|Reviews for Lines of Destiny: Destiny's Intersection|
| shugokage chapter 13 . 11/24/2013
Amazing job on this incredible story!
| Shannon Dee chapter 13 . 10/14/2013
A wonderful job well done.
| Claire Danielle chapter 13 . 6/10/2013
I really enjoyed this story, I especially liked how you brought about Setsuna's rebirth with Ranma as her mother. I definitely would like to see this expanded.
Thanks for sharing
| Marty chapter 13 . 5/25/2013
Thank You! The only thing that I find frustrating with fan fiction is the possibility that due to life's pressures and responsibilities, it can take a very long time to complete a major work or sadly has to be abandoned.
While you did a wonderful job wrapping up this storyline, it was still rather jarring to read LOD and then in the first chapter of this story to find that Ranma and Akane are not as close and by the end of the story it leaves their relationship in such a ambivalent position.
The thought that Ranma might just abandon becoming a Grand Master is rather saddening - Better would be for him to become a sensei and pursue an acting career as a sideline.
Many ideas for a Akane/Ranma solution but not really a writer. (I hope somebody sneezes)
| dimriver chapter 13 . 5/7/2013
Excellent work. I've now read it twice. I'm really glad you finished it.
Finally the kata finally came to an end, and Kobayashi had everybody pair off for some sparring to finish up the class. The change of pace from what had felt like a glacial speed of movement was a relief to Ami.
I think you only wanted one of the "finally"
I saw very few typos, great work.
| Reviewer of the West chapter 13 . 4/20/2013
Great! Please continue
| Sunder the Gold chapter 13 . 4/6/2013
Looking at this outline, I can't blame you for my disappointment, but I feel it would be constructive cricticism to explain why I am disappointed.
It basically comes down to the fact that the original author envisioned two entirely seperate stories, wrote the first one, and then stopped writing the story at the point where it became something completely different. Indeed, I have to wonder if he realized this himself, and whether that knowledge is why he gave up on it.
The first half of the story is a Ranma/Sailor Moon crossover. Ranma is recognizeably himself, and the story uses his personality, skills and curse as befits Ranma in a Sailor Moon story. No other character in Anime could have filled that role.
The second half of the story doesn't need Ranma. Makoto or any of the Inner or Outer Senshi could have been sent back in time to give birth to Setsuna, and it wouldn't change anything. It's an utter waste to use Saotome Ranma as the mother just because he can assume a female form. It would have been better to create an original female character for the role than to use Ranma. If an ultra-martial-artist was necessary, you could have used Chun Lee. Setsuna's time-displaced mother being male was absolutely pointless.
The second half of the story also invalidates the first. It no longer really matters that Ranma fell in love with and married Akane, nor that he had a major falling out with her. It no longers matters that Rei (and the others, but mostly Rei) was over the line in her nosiness and attempts to impose her will on "Ranko", because Ranma no longer remembers or cares. Even Michiru getting curse and Akane and Hotaru being siblings (or even Ranma and Mamoru being siblings) is completely irrelevant to the second half of the story and the ending of the story.
Michiru didn't need to get cursed for the second half of the story to play out exactly as it did; the period of time in which she adjusts to the curse is completely skipped over, which is bad character development. She doesn't even get it cured, which would have been a better way to resolve it than this.
Most of the character development in the second half of the story is likewise skipped over. If the whole story is going to revolve around the time that three people spent in the ancient moon kingdom, shouldn't the story spend more time in the ancient moon kingdom? If they're just there to give birth to Setsuna, Chun Li could relate the most important scenes through flash backs told to the Senshi left behind in the present.
Akane didn't need to be Hotaru's sibling (or Ranma Mamoru's) for the purposes of the second half of the story. She didn't need to marry Ranma or come to Juuban, either. Why was she even in this story if it was going to leave her behind like that? Why not just have Ranma show up alone in Juuban and fall into a time-portal with Ami and Minako? That would have skipped over the invalidated first half and gotten straight to the point of the whole thing, which was apparently the second half.
Ranma didn't even need to be Sailor Terra. That was pointless, too.
I wish you had looked at the outline and seen all of this, and I wish that you had come up with a way to continue the first half of the story. Because I loved the story where Ranma was Ranma, the ultra-macho young man who had a problem with being a Sailor Senshi and who needed to get over that problem with help from his wife, with plenty of misunderstandings and struggles along the way. I loved a story in which the Sailor Senshi reacted appropriately to Ranma, either with narrow-mindedness (Rei) or tolerant acceptance (Usagi) or simple confusion (most everyone else), depending on their misconceptions and then after they learned the truth.
You didn't write that story. I didn't get to see Rei confronted about how badly she treated Ranma, or Ranma confronted about how badly he treated Akane. I didn't get to see Akane justified in her suspicions that there was something odd about Ranma's hostility. I didn't get to see Ranma eventually become FRIENDS with the Sailor Senshi, or accept Mamoru as a brother. I didn't get to see any purpose behind Michiru getting cursed.
And I'm disappointed, because all of that is what I waited for, these last several years.
| jaelin910 chapter 13 . 3/23/2013
noooo! it cannot just be left there. there are too many loose ends that need tying.
that bit with yaten got me curious and gave me hope that I wasn't as near the end as I suspected I was (turns out that I was right in the end)
I feel that this 'ending' can't be more than the end of this arc and that, whether it be you or someone else, the story must go on!
(thanks for sending me the original btw. I enjoyed both it and this a lot)
| Annoymousse chapter 13 . 2/3/2013
It took awhile to find the first 12 chapters of the story...and I gotta say that I love how it all ended. Especially after reading the original outline - this ending is just better than the original planned one.
A classic...properly completed.
| Gillian Grayson chapter 13 . 1/2/2013
I normally don't read fics where Ranma gets pregnant, because they usually are very poorly written. So that usually leads to me dropping the fic if I find out that is what happens, but I'm actually quite glad I decided to read on. It was well worth my time, and this line actually made me shed a tear or two: "I missed you, mother," Setsuna said between sobs. "I missed you so much."
| Vld chapter 7 . 1/1/2013
i started to wonder about it when Venge started talking about moving to the moon and taking the name "Serenity". I wondered which one it would be. My guess was either Saturn (the first one) which would give her even more of a connection to Akane... or Pluto (the only one). So, i'm guessing Amialready put it together, but when will the others realized they should worry about "WHEN" they are instead of "Where"?
| Celestia's Paladin chapter 13 . 12/13/2012
*whistles* You took the barest of outlines and made it something special. I am very impressed with this.
| Celestia's Paladin chapter 11 . 12/13/2012
Wait... so is Setsuna Satome Setsuna Meioh? Tall, taned, green hair and garent eyed Setsuna?
| Celestia's Paladin chapter 5 . 12/13/2012
I normally would review the last chapter but I think the last line is worth it.
Well... shit, thought I suppose that is what he... she gets for touching a strange Heart Crystal.
| kajoshin chapter 1 . 12/8/2012
you've turned Ranma into a real bastard, you know that, right?
he was pigheaded in the manga and stuff but not this bad.
good story though, 'cept Ranma needing a major attitude adjustment.