|Reviews for Quarian with a Shotgun|
| Cayar chapter 3 . 2/13
Hahahahahaa! Who else could love Shepard's driving? She would be a rollercoaster natural, and probably a decent pilot too.
| anotamous chapter 13 . 2/7
answering some of your questions
1. the Normandy VI is the one that talks to you about the fusion torches in the beginning, the captions even state 'Normandy VI'
2. The Mako can generate its own gravity using a mass effect field. allowing it to lighten or weigh itself down to maximize maneuverability.
3. I completely agree with your assessment of Liara as a mary sue. That said in Mass Effect 3 after becoming the Shadow Broker she proves to be a very poor Shadow Broker, being unable to warn you about or preempt any kind of attack by cerberus/reapers/leviathan (she mentions making a false assumption about the asteroid facility under Leviathans thrall) at all, like the original shadow broker was famous for being able to do. the most whe is able to provide you with is an armor modkit, a few war assets and worthless tidbits of information, nothing truly useful.
| demonicnargles chapter 13 . 2/7
I like this chapter. Shepard is angry, but not out of control. And seeing Liara's perspective it kinda neat, as is the idea that, even on the Normandy, she was working on an information network. Which makes more sense than the sudden career change that would otherwise seem to be the case. And I like how you showed that she is still somewhat new to the whole 'soldier' thing.
Keep up the good work.
| Endrius chapter 13 . 2/6
Ashley isn's so jealous if you make things with her clear from the start. The rest was ok.
| anotamous chapter 10 . 9/29/2013
"Is it realistic for somebody with such a severe and physically limiting disease to be allowed into service for the Alliance? Most certainly not."
Actually this is only partially true. If your skill set is in high enough demand the military (at least the US one) will waive certain physical requirements. If for example you were the foremost expert on drone programming and security and a quadriplegic the military might let you in. It is also dependent on the situation, if world war 3 broke out the vast majority of physical and mental requirements would likely be scrapped as bodies would be needed far more than fit bodies.
| Octo8 chapter 10 . 8/5/2013
What happened to the review page? Anyway, sorry, must've missed the update notice for this chapter somehow, so I'm lagging a chapter behind.
Anyway, I can see both Shepard and Tali simply ignoring all health problems, so as to not be a problem to others. Well, that is, in Shepard's case it's probably also a bit of a case of machismo, heh.
Joker betting with the crew on Shepard's prospective lovelife is something that definitely fits square in his character. I really like the idea, and of course it's a neat tool for the story's general idea to have a look at Shepard and Tali from the outside. And the interaction between the two really fits. It clearly is enough to give Joker an idea about what's going on, without it being over the top. A well considered medium, as most always in your story.
As for your author notes - well, the Normandy has a marines detachment (we see the guys on Virmire, unloading the nuke, and in fact Shepard was leading them before he took over the ship). So it makes sense that some room for physical exercise should be provided to them. OTOH, the Normandy is a mere frigate, and a stealth frigate at that. It may not be apparent, what with the extravagant wide stairs, Shepard's large cabin and other designs flaw like that, but one would think on such a ship they would try to minimize space use. But then, comparing the Normandy in dock (like on Feros or Noveria) with its interior, the ship is actually bigger on the inside already anyway. The Alliance must have gotten their hands on some Timelord tech ;)
As for Joker, well, I guess the Alliance being politically correct could explain his position. But I don't really like that explanation. I mean, even if Joker could get into the military by PC considerations, he would never be selected for an elite mission like the Normandy's. My take, personally, is that the Alliance Navy is simply more flexible than many modern militaries, and with an approach that favours specialists over generalists. Hence also the ratings like N7, which originally was not an unit as presented in ME 3, but just the top score in SpecOps work. And Joker is probably 7 in whatever letter denotes piloting. He may well be the best pilot of the Navy, period. And given that, I think the Navy chose to ignore his physical shortcomings, reasoning that after all pilots aren't meant to do physical work anyway, or get into face to face battles.
As for his sexuality, I do wonder if there aren't such things as virtual reality and direct neural interfaces in ME. I mean, it's 2183! And incidentally, such technology would also help Shepard and Tali...
