Reviews for Grey Skies and Sunshine |
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![]() ![]() Lmao Haymitch probably would steal a kid’s wagon |
![]() ![]() Firstly, fantastic written work you should definitely be a writer in the future (only if you want to or course!) I have good and bad reviews about this can fiction. The good is that I did want to see a fan fiction about Katniss and Peetas future and I was so lucky to come across this very well written fan fiction that you write and I can see a lot of heart went into this! I The bad I have about this is it kind of seems like Katniss was pressured by Peeta until she gave in. When she says things like "this wasn't in the plans but I wouldn't change it " it kind of seems like it's not what she really wanted but she went along with it anyway. Also when Katniss daughter was a toddler Peeta seemed to start begging her again even after seeing how miserable she was in the first pregnancy. The scene with Prims things really made me tear up. Why was Peeta so desperate to turn Prims (the only person katniss was sure she loved in the trilogy) room into a nursery? Peeta always knew how special Prim was to katniss (that's why he planted primroses outside their home for her) so it was confusing to me why he was not bothered at all about doing that. ( I do know he made it special for Katniss after but the beginning was heartbreaking and peeta shocked me a little) Also at the end when katniss says "I don't know what I would do without her" I think Katniss did have a small idea to what she would do because of her PTSD she would heal a bit more than she already had. Also the scene when Katniss apologized to Peeta for not having sex with him. Poor Katniss shouldn't of had to feel like doing that. She was pregnant, feeling rough and just needed a rest. Peeta joking about her being fat when she was self conscious made me feel so bad for her too I do think Katniss would still live in fear and doubt even with her daughter and Peeta around. After all she has C-PTSD. That is why I like how you included Katniss talking about how her illness makes her struggle some days because that is the reality of her life with or without a child. Please remember these are just my personal opinions and I don't want you feeling down about anything I said. I just wanted to point out my own personal good and bads that I hope you can understand. I can see how intelligent you are with your writing and I wouldn't want to make you feel bad about anything these are just my personal opinions as I said before. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I always know I enjoyed a story so much and will hold it dear to my heart when I get HELLA mad at the end for ending lol Beautiful and so real to the story that I would assume you’re a ghostwriter for S Collins. |
![]() ![]() I cannot tell you how strange it was to read my name after all of that. But the story is great. I thoroughly enjoyed it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved this chapter and the friendship Katniss has developed with Delly. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Beautifully written! Thank you for sharing this beautiful story, well-written and exactly in the "style" of the Hunger Games series. I love also the birth scene, and how their daughter is named Grace. A truly wonderful story, a nice ending after all the turmoil that goes on in the series. |
![]() ![]() That was... AMAAAAAAZIIIIIIIING! |
![]() ![]() I flipping love this so much! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I just finished reading the books, and needed more, so glad I found your story, it’s a nice bridge to the epilogue |
![]() ![]() ![]() There are no words... this story was beyond perfect! I favorited this story so I can waste another day one day just reading and laughing and crying :) |
![]() ![]() I like the last sentence when katniss wants a cheese bun. |
![]() ![]() Love the story amazing |
![]() ![]() I loved this story! it is so nice to read a story where your characters are already together. Marriage isn't the ending of a story like so many suggest, it's just the beginning! I love the way you developed the characters, they felt real and highly believable! |
![]() ![]() ![]() A very well written birthing scene! Just a couple of things- 1) You sometimes change tense which is a little disconcerting. 2) Once the head is out I believe that women are told to pant and do small pushes rather than one big one, as this prevents the baby sliding out too fast and helps prevent tearing to some extent. |