Reviews for Daylight Through Darkness |
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![]() ![]() ![]() ooh way to finish off with a bang! |
![]() ![]() ![]() He is going to wake up from his torturous dream and hate her all over again. I can just feel it all down deep in my bones. Hope I'm wrong. :) Loving the story so far. |
![]() ![]() ![]() o i was so hoping Theo had turned around, I don't like an evil Theo. But alas, it was not meant to be. But there is still time, maybe? Ok. Not holding my breath. Loving it anyway, Aerinn. |
![]() ![]() ![]() good story |
![]() ![]() ![]() Amazing Thz for sharing |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love it |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hermione held herself captive by Voldy and she doesn't have back up plan? wow nice one, Herm! |
![]() ![]() ![]() What I don't understand is how they didn't report them (Pansy, Goyle, and Theo) to the authorities... i mean the kidnapped someone and abused her for weeks! Why would they just do nothing when they know who did it. I can see that you need Theo to be free so he can get then to tuchthe quill and all... but it may have been better if it were sent anonymously to them after the kidnappers were arrested. It was very hard for me to understand how they could just be left to walk free... even if for some bizzar reason it was decided that they will be let of the hook for kidnapping and torturing a war heroine... they could still pose a danger to others. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Your writing so far has great bones, much like a house that could use a bit of remodelling, but is built on a solid foundation. You could do with a little more showing than telling at some points. Descriptive language would definitely be helpful. I think the logic behind Draco keeping Hermione there and all of that, is the weakest point of the fic so far. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Harry sucks right now. A month! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh crap. Harry was so rude |
![]() ![]() ![]() Trouble |
![]() ![]() ![]() K so yay great story. Except for Snape dying. Loved the elves. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am not sure what I expected. Completely OOC Harry was to be except in this kind of story, I am not sure why I am even surprised. |