Reviews for Hogwarts Shuffle!
Twin Fangs of Chaotic Insight chapter 30 . 11/8/2014
I started this story for interesting plot, but the chapters are getting more and more awkward to read. I mean, I get the spicy scenes, but I also don't like reading them. In fact, I couldn't even get through the last one this chapter. Not for prudish reasons or anything, but because it always feel like I am reading about betrayal. I mean all these girls, that literally traveled worlds to be with Harry, and now that they are actually here they start second guessing everything? Nerine decides she can't be with Harry but randomly hooks up with another girl? Then beyond that hooks up with the like second girl who is finally starting to get a steady relationship with Harry? Even going so far as to say no after listening to him have sex beside her four times? Reading that made me feel dirty. Like I was helping my best friend's girlfriend sneak out to get gang banged. Sorry to be crass, but that is literally the only way I can think to put it. Obviously I like the story, or I wouldn't have soldiered through this far, but honestly, I can barely keep going simply because the sheer confusion I feel when I read that. That is like watching the girl you love star in porn. Yes, you are seeing the girl you love naked, but only because she is getting banged by other guys. I don't mean to be offensive, and I am sincerely sorry for how I am saying these things, but I like the story so much that I HAVE to say something, and I can't think of a polite way to say them.
Galeiam chapter 30 . 11/8/2014
Hmm...this chapter feels a bit akward after such a long Hiatus...
cha0sw0lf chapter 30 . 11/8/2014
Wow just wow I can't wait for the next chapter
Guest chapter 30 . 11/7/2014
Fantastic, keep em coming
Jason-Samuels chapter 30 . 11/7/2014
I just find it strange harry is not affected at all by Rina's... Betrayal? I should say? She says she's not interested in him, or wants to take a break. But goes off gallivanting with parvati. Missing groups, ABANDONING her family, friends and her betrothed. Harry has always been one for loyalty, I high doubt he'd let this go unchecked. Also, Hermoine is getting frustrating as all hell. Stretching it out for a story is good, and you've done a fantastic job so far. But for god's sakes man... Stop the goddamn teasing!
major wallace chapter 30 . 11/7/2014
Celexs Draconia chapter 30 . 11/6/2014
Huzzah. I am so glad that this story updated. It is a very fun read, and I really enjoy all of your work. Well done.

Gravity The Wizard chapter 30 . 11/6/2014
god of all chapter 30 . 11/6/2014
Great chapter and story so far please continue this story .
FateBurn chapter 30 . 11/6/2014
Good couple of chapters
FinalKingdomHearts chapter 30 . 11/6/2014
ok, but the lemon was overextended.
Guest chapter 28 . 11/5/2014
Still nothing?
Guest chapter 28 . 10/23/2014
You claimed you would be updating soon. Two weeks later and still noting. Can you give us a idea when this might happen?
dabonezone4444 chapter 28 . 10/16/2014
Hello, thy loyal readers. I will start by thanking all of you who have read and reviewed this story up to this point; both Love and myself have enjoyed most of them. That being said, I have a few things to make clear and a few announcements. First, we are not taking a break from the story. The author hit a bit of a mental block when he realized the volume of how much plot we have come up with for a story originally planned to essentially be a Harry Potter/Shuffle rewrite. We have finally managed to move past this and continue with the writing process. As a reward for your patience we will be releasing a double chapter soon. Furthermore, because we realize you have suffered because of our delay, we will be including an omake of one of our conversations involving a plotline that is very humorous to us. We hope you will enjoy it as well. Second, We have had several reviews now about errors made in the beginning of the story. Obviously, as the editor, I take immediate interest in such comments and have begun to be bothered by them. Continuing this thought, I will be going back over the first 18 chapters or so for grammatical errors. We have also talked about eventually going back to rewrite some of story that we have decided was not quite up to standard, but such a thing will be in the distant future if it does occur. I ask for your patience in my editing of these chapters, as I will be doing it while editing the current chapters and Love does not write small chapters. Thank you for your time.
DalkonCledwin chapter 5 . 9/27/2014
Oh, please tell me we aren't adding Gabrielle to Harry's growing Harem. That would just... eww, she was 8 in Harry's fourth year. So she would be 10 now... I was kind of actually hoping that was Tsubomi, but then you had to throw in the whole French Accent deal.

