Reviews for Another Chance
topdog19 chapter 9 . 7/18/2013
you say you haven't forgotten about this story i have not seen an update in a long time.
TemperanceBooth1 chapter 9 . 3/24/2013
I like the idea of having JC related to Michael and having her call Selene Mommy. I think the sick should gather to create their own coven if no one else believes them. I also think you should bring Michael into Ordagaz while he's sick and have him and Selene meet when they get better. Also they should both have some kind of memory flashback thingy when they first lock eyes to show that they really do know each other.
RainDancin chapter 9 . 2/27/2013
I think that it will be intereting to have Jenny Carla related to Michael. Especially if that will allow here to become like Michael and Eve.
gothicgirlxXx chapter 9 . 1/1/2013
I think u should bring sonja back to life before selene gets better ,have them all gather in the mansion and have sonja explain it all ,have it turn out that jc is related to Micheal someway,have Jc call Selene mommy ,also I one f the chapters u put it so sonja said that when she died she was pregnant with her second child u should reveal who her first one is ... Just a sugestion if u want a few more suggestions u can contact me on any of the following: , (msn) , kelsey mcgeoghan ( facebook ) , K_Rhian ( twitter )
Vampire Heart666 chapter 9 . 12/28/2012
I go with A and i think JC should be related to michael
Cherry blossom chapter 9 . 12/9/2012
Woah! Do not know what happened. Here's my not messed up review.

Alright. There are quite a few grammar mistakes and sentence structures that need to be fixed, but those are easily fixed. I suggest a beta, they are life savers. This is not a flame, just some suggestions to help improve the readability of this story.

"Should I bring Sonja back to life?"
No, I think that Sonja should remain deceased. If she were alive she would be taking Selene's place of command.

"Should I have Selene do something to Viktor after she and the sick get better?"
This is actually a difficult problem. If Selene does do something she'll land herself in a huge pile of **. The best bet is to have her pretend and go around behind his back to plot his demise.

"What should the sick do after the get better, A) should they get together and make their own coven. B) go back to their own covens and start gathering people that believe them."
I would personally have them form their own coven, them against the world, their own coven that they wouldn't have to act 24/7.

"I'm thinking of changing Jenny Carla's (JC) story a bit and have her call Selene mommy after Selene and the others become sick so this is my question, should I somehow make JC related to Michael?"
It would be interesting to have JC related to Michael. That depends if you can come up with a good backstory and reunion/oh my god my family member is alive scene. I wouldn't say no to a sweet JC calling Selene her Mommy, it would actually be really cute.
Cherry blossom chapter 9 . 12/9/2012
Alright. There are quite a few grammar mistakes and sentence structures that need to be fixed, but those are easily fixed. I suggest a beta, they are life savers. This is not a flame, just some suggestions to help improve the readability of this story.

Another Chance

A/N: Please don't push the back button.

Dear Readers

Hello! Don't worry I have not forgotten about this story and no, I'm not holding this story hostage just so that I can get more reviews. There are about three or four reasons why I've not updated. 1. We are busy planning and getting everything ready for my sister's baby babshower. 2. I'm working on many different stories at the same time that they are all tangle in my head that I'm barely able to get them past 1,000 words.

Third reason. Someone asked me to explain why or what the sickness is. I've tried doing it in a chapter but it doesn't want to come out right. Originally I was going to send Michael, Selene, Sebastian and his wife, David, and Lida(she took care of Eve) but later I change it to have more so that way the original six would have some help in order to save the vampire race. The sickness is a side effect of being send back in time into their passed self. I'm not planning to have two Michaels, two Selenes, two David sect. ect. that would be confusing and weird don't you think. Sonja send them back from the second they died to X number of years before the Purge she was in a hurry so of course there would be some kind of side effect. Does any of this make any sense to any of you because I swear that I don't any other way to explain it.

Now that got that out of the way I need the help of you guys and girls.

"Should I bring Sonja back to life?"
No, I think that Sonja should remain deceased. If she were alive she would be taking Selene's place of command.

"Should I have Selene do something to Viktor after she and the sick get better?"
This is actually a difficult problem. If Selene does do something she'll land herself in a huge pile of shit. The best net is to have her pretend and go around behind his to plot his demise.

"What should the sick do after the get better, A) should they get together and make their own coven. B) go back to their own covens and start gathering people that believe them."
I would personally have them form their own coven, them against the world, their own coven that they wouldn't have to act 24/7.

"I'm thinking of changing Jenny Carla's (JC) story a bit and have her call Selene mommy after Selene and the others become sick so this is my question, should I somehow make JC related to Michael?"
It would be interesting to have JC related to Michael. That depends if you can come up with a good backstory and reunion/oh my god my family member is alive scene. I wouldn't say no to a sweet JC calling Selene her Mommy, it would actually be really cute.
brokenintellect chapter 3 . 11/16/2012
I love the idea. The only thing I didn't really like was that there are so many typos and grammar errors. Maybe get someone to proofread your stories? I think you do have a storytelling talent :)
Loverofgoodstories27 chapter 9 . 11/15/2012
I think you should definitely bring Sonja back! About Selene doing something to Viktor, sorry, cant think of anything. Can hardly figure stuff out for my own stories on here! So dont feel bad about needing to ask for help, its not easy coming up with stuff!
ladybugsmomma chapter 9 . 11/15/2012
Sonja should come back because she's the one who sent them back in time. I would have Selene do something to Viktor just because he killed her family. I think they should make their own coven. Definitely love the idea of making JC call Selene Mommy. You should make her related to Michael. I'm just not sure how. I hope we get the chance to read an update soon!
Devin chapter 9 . 11/15/2012
Don't bring Sonja back, that erases the whole reason Selene was turned and Lucian wants to be/make a hybrid.

No. Selene still loves Viktor, and besides, even if she does remember what she did, she would have to put up a facade of sorts. Altering the past too much could have a negative reaction on the future.

I don't know what you should do for the sick... that's entirely up to you.

Not related to Michael, but I think she should call Selene 'mommy', it would be sweet.

I love this story and hope you have time to update soon.
MBrabs1996 chapter 8 . 10/4/2012
*too lazy to log in* Nice! Update soon?
ladybugsmomma chapter 8 . 10/3/2012
I wonder what is calling the illness. I can't to see how this pans out.
ladybugsmomma chapter 7 . 8/8/2012
Loved this chapter! Can't wait for more!
red lighting chapter 7 . 8/8/2012
LOVE IT
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