Reviews for Heir of the Senju
HaruXKyouyaLaxusXLucy4EVER chapter 14 . 1/28
Ur writing WASNT pathetic ok? The ppl who say that r idiots so..?
HaruXKyouyaLaxusXLucy4EVER chapter 9 . 1/28
Isn't naruto already a chunin? I thought he might get promoted to jonin after the mission.
HaruXKyouyaLaxusXLucy4EVER chapter 6 . 1/28
Lemon... :8
evilpyro13 chapter 14 . 12/23/2014
For your first fanfic it wasnt bad i could hardly stop reading it but i do have a few suggestions, try not to use so many time skips it kinda takes alot out of the story, i noteced that you miss spelled a few words so try not dping that as often and i also noticed that a couple times a few of the characters names got mixed up when said mixed up character wasnt presented recently but besides those minor things your first fanfic was great it had suspence and romance it had action that was well described i really did like the part when naruto first saw might guy's eyebrows. all in all it was pretty great
Kybi-No-Akuma chapter 14 . 11/3/2014
I must admit it is a pity you stopped writing this as I have been enjoying it the if you do decide to restart it then fantastic but if not then well done for staying with this story as long as you have

Ky├╝bi-No-Akuma signing off
"ja ne"
killer4853 chapter 5 . 6/22/2014
like
MoKhan97 chapter 14 . 12/20/2013
i was loving the story man. great story
Daedric X chapter 14 . 10/5/2013
Not sure if you still look at the reviews since your last update was a year ago... Still update this please. This story is unique in its own rights lol. Keep it up
Armageddonfish chapter 14 . 9/11/2013
Good story, sad that you ended it. but man Kurenai had really bad luck, almost raped then kidnapped and finally losing her child. all by the same man.
xX.FlamingTempest.Xx chapter 10 . 7/5/2013
I will support. As you said, the stories are ours, not the characters. I say as long as there is a disclaimer, then there should be no problem. I also agree to a MA rating. It would solve a lot of problems.
Masterp1337 chapter 1 . 5/2/2013
If this chapter is so grammatically incorrect and lacking proper punctuation AFTER being edited, then it must have been god awful before. I can't read this, and I won't . Now, if you want to do better, brush up on your English, pick up a thesaurus , and get a competent Beta.
agnar chapter 3 . 4/26/2013
Ok your fic started good, until naruto returned to the village and then everyone went completely fucking dumb.

So first, naruto is 12, leaves for THREE years to train, that means he's 15 when he returns. Instead of the hokage making USE of his skills and allowing him to continue growing in skill, he makes him take on the form of a 13 year old and then waste, apparently, 2-4 YEARS in the academy playing normal student!

Once graduated he then STILL has to waste his fucking time playing genin when he's already been a chunin for YEARS now, for no apparent good reason.

Seriously, WHAT THE FUCK was the POINT of him getting all the training since the hkage then just has him fucking waste it all amongst the kiddies? And without even any real POINT to the mission? For fucks sake, any average chunin could henge and play the role, naruto allegedly had skills at jonin level or higher, he's a fucking SAGE, dual summoner, jinchuriki of the strongest bijuu, and the hokage has him fucking around in the academy for YEARS!

Stupidest hokage and village EVER.
HollywoodUndeadSoldier chapter 6 . 3/14/2013
you ruined it with the other wife
fernando343 chapter 1 . 2/18/2013
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Guest chapter 1 . 1/26/2013
gay mary sue shit
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