Oh no, awful, terrible things... :(

Excellent, the mantis men!
I love Cave Johnson.
And I hope Chell and Wheatley find each other soon. I miss their dynamic.

Carrie's an interesting addition! I like how she works.

That gel sounds like nasty stuff. Ha, perfect for toothpaste... I love the dynamic between Cave and Caroline in the messages.

Aaaaahhhh, so much tension, and then I don't think I've ever read a more exciting sequence of logging in and inputting a command. :)

This chapter was wonderful and sweet, and I loved it.

I'm glad they're getting along better... though still not best friends, which is also good at this point.
I like how you wrote the action sequence of the jump!

Ohh, I loved the interaction with the camera.
Maybe Chell can get some rest, and possibly find some food now!

I like that Chell's SLOWLY starting to tolerate Wheatley more. The pacing is excellent.

Your characterizations and dialogue are PERFECT! Nice job.

I love your characterization of Wheatley. Very realistic.
...Also, the 'any key.' Heehee...

This is excellent! The transitions between Chell and Doug's points of view are very smooth. On to the next chapter!

I did enjoy P-Body's POV a lot! It was interesting to see into the head of a non-human character (your Wheatley comes off as very human, which is a good thing), and to see how she perceives emotions, GLaDOS, and the outside world. I hope you do more with the robots in later chapters.
And Chell. You always make me worry about Chell.

I AM ABSOLUTELY TERRIFIED! WHAT'S GOING TO HAPPEN NEXT, OH GEEZ!

It's really interesting to see this in P-Body's POV! I really liked this chapter _. Keep up the good work!