I really like this :)
Unless I haven't looked well enough, I don't think there's a story about what happened between Bex & Zach during the Summer.
Besides this one at least.
So yeah... CONTINUE THE STORY!

Oh my goodness! You've got talent girl! (my only critic is puntuation and capitalization,)I want to read more of your work!

WRITE MORE! Who else are you planning to do?

This is so well written! Write more!