/2012
Good for Harry to have something to shoot at. The confession made my head spin
| CrlkSeasons chapter 12 . 7/16/2012
"Ensign no more, Harry."
Well done, Harry! But poor Harry may never advance far enough in Starfleet to ever escape from one of his mother's well-meaning letters to his commanding officer. This was a welcome bit of lightness.
But, as your plot unfolds, you have the courage to face the dirt that is revealed under the rug.
"Loyalty, it turned out, was a fickle mistress ..."
"No, the promise had been given for the most simple thing of all: a cut of the profits."
Self-interest makes such sordid, shortsighted souls, doesn't it? It makes you want to find the nearest shower just to get clean again.
"The sad and quiet girl who temporarily shared his daughter's room demanded no less."
"Will somebody just tell me why?"
Sadly, that is always the question we are left with, and there may be more sacrifices to be made before all of this can end.
| TheNaggingCube chapter 12 . 7/16/2012
YES! Oh this is so good. Love love love the build from Talith. Wow that was amazingly painful and heart rending. A begrudging respect and tolerance from Tom for her.
| waffenmac chapter 12 . 7/16/2012
Great chapter glad you updated
| Guest chapter 12 . 7/16/2012
There it is, the universal tendency to ignore science that doesn't fit your own world view.
At the moment I feel with Talith, because her using this weapon was nothing more than a calculated move while she believed she was doing the right thing.
I think the overall problem are the politicians, and I'm not even talking about the ones that just padded their creditlines.
The good thing is that now they are forced to work together. Millions of people had to die for it but at least the greater problem is clear
| Guest chapter 12 . 7/16/2012
Ooooooooooh Wow. I didn't see this coming. Fantastic as always honey.
Haha I think the Olympics have given themselves a Black Card. The organisation sucks and right now... it looks like the Olympics vomited all over my town. I'm 400 miles from London.
| angelscatie chapter 12 . 7/16/2012
Great chapter like usual. At least one of the warring planets realized they needed Starfleets help. Can't wait to see what us coming next.
| Runawaymetaphor chapter 12 . 7/16/2012
"And as the final part of his calculations, Naldar had counted on the Federation to make happen for him what direct efforts had failed to achieve - all without once tipping his hand to anyone except, Kathryn suspected, a very small number of his inner circle. In the meantime, Karon for his part was guilty of deliberate, willful blindness – allowing the habit of war to obscure a vision of a future in which both worlds were doomed, and refusing early peace overtures that might have saved a third of his people in the short term, and all of them in the long.
What was it with politicians …?"
Babe, that is the most crushing thing you've ever written. For reasons of truth I have not the space to go into here. But on a lighter note? The scene below is now on top ten list of Fun S- Alpha Wrote...
""Free for all," he muttered to himself barely concealing an eager grin. Lieutenant Commander Harry Kim, First Officer of the USS Voyager, in his first solo fire fight. Good thing his mother wasn't aware of what he was doing – she would doubtless send Tom Paris a nasty comm."
You've come along way, Harry Kim.
| Runawaymetaphor chapter 11 . 7/12/2012
"Nacheyev was right: the man was a natural diplomat. Who was it that had said, 'a diplomat is one who can cut his neighbour's throat without having his neighbour noticing'? Kathryn braced herself as Tom engaged."
I assume you know all the jokes I would like to make about both this and your fondness of for that particular Lie quote. So. . . Fill them in here.
| waffenmac chapter 11 . 7/9/2012
damn a cliffhanger great chapter too
| snow6835 chapter 11 . 7/8/2012
Real life has impeded on my ability to delve too deeply into thinking what the game changer could be. So I shall eagerly await what the next chapter brings in explaining the many layers being built. Great job as always and love love love that Tom's way of thinking is rubbing off on others under his command!
| beautyofsorrow chapter 11 . 7/5/2012
"Tom's eyes flew up, then narrowed before he shook his head again, this time in silent admiration. He should have known there'd be a price to pay for wringing a concession out of the admiral … Much later, he would tell his wife in the privacy of their quarters: And just like that, Bee, she remembered – she's still the Queen."
These sentences... they remind me why I find myself teetering between admiration and disgust when it comes to Janeway, and why I so often fall to the disgust side. She really needs to meet her match and fall a couple notches. One of these days.
(Dax holds up trash can lid to shield any oncoming missiles.)
ANYWAY. Great chapter! Seeing as I'm politically incompetent and terrible at following plots, I'm looking forward to the reveal!