|Reviews for Bring Down The Sky|
| Guest chapter 6 . 5/2
| lestibur chapter 11 . 4/21
nice chapter , great work man :)
| BraveVesperia chapter 2 . 4/12
good so far but I hope naruto manages to use his jutsu again, was a bit sad he got nerfed
| Queen of the Snow-Wolf chapter 11 . 4/8
looks awesome cant wait to read more
| koper chapter 3 . 4/7
| koper chapter 2 . 4/7
Wow they took his friend geth and experiment on him and he join them 0
| shugokage chapter 11 . 4/6
Great job on this chapter!
| Joe Lawyer chapter 2 . 3/26
For someone whose purpose is resource gathering, he left those Batarians dead on the ground and failed to loot their bodies. Weapons, omnitools, omnigel, money they have on their bodies, maybe even a ship somewhere, etc., all would be valuable to him. He just left it behind. Seems stupid.
I understand what Naruto is going to get paid, the engine core, but he didn't ask at all how his team would be paid for the job. Don't you think that's strange? People don't take missions for free. He also didn't ask for the identity of Aria's agent, the whole purpose of the mission, or even a picture of the agent. Another thing missing. You can't skip such fundamental steps and still have your readers see it all as believable. Flesh this out in a reasonable fashion.
"Phantom of the Terminus Systems?" Cool title, but what does it actually mean? What support would Aria provide? What tasks might she ask? Will he still be able to take paying jobs as needed? Lots of questions left unanswered.
| Joe Lawyer chapter 1 . 3/26
Good start so far with an interesting premise.
I wonder if Naruto and Jack will look back on their arrival on Omega and realize how young and stupid they were when they already had a ship that they could have used to go anywhere else. Probably a pretty good one too that would have been useful to own or sell to someone else.
| Ranmaleopard chapter 11 . 3/22
This is just awesome I can't wait for more!
| tdychko chapter 11 . 3/20
You can't end on that!
| Guardian of the Inheritance chapter 11 . 3/17
Great stuff! Good job keep it up
| BBWulf chapter 11 . 3/16
| Arkisenn chapter 2 . 3/15
Should do more research on ME. Azure is a term for an asari's nether regions. Thus that ship they're on would be translated as flaming crotch
| chris1606 chapter 11 . 3/15
If you did... Citadel's fucked. Unless you have some plan to go around the "Sovereign's connected with Saren" issue, somehow.