|Reviews for Lines of Destiny: Destiny's Intersection|
| god of all chapter 9 . 8/25/2012
Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.
| SilentStriker99 chapter 9 . 8/25/2012
Just to weigh in on you castle refrences. I founf them perfectly "in story" and understood where you were going without the authors note so keep it.
| Rydan fall chapter 9 . 8/25/2012
Lay-lines, a planets lay-lines would work like blood-vessels to the planet crytals acting as hearts.
Would also explain the gem like motive of Sailor Moon's transformative item and why Luna didn't have a change to connect the Moon princess to Sailor Moon.
You know what that temperal paradox reminded me of?
Schrodinger's Cat, aka stasis, aka cryo(?)-tubes and the like.
Because without movement, lenght, wide, height and time just mean you got a room with sone statue in it.
Think about how cells or electricity works, for one, they need movement.
Basicaly, Ranma could call Ami out to stop bringing up Schrodinger's Furry(?) Demon, when she starts about that temperal paradox again.
Our universe is more the a Four Dimensional Universe scientist claim it is, because they are talking about a (stasis) picture taken from our universe.
Though that might be the secret behind the gatees of time, a place that is in stasis since it's creation and thus might let you view all the time it exist from every point in time, ad a good spy-system to it and...
Well, till the next time.
| Chargone chapter 9 . 8/25/2012
the castles/sailor moon/palace/alternate power source/whatever thing works quite nicely, fanon/canon issues or no.
Ranma seems to have lost a lot of what makes Ranma... Ranma. I've read some very convincing arguments here and there that getting perma-locked with no hope of a way to Unlock has a high probability of resulting in suicide from a canon-Ranma. probably more than having a kid as a girl, actually. though i suppose Setsuna's existence would provide something of a counter-weight to that...
I mean, still inanely skilled in martial arts, yeah. but other than that? not so much.
it also seems like that 'single day snapshot' thing works a lot better in video form than text. i'm sure i've seen something like it done in cartoons and/or movies before. first off there tends to be a Lot of background stuff going on, and it's the changes in the background characters stacking up that make it truly different. (so-and-so is married now, such-and-such another couple now has a kid, a different play is being preformed so the rehearsing actors are wearing different costumes, the son runs the flower shop now instead of his aged father, stuff like that.) the combination of slowed ageing, following only a couple of characters, and the event itself not being that complex, all necessary for writing something manageable for both author and reader, do detract from that a bit.
| ijpowers92 chapter 9 . 8/24/2012
well, I really don't what to expect anymore. I have guesses, but there are a lot of blanks to be filled.
I find it interesting that no one has brought up the curse in forever. Though it looks like Minako may have inadvertently reminded Ami of it.
| AshK1980 chapter 8 . 8/18/2012
Nice work on this update! This is an excellent story so far! Keep up the great work!
| Chargone chapter 8 . 8/16/2012
yay! caught up!
ok, i wasn't That many chapters behind, but still. wasn't in the right space for reading this sort of thing for a while there, so didn't. back now... and promptly discovered that the point where i stopped is about the same point where the style shifts a bit to eliminate the entire issue i was having (which had nothing, really, to do with the writing and everything to do with my head-space, so meh *shrugs*) rendering the whole thing rather silly.
umm... soul of ice... shouldn't that have produced a noticeable temperature drop in Ranma's vicinity when he was over-using it?
I picked up on the time travel thing a Little before Ami did, but not much. (though i started wondering the moment Endymion(sp?)'s name came up)
you know, it's weird to (and beyond) the point of implausibility that the people of the Moon Kingdom spoke Japanese in a way that would be intelligible to the girls. 200 years is enough to cause problems. 1000 is enough that... *thinks* I think the closest you'd come to something lasting a thousand years at ANY point would probably be written Chinese. nothing else has come even Close ot lasting that long without becoming essentially an entirely different, no longer mutually intelligible, language. (look at shakespere's plays, for example: half the recognizable words that are still in use are ones He Made Up for the play and they entered the english language that way. And it's barely intelligible if you put some effort into it. go back as long again and the writings are completely unintelligible. heck, half the problem with english spelling was caused by a radical shift in vowel pronunciation just after it was properly nailed down. ) ... then, just to add another layer of silly, the characters are mostly named for minerals. the English names for the minerals. which are mostly derived from a combination of Latin and Place Names. ... for places that don't exist yet at that point. (seriously, this pattern is so solid that you almost may as well read the 'ium' ending as English for 'base element' (rather than latin for place or city (i'm not sure which))... I know this is canon or canon based, but it's still absurd.
anyway, nicely written and your fic continues enjoyably. keep it up :)
| RyanEX chapter 8 . 8/11/2012
Chapters like this make you realise how deep the Sailor Moon MANGA universe was, as opposed to the little girl tripe the dubbers served you.
