Reviews for A Captain and her First Mate
lucidapricity chapter 1 . 3/20/2014
This is such a beautiful story but that ending...ugh, right in the feels man! T_T
Gentle Melodious Nocturne chapter 1 . 4/23/2012
I thought it was a great story overall. The only thing I thought was kinda weird/off was when you were talking about them making love. I know what you were getting at with it and I'm sure other people enjoyed it but I would have enjoyed the story more if they were just friends. I makes it seem almost like they're benefriends but...they aren't. Also, when you said, "we fucked right there and then" saying "fucked" kinda ruined the flow. I think a more kosher word or sentence would have worked much better. I really did enjoy the story though I'm not patronizing you just some criticism. The ending was one of the best that I'd seen in a fanficiton it was just amazing! And the intro and body were good. The title I actually didn't care for that much but after reading the ending it gives me chills. Again, really loved the ending. Keep writing!
Lulu chapter 1 . 4/18/2012
For some reason at one moment I thought it was Kairi who was narrating, but after re-reading it I finally understood and I really like what you are doing here, though this really could be anyone narrating since you never mentioned any names... Overall I liked it. Good Job! -Lulu