In ME 1 the lack of pilots is not all that puzzling. I mean, we do sea a copilot seat, and we have a crew of 20 or so, of which one or two more people than just Joker could be pilots. Most the crew is unnamed, after all. It gets a bit more problematic in ME 2, where we really have only one pilot seat... Personally, I find it a bit weirder how Joker always answers all calls from Shepard, instead of the XO or ranking officer aboard...
And lastly, to Revanninja: Monogender means that, biologically, the asari are are *not* female, since monogender means there is no differencation between male and female in that species. They aren't male or female, they're just asari. In practical terms, since they look and seem to, ah, "function" as women, they are considered female. If they really had a mind control field, they could also appear as more stereotypically male... but apparently they don't. And really, the idea of such a mind control field is very, very far fetched and IMO wouldn't really fit to the ME universe.
And Yes, you get usable soldiers after just two or three weeks of boot camp. But those would be substandard soldiers used when the manpower pool is dwindling in war. You don't get elite soldiers en par with a N7-rated marine or a mercenary with centuries of experience after just two weeks of boot camp...
Right, enough abusing the review page as discussion forum for me :p
| Revanninja chapter 1 . 8/4/2013
Okay signed up
I am only finishing this because you placed several untrue things or skewed looks at my reviews so I am showing why that is wrong.
First Liara on her trauma. You said I countered myself on the idea she had time to handle her teams loss and couldnt face the krogan who killed them. Take a minute read that statement and you should be able to see why that is not counter to it at all. Liara handling the death of her team after she is safe and sound right after the mission is completely different to seeing the person who was responsible and has been taunting you. They dont counter themselves I have seen people who have come to terms with an accident but still have trouble dealing with it like a car wreck. As for her running to save her life I would imagine that is a big difference to being in a fire fight. In a fire fight stick to cover and generally dont move too much more so if you have no gun vs Collapsing roof where RUN is the first option to go through your mind. And while I do agree it could have been written much better some of that was time frame in the orignal script that planet was going to be a hub world like feros and Noveria but the limits of the time prevented it from happening.
As for Asari direct quote from wiki "Uniquely, the asari are known to be perceived as attractive to many other species. At the Eternity bar, a conversation occurs between a human, a salarian, and a turian who are watching an asari dancer. The men debate whose species the asari most resembles. Upon each forwarding their own race, the human theorizes that the asari might be using mind control to appear attractive to other species, but it is more likely that the three men were merely focusing on characteristics their species shares with the asari (e.g., body shape for humans, skin color for salarians, head fringe for turians). All three men compliment the asari's flexibility and grace. This conversation implies that asari are considered attractive to many species, which would prove useful considering their method of reproduction. Mordin Solus postulates that the mechanism behind the asari's cross-species attraction may be neurochemical in nature." Its not out there in the codex yes but the codexs have not always been 100% honest with us either as things change and get altered. A prime example is joker's sister Hilary is pretty much confirmed dead by background story not all of mass effect is in the codex or shoved in our faces. Talk to joker in ME3 and he will talk about his family after thessia then go to the hospital near the glass on the right is a PTSD Asari listen and watch as Story is filled in without Codex. Also they are female a Mono-gender so of course they see them as WOMEN! What you missed is they see them as looking like their SPECIES Turians see Asari as Turian like Human as Human Krogan as Krogan that is the field I am talking about the Asari as a species are female they just warp our view to see them as looking like our Species.
Now as for Military AHEM! AHEM! Military Background WAVING! I am a Bachelor holder in Anthropology with most of my History credits in military history and tactics my friends are all military or ex-military and my Brother is medical discharge military shall I go on?
Boot Camp and 4-5 days is how much training is needed to make a soldier able to handle their gear effectively the rest is repeat. The real reason Boot Camp is 8 weeks is rebuilding of a body into a Military fit one. The Boot camp is mostly about building Endurance Strength and stamina. You can be Lane qualified in 3 days if you push it but there is little reason for it. So Training a Person to handle a gun and stay back and attack as long range support like Liara would be can take 4-5 days. 3 to get her weapon spec and the other 2 for Military hand signs radio behavior and how a squad moves and what is needed from her. Since she is a biotic The best skilles would be to keep her back use Powers to block passage for troops or pull them out of cover while forward squad members handle shooting at them. The very act of denying cover and movement would be a godsend in a firefight.