Though I wonder if you're going to have them return to their own time after spending two...or is it three years where they are already. Also you could probably go a bit more into Ranma's mental state after spending so much time as his female form, and the fact that your wording indicates that he may have been approached by more than a few men.
| Rydan fall chapter 8 . 8/11/2012
There are a few villages in China that after the goverment forbode(?) them from practising martial arts, they hid the kata's into dances.
If you learned them all, you would know their style.
Might be something for Minako to say after hearing this was the first time Ranma has ever danced.
As for singing, ever hearded the legends about songstresses?
Basicaly females/people who used singing to evoc(?) magical effects.
Ranma is already using her body in a fight, so she wouldn't have another way to easily ad magic to it.
If Ranma might know hidden-weapons (or atleast it's basics), then combined with a possible repairing enchantment, could form the basics of equiptment storage true heartcrystal magic.
If Ami can get Ranma to help her with her project(s), then I think that they all might get quite the upgrade in Senshi gear, though they wouldn't bee able to resume their old post until they can get back to their own time, so at most, a secondary tab that takes over as long as the main tab isn't used, would up their magical strenght when they get back to their own time.
If Ranma would know that they are in the past, then I can she her trying to make counter messures geared towards saving people during the fall and hidding said fact for quite some time.
How much does Ranma remember that Castel(?) it's blueprints and how detailed was it?
For some reasons I'm starting to think it's castel Nemesis on the surface of Nemesis.
Do watch symphogear episode one on youtube and follow the links as well, episode 1 and 10 are the ones of intrest to you, I believe.
Magical Lyrical Girl Nanoha, Lost Universe and other such anime might be of intrest as well, since they all deal with LOST tech/artifacts/ships,ect.
In canon Sailor Moon, you can consider the Moon Kingdom to be a LOST kindom, thus everything from it, is LOST something or such, like LOST knowledge.
If you do take a good look at them, then you'd might make the Sailor Senshi War(s) a far more terifying period in terms cruel destruction.
Heck, that castel could even have been Camalot.
Yeah, I know, fat change of that.
Might want to look up on Anime-Addventure, The Big Book of Everthing by The Demented Redhead, the firsts chapters in the ranma based arc might help you flash-out some of the magical styles used in the Moon Kingdom.
Don't forget to check the responces they got as well, the numerical vallues(?) in the www should be 1 0 3, in order to see the whole responce chain of a episode on that site.
At the very least, they should give you food for thought(s).
Anyway, till the next time.
| ijpowers92 chapter 8 . 8/10/2012
well it was a good chapter overall.
Though I'm a bit confused on a minor detail. Ranma mentioned that (s)he has never danced before which means that Martial Arts Ballroom Dancing from the anime never happened, which implies you are using the manga canon. but then you mention Doco. Which is a anime phenomenon.
So are you just using a mix of the two canons?
| Atlan chapter 8 . 8/10/2012
Nice chapter. Ranma certianly seems to have calmed down- I thought she might still be rather bitter. Or maybe she's just hiding it.
I rather liked Ami's analysis of magic, too.
Still looking foward to the return to modern day.
| god of all chapter 7 . 8/6/2012
Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.
| khammel chapter 6 . 7/23/2012
Your characterizations seems to match the earlier chapters by Mr. Giroux quite well. I am, however, troubled by Ranma's attempt at suicide. Not because of the 'Man amongst Men' promise. But because, there is an innocent involved. Ranma always seems to go out of his way to protect the 'weak', and that was not the case here. It was a high stress situation to be sure. And Ranma was probably not 'thinking straight'. She's also lucky she did not lose the pregnancy (not to mention her life) right there. This could be leveraged into a strong, permanent reason for Ranma to live. Look how things turned out for Ranma when he 'lost' his mom for 10 years. Doesn't she (or he) want to do right by the child, especially given the history of what happened in his/her life? Or is he going to run away from this undesired, unwanted, but REAL responsibility by depriving a young child of her mother? Thanks very much for doing this. Best of luck in the future on it, you are doing a great job so far.
| AshK1980 chapter 7 . 7/21/2012
Good work on this chapter as always! Keep up the awesome work! Is Ranma going to be able to use hot water to change back now? Just wondering! Great work on this Lines of Destiny Continuation so far! Keep up the awesome work!
| XStylus chapter 7 . 7/20/2012
Fantastic work again, and thank you once again for it. :)