|Reviews for What will be will be Title will change|
| Whatif-ifonly chapter 1 . 4/15/2012
I think you have a great start here. I love the image of JJ dreaming of Spence as her white knight... and I love that both are thinking about each other.
Just one thing you could do to make it better - the spacing. Right now because of the spacing, it's two large paragraphs... you need a little spacing in there to make it easier to read. White space is important because it helps guide the readers eye so they don't get lost.
I can't wait to see what you've got planned next and to read more. :D