Also Tuchanka Not opnions at all Predator 101 remember Bachelor in Anthro? Yeah we get trained in that. As for my Military friends explained as a convoy of tanks bad roads that would gum up the tracks or cause stalls with a fighter squad on the way with an entrenched military squad with anti-fighter guns. The basic Plan is hit them with tanks while the fighter squad hits them with focus on the anti-fighter. Explained the issue. First question asked was timing how far from base where they fuel the issues getting there and so on. Hashed it out as close to mass effect as possible and they all answered the same way. The fighter squad is either unable to try again because of fuel not counting game mechs here or the more likely cause is the timing to break off and turn around would leave the tanks too exposed for a complete turn around by the time it could be again ready to attack one pronged could be destroyed. In a Military operation that requires a 2 pronged attack having one pronged delayed or defeated can completely unwind. A Classic example is WWII's Case Blue where Nazi rushed its forces to knock out the soviets it over extended its supplies and the land forces where left exposed while the air staid in control. A very similar case here in fact it maybe what inspired about it.
As for Kaltross straight from wiki "If an intruder progresses further into the territory beyond the sign-posts and encounters the territory-holder, both animals may begin "ritualised aggression" toward each other. This is a series of stylised postures, vocalisations, displays, etc. which function to solve the territory dispute without actual fighting as this could injure either or both animals. Ritualised aggression often ends by one of the animals fleeing (generally the intruder). If this does not happen, the territory may be defended by actual fighting, although this is generally a last resort." Kaltross was very likely doing those ritualised aggressions until the Maw Hammer came do and then BAM She was on him. Makes her behavior make sense dont it?
As for People's culture yes and no again. An example the Thumbs up in America is good job while its a Middle finger in other parts of the world. An Up and down head nod in america is the same as in Italy doing a chin flick towards your right shoulder. The gesture is different but the meaning is the same. You are looking at the superficial seeing different gestures have different meanings and thinking that its it but the truth is not finding the same gestures but the same meaning. An Ausie going to America will understand thumbs up is not flipping them off because its different in that country. Same goes for Aliens there gestures and verb use might be different but ideas and meaning are still being expressed once you clue in to the difference its very easy to understand. Anthropologists do this all the time for new cultures we look for the common ground and go from there.
Finally just so we are clear I am not speaking as some uneducated or know it all. I am a Holder of Bachelor of Arts in Anthropology with a Minor in History most of that in Military. I went through alot of years of school to get that and now I can say Yes I am an Expert and educated in the subject we are talking about. While Xeno science is not my strength people and War is.
| bofomania chapter 2 . 8/4/2013
To revanninja and my other potential anonymous reviewers: I like arguing the fine points of Mass Effect, but this review section is not the appropriate setting for such an exchange. It's not difficult to open an account on and I'd rather debate signed reviews trough private messages whenever possible.
So, in order to avoid the cluttering of the review section by all you disgruntled Liara-loving archeologists (!), I'm introducing a new rule: from now-on, I will erase any anonymous review that raises questions that I feel I really need to debate. An alternative (I'm still thinking about it) would be to transfer said anonymous review to a section of my profile, where I could appropriately put my reply out.
| bofomania chapter 4 . 8/4/2013
A long debate like this is more appropriately done in private messages, and I would strongly encourage you to register (get yourself an account on fanfiction) for that.
Your assessment of military training seems a bit oversimplified. I've never been in the military, but I suspect there's much more to it than learning how to put your pants on the right way or where to point a gun. I wish there was a military guy out there to confirm that basic training can be done in only 4-5 days. I doubt it. Anyway, the level of training Liara needs in order to be a useful teammate for Shepard is probably much more than 'basic training.'