"Gabrielle Delacour, you remember, from Third Year?" How has nobody pointed that mistake out to you? The Novels in order of release are as follows:

Harry Potter and the Philosophers Stone (Year One)
Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets (Year Two)
Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban (Year Three) - this was the year that Sirius escaped Azkaban, and Peter Pettigrew joined Voldemort in hiding.
Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire (Year Four) - this is the year that Harry and the gang meet the Delacours for the first time as this is the year that the Triwizard Tournament takes place.
Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix (Year Five) - This is the year of Sirius' death, the year Umbridge was in power at Hogwarts, and the year that Dumbledore's Army happened.
Harry Potter and the Half-Blood Prince (Year Six) - The current year that this story is happening in.
Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows (The Would-Be Year Seven) - The year after the current. Among other things to happen in this Year would be Bill Weasley and Fleur Delacour's Wedding, and it would have been this year that the Delacours would have been visiting Britain, not the Sixth Year.

So why Gabriel is currently in the Headquarters of the Order of the Phoenix during a War when she could be safely off on the Continent with an Oceanic Boundary and several thousand miles between her and Voldemort is beyond me. She would be far safer in France than in Great Britain right about now. So would Fleur for that matter.

Fleur's English should also be way way better than that by now. And why does Gabrielle have better English than Fleur?

Too many years? It's only been ONE! Two at the absolute MOST. She last saw him when she waved goodbye to him at the end of his fourth year, this being the beginning of his sixth year means that she hasn't seen him for the entirety of his fifth year and the summers in between the three years. Hogwarts gets off school in the third week of June. So ignoring that first week of summer, then she hasn't seen Harry in about 14 months give or take a week or two. 14 months does NOT qualify as "Too many years" it doesn't even fully qualify as TWO years. This was a pretty big oversight in the time line... I know it may not seem like such a big thing to misplace a school year every once in a while in someone's life... but the Triwizard Tournament was a pretty damn big event in the history of the Wizarding World, and even more so in the life of Harry James Potter. I think he would remember the year in which Voldemort was revived a little more accurately than that.

No. There is absolutely no bloody way. I know the movies made the mistake of having the same actress play her in both the Goblet of Fire and the Deathly Hallows. But there is absolutely no bloody way that Gabrielle is 15 years old when J.K. Rowling quite clearly stated that Gabrielle was only 8 years old in the Goblet of Fire. And justifying it by saying that Gabrielle is a late bloomer was a mistake as well. You should have gone with the standard fare that Veela mature differently than humans until about their 15th birthday. That at least makes it plausible.

I am sorry I am being overly critical, but adding Gabrielle to his harem in this manner is just hurting the credibility of this story. I mean it can work, just not the way you went about it. I will probably ignore the background you gave it after this chapter just for my own sanity and ascribe to her the same kind of nature as I usually expect from the standard Gabrielle in a Harem story.

That said, Tsubomi would have been so much better...

Regarding Ginny's problems. Harry needs to learn and fast, that indulging her like this is not going to help her recover from whatever damage Riddle inflicted on her. She needs to confront the trauma and deal with it. And simply using Harry to objectify her feelings is not helping her in any way. If she keeps this up, she is very likely going to become a Yandere of lethal proportions. We really do not need another Bellatrix Lestrange (Yes I did just classify Bellatrix Lestrange as a Yandere).

I would just like to see Voldemort try to use the Daughter of God or the Devil against Harry. Voldemort might be the big bad of this story, but that wouldn't protect him from the Almighty if he tried to hurt Sia.

Yeah, your turning Ginny into the good version of Bellatrix Lestrange.

You know, I never noticed it before. But Harry certainly attracts weirdos. Ginny has been mind raped severely. Hermione is a Bibliophile with severe problems deviating from authority figures. Luna is probably a bit schizophrenic. Gabrielle is at least in this rendition of the tale autistic in some manner. Yeah, of his human or near human female relationships none of them really have a healthy mental state.

Harry is getting quite good at putting disparate facts together in a manner that fits his preconceived notions and actually turning out to be right about it... isn't he? And Hermione is wrong about what he is doing being unscientific. What he is doing is looking at the facts as they are presented to him and forming a hypothesis about what will happen because of those facts being in existence the way that they are. All he has to do to follow the scientific method is develop an experiment to disprove his hypothesis. If he fails to disprove his hypothesis then his hypothesis becomes a scientifically sound theory. So he is actually being quite scientific about things.

er... is Gabby's psychiatric problem that she is a Seer? That would outright suck.
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