Reviews for Neon tormenters
Mike Kromer chapter 6 . 1/12/2013
Man I want more, keep up the good work, I think the Salvation road but then again I don't realy know myself lol
gunman chapter 5 . 8/21/2012
I should probably have written more details from my last review, but too many times have Shinji stayed with NERV, despite the trouble it has brought him.
It would be interesting to see Shinji, in a Jason Bourne-like style, forgetting everything he has ever known, then joining the enemy and then suddenly taking them down from the inside.
It would be interesting to see that, unlike the tradiational stories where he stays with NERV and tries to fight the Angels.
That said, good luck with this story.
Noticed alot of grammer mistakes, but aside from that you have alot of interesting plot points here.
Mainly, Shinji bagging every female he runs in to.
Rei, Asuka, Misato, that secretary.
Definitely a change-up from his usual antics.
Hope to see more of that.
Write on!
gunman chapter 6 . 8/21/2012
I choose... Join the Angels and get involved in more interesting relationships.
Write on!
Christopher chapter 6 . 6/16/2012
Stay with nerve and have a good love life and also kick some angel ass .
Christopher chapter 1 . 6/16/2012
Good story please continue !
Pale Mittens chapter 1 . 5/20/2012
Please add paragraphs right now it is just a wall of text
An25 chapter 1 . 5/18/2012
Really need paragraph breaks because this is really hard to read.
Grammar Nazi chapter 1 . 4/11/2012
There shouldn't be an apostrophe before the S in "enemies" in your summery. Grammar and spelling mistakes are inevitable when writing, and I don't generally mind them in the body of the work itself, but I strongly advise you to avoid them in the title and summery, which advertise your work to the site.