You argue that poor Liara was exhausted and in pain and that's why she was just uselessly crouching during the fight on Therum. If that had been the case, it would have been easy for her to say so and to look the part. Not only does she say nothing and does not look like she's in pain or weak, but she runs as fast as everybody else when the ruins starts to crumble after said fight. The run for the exit being a cut scene, it would have been easy to show that Shepard or another team member was helping her along or carrying her out... But that was not the case. While it is plausible that she way have been weakened by her imprisonment, there is absolutely no sign of it anywhere on Therum and this interpretation is contradicted by her well executed sprint toward the exit when everything starts to crumble. Your interpretation is not supported (I would even say it is contradicted) by in-game facts. You also say that she was still under the shock of all her colleagues being killed; by saying that, you contradict your own argument (in a previous comment) to explain why she did not seem to emote at all about her dead colleagues during the subsequent debriefing with Shepard and his team. Seems to me that you're grasping at straws here in your defense of Liara. Liara could have been written much better, and that's precisely what I'm pointing out here and in my comments in chapter 4. Liara, as a character, has a lot of potential at the start of the game, but she was badly written/developed thereafter.
Also, you bring-up this idea (which is just based on three guys talking as they watch an asari dancer - the 'bachelor party') that asari may not look like women at all, and that their appearance could be the result of a 'mind control field.' That's a very interesting concept, but it is not supported by in-game facts nor by the codex (maybe you should read about asari appearance and gender on 'mass effect wiki'). Two factual examples that contradict your interpretation of asari's true appearance: 1) Female Shepard sees all asari as women too. Shouldn't they look like males for her (I assume here that not all versions of female Shepard are lesbian - ROTFL) and 2) Matriarch Aethyta talks about Benezia (in ME3) in a way that makes it very obvious Liara's mother had stereotypically desirable feminine characteristics ("...and damn that rack!").
Your other points: Tuchanka with Kalros against the reaper, and the turian fighters. More opinions. You know a scene is badly scripted when you need such contrived arguments to explain why it may make sense.
I'm in total agreement with your comment about different cultures (or even species) developing along similar patterns (there are chiefs or kings in all cultures is your example). This is all fine and good. The problem is that people often assume that the similarities will extend to the finer details of social interactions, and this is not true. For example, you could say that body language is important in all human cultures. That's fine. However, specific gestures, facial expressions and hand signals may have very different meanings in different cultures. There are many examples of this. One is the 'thumbs-up' gesture; in Iran it's an obscene gesture (basically equivalent to showing the middle finger), and in Brazil it can apparently mean "thanks." I got that from wikipedia, so I'm not sure it's exact... but you get the idea. That's the origin of my beef when Tali says that she had sleepovers: it's obvious that it's meant to make the player think of human teenager girls having pajama parties... While similar activities among young females may very well take place on the flotilla, I'd be surprised if they were even remotely like your typical pajama party...
I entirely agree with you about the genophage. That's a very good point. Krogan birth rate on Tuchanka being high has to be an evolutionary adaptation to a high death rate because of the harsh conditions on this planet.
| revanninja chapter 1 . 8/1/2013
If it helps I have a deviantart account under the same name should really sign up here because I am seeing a ton of potential here.
Okay first Asari in game its said they arent women nor do they look like human women. I will pause while you try to figure that one out. Okay in ME2 I think it was a bachelor party it gives up the answer I know its a background dialogue at least. Asari produces a field that makes the seer associate them with attractive qualities which is why they are so cross-species they look like human women to us because we find that attractive its meta hoodwink by the devs. As for the women part because in the defination males hold the smallest gamete so for a race of mono-gender it makes sense for the mammalian like reproduction for the female part to be the most often.
Next in cultures patterns repeat ALOT its one of the reasons Kings are found everywhere. You are right cultures arent the same but they do have the same patterns and examples of culture. Pairing, reproduction war and I can continue while each case will be different patterns of behavior and motivations will be common.
Aliens while they may be aliens if they bodies in a rough shape like our bipedal by the by they will behave in the same patterns because their very shape will thrust them into those patterns yes there will be differences but they will have the same basic motivations we do so common ground is easy to find but we are also being given simple examples of the culture and nothing that isnt being shipped for a cross race area. The biggest are the krogans and as ME3 shows there is alot more there then we really know.
Side note who ever thought up the genophage was a Moron. The reason why animals have multiple births is because death tolls keep the population in check. Forcing the krogan back onto their world and making their birth 1 in 1000 is not a stable its a downward spiral because it means there is still alot of things kill them tech will solve some of it but not that big of a difference.
| Revanninja chapter 1 . 8/1/2013
Okay since you replied I guess I will as well since I was watching because fanfiction was glitching and not even showing my reviews which I double check to make sure I make my points and not seem like an idiot which I have done in the past and I also currently dont have an account.
Boot camp is roughly 8 weeks so 2 months if you cut out a lot of the military jargon training you can par that down to about 4-5 days easily since alot of boot camp is breaking you down and rebuilding you into a solider which is not being done to liara.
Also as the Mass effect wiki official timeline points out 2183-2184 is the timeline its alot longer then 2 months I would say closer to 6-8 personally which in that timeline makes alot more sense for the mission to be .
As for liara's combat I should point out there are real space pirates out there look at the batarians and prothean tech is worth a pretty penny I would honestly say she has probably seen alot more combat then you are giving her credit for.
As for her crouch come on man really? She was in the shroud for how long?! She had her arms and legs pulled on by the field for easily a couple of hours if not a day or more speaking as someone who has been strapped down because of fever that makes you limbs HURT. I am not shocked she was huddling she was in no shape to fight. Also psychology here those geth and krogan just killed her team and have been taunting her for a bit by then she may have mentally shutdown she would basically have been tortured. She says the krogen comes by every couple hours or so which gives her at least a day in my book. And before you say if she had combat experince why was she in the field in the first place one some what trained asari meet a baker's dozen war machines and a krogan not good odds by any stretch except in shep's books.
So she spends what amounts to a year in the company of a soldier who attracts trouble like a magnet so she gets built up into a commando or at least apporaching one she then turns 2 years of her life into being a broker and gets lucky because the last shadow broker was an idiot and yes real life that does happen. you really cant call it mary-sue because she spends 1 year getting turned into a BA asari then 2 into a good broker its a realistic character devolpment timeline.
Now for Tuchanka. I am replaying ME3 as we speak and finished that not even a day ago. First the hole they have a convoy of tomkah at least 20 strong from the looks of it the road collapses after 1 goes over and the second barely crosses in time. Now here is the issue with the turian fighters duking it out that place is a death trap it was either chance it or die before they were worried about getting the whole convoy across now its GO GO GO! As for the turians being locked in you are taking it to literal. The turians mean time wise locked in there is time in battle plans known as the point of no return where once troops move here they cant turn around because of logistic issues and with a 2 pronged attack that becomes even worse. So when the turians say locked in they mean they cant break off the attack without alerting the reaper and without the tomkahs the reaper can handle them no problem. Think of it like a car there is a certain amount of time you need to make a turn otherwise you will hit for the turians they are saying they are past that point.
Now as for Kaltross. Kaltross is a territorial creature not a stupid one. It makes no sense for a predator to fight another predator that is more or less its own size. Most predator will wait to see what happens if the new predator looks like its claiming there will be a fight but if it moves on nothing will happen outside of some snarling. Kaltross is obviously agitated and circling the ruin hence her going after the tomkah but its not until the maw hammers are used which if I had to say mimic a challenge to draw maws out which to kaltross means the reaper is trying to claim her territory and she then responds. The hammers are probably more then just a pound on the ground they probably mean something to maws like humans swimming sounds like wounded fish to sharks in water.
Now as for the mission briefs while I do agree somewhat strike teams will often get a last minute brief with as accurate intel as brass can give while on the way to said mission just like shep does. Does it suck OH YES it does but sometimes missions are so fluid you need that in order for them to behave well for the mission op nothing is worse then faulty or bad intel even worse when said intel completely changes the mission.
As for the ending yes I completely agree.
| bofomania chapter 11 . 8/1/2013
To revanninja: thanks for your review. Again, it would be easier for me to reply if you were registered. I feel awkward doing it here, but why not: it's an interesting topic.
I think you may have misunderstood my argument against the Citadel DLC and the way Tali is portrayed in it. The fault is mine, no doubt, for not having been more precise and clear. This is not about americans or american culture per say. It's more of a pet peeve of mine: I like my aliens to be... aliens. What I mean is that I'm always disappointed when a character that is supposed to be an alien (like Tali) is described with traits or activities that are easily recognizable in our present day culture (like sleepovers, puberty and all of what you so kindly described in your review): it seems very ordinary and lazy to me... as I'm not sure quarians would behave like that. It's a common illusion to believe that what goes on in one's culture is 'normal' or 'universal,' and the Citadel DLC fell into that trap. That's mostly it. I've got plenty of other pet peeves, including the way spaceships in ME always end-up moving around in space like planes in an atmosphere, the striking and completely unexplainable anatomical resemblance between asari (which are supposed to be monogendered aliens) and human women, etc...
| bofomania chapter 1 . 7/31/2013
Wow, keep the reviews coming! :D
Many interesting points are being raised! I usually answer to reviews (and I also like arguing about stuff, politely of course), but you need to be registered for me to oblige.
To revanninja: your arguments are not devoid of value, but they are more opinion than fact. For one, I'm not sure two months would be enough to transform a bookish and awkward asari into a special-ops kind of soldier. Yes, Liara says at some point that she's had to confront wildlife and pirates or the like on a few occasions, but anybody living on a farm could say something similar... and maybe she's had to do it two or three times in 50 years (we don't know), which does not amount to much, and that certainly doesn't qualify her for military-style action. Tali at least would have received some specific training. Tali's confidence and fighting abilities, BTW, are easy to see when Shepard comes to her rescue near Chora's Den. As a contrast that illustrates very well my point, consider Liara's behavior when she is being rescued by Shepard (the last fight before getting out of the dig site on Therum): she's crouching, completely paralysed, not able or willing to lift a finger to help against the krogan and his geth. I think this is how Liara is portrayed at that point: she's fragile and inexperienced (while Tali, by contrast, obviously knows how to fight already). These are in-game facts, not opinions.
As for Liara as a Mary Sue, one way to see it is to compare the story arc of each of Mass Effect's main characters. Ashley, Kaidan, Wrex, Garrus, Tali, Joker and Dr. Chakwas all have rather continuous story arcs, and what happens to them or what they do from ME1 to ME3 is practically always within the confines of their character as defined right from the start in ME1. Not for Liara, however: there are major discontinuities in her story (because she's so extraordinary - she can do anything!), the main ones being her transformation from an archeologist into a special-ops (or equivalent), saving Shepard's body (an incredible feat in itself) and her transformation into an information broker. My impression is that the authors used her to fill plot holes in the story.
Thanks for the review anyway.
| revanninja chapter 11 . 7/29/2013
While I do detect something about americans there I will ignore it for now. Prom I think is the wrong idea college is a better. We have a deep believe that going to college and getting a degree makes things better and changes you into a better person like the pilgrimages do. You have been watching too many videos if you think prom is important to americans outside of a big social event. Prom for us americans is seen as the last step of childhood and college as the first in adulthood and no more often then naught they are not as big or wild as movies and stories will make it out to be.
As for the north american teen thing from citadel think about it for a minute in your own math. 300 per ship on average it makes sense for children to be taught in one central location which would allow them to interact. And its been proven all children no matter nationality will join social circles which means girls generally hang out with other girls and same for boys. Its not strange at all for them to have sleep overs.
Americans get ragged on for alot but somethings we get ragged on happens all over the world and wasnt even from america our movies just made it more obvious. Sleepovers for example I know for a fact from my multi-national friends happen in Canada China Japan Germany Britain and India. Women sleeping together gossiping and generally friendships are an adaptive strategy for later in life for being pregnant and having children. Having the close bonds means you will be willing to let them care for your children and help you get food while pregnant because they know you will do the same for them sleepovers are documented as being the beginning version of that.
| revanninja chapter 10 . 7/29/2013
While I have disagreed with you on liara with joker I do agree he is most likely a PR stunt turned success which makes his joining cerberus all the more clear. He went from pilot of the best ship to being grounded on most likely the fact his disease got his commander killed and then cerberus offers him a job knowing shepard would feel more calm with him and chakawas.