Reviews for Control That Which You Cannot Destroy
V-rcingetorix chapter 22 . 6/2
The nanotech approach here is very well thought-out. What happens if the healing machines don't switch off?

On the other hand, why not set the nanotech for bones to a slower rate, or a delay? Artificial material is out of the normal range for organic repair (carbon base substances especially), but could there be reservoirs of repair materials available for application?

As an example, let's say for the sake of argument that each bone break requires 2 grams of artificial materials. Muscles are very sensitive to extra weight, so the excess material would need to be spread out across a surface, like the internal mesenteries. The appendix is important for immunity, but since the nanotech is already boosting the immune defenses, it could serve as such a reservoir?
NoobdockSaint chapter 7 . 2/15
Well... shit. Guess I'm gonna go break out the PS3 and romance Jack now. Damn
cammaxton chapter 53 . 1/16
ah, so long since an update to this, such a shame, easily my favourite story on the site. I come back and reread it every few months, it's that good! anyway, I hope you're still around and will maybe one day come back to us, I'll keep my fingers crossed!
jordanzachary4 chapter 1 . 10/21/2017
absolutely amazing story. Hopefully in the future more will come.
HelveticaStandard chapter 1 . 7/27/2017
It is always a shame to see great stories left unfinished. Still, I perfectly understand, and can only hope that one day, you found your muse again; so I am putting this story on my alert. Thank you so very much for writing such an excelled piece. I hope you are well and are living a good life
griezz chapter 53 . 7/25/2016
Over two years since a chapter was posted. I'll be honest: that sucks. However, I know how health matters can appear out of nearly nowhere, and I understand perfectly how hard it can be to get yourself back to anything approaching normal afterwards. Spent the entire summer of 2015 in the hospital, which included serious surgery. Even after getting back home, it's... hard to get going again.
I say all this because I want you to know I do have a good grasp of your reasons; nevertheless, I hope that you can find it within yourself to continue with this story. Your take on Shep, his crew and ME2 is fresh, in that you do a better job than most at showing a realistic reaction Shepard would have to how was resurrected. At the same time, you develop things that don't appear in canon, yet should have been (post-season Ash, the birth of the Cerberus Phantom program, etc.) You even have outright fun with the devilish duo of KasumiKelly, two characters that interacted very little, yet with your writing, you can see how they are perfect for each other.
I hope that you are well, and that you find your muse again. Thank you for what you have shared. Peace!
griezz chapter 11 . 7/24/2016
Once again, a humble fanfic writer gets the Horizon event so much better than the "professionals" at BioWare. You still had the emotional encounter with the Virmire Survivor, and they still couldn't join, yet the reactions feel human and authentic. Thank you for again showing us how it should have gone.
griezz chapter 5 . 7/23/2016
BWAHAHAHA! THE DIRTY DOZEN... porn for a Turian... ok, this story just made my favorites list for that line alone. Thought the mission order odd, given that Thane isn't supposed to join until after Horizon, not to mention I suspect almost everyone does all same-planet missions at the same time, so Archangel/Mordin and Thane/Samara/Miranda's sister.
V-rcingetorix chapter 27 . 7/14/2016
Ok, that is a really good chapter. Speaking as a bio major, I have to agree with the methodology. Remember Steve Irwin? Accidents happen.

Moreover, I believe some of the most successful 'accidental deaths' are caused this way. The USSR had an elite division for that, and you may recall a certain Ukrainian president that had a ... failed attempt. The goal is to get away with it ... unless the goal is to let everyone know who did it ... and just not get caught in the act.
V-rcingetorix chapter 10 . 7/14/2016
The time-slow/adrenaline is very well written. Worthy of the focus of the chapter. I also like how it has limitations; that way there's no 'perfect' weapon there.

Battle analysis of a new foe was also interesting to read. Generally, the game has them as traditional mooks, minimal interpretation needed. In reality, that would be different ... I'll have to remember that one.
V-rcingetorix chapter 4 . 7/13/2016
Ashley here ... interesting. Guilty association. I like how you underplayed her emotions, emphasizing the undercurrents, how she believes it to be wrong, but choosing to believe otherwise.

The only major issue I've had with this chapter is the number of POV hops. You made it work, but the vagueness of the people involved makes it a little harder. For example, you could have combined the shuttle POV's without seriously harming the story overall. The Ashley scenes were better separated - the timeskip was much more easily believed at that rate.

My suggestion would be to change the Shuttle scenes to the same paragraph at the bottom of the story, but that's it. The rest works as it is.

Spelling and Grammar, fantastic! Can't tell you how much I appreciate proper grammar.
Keep up the good work!
V-rcingetorix chapter 1 . 6/28/2016
I love how you have Shepard here. The analysis of his teammates is fantastic!
BlackRevenant chapter 12 . 6/15/2016
Why Grunt?

Pretty much all I wanna know.

Rev
V-rcingetorix chapter 53 . 8/5/2015
This is one of the best Shep/Jack fics I have read, on par with Fainmaca.

Hope you keep it up; I know how the writers block can get hard :/

Keep up the good work!
Himuradono chapter 38 . 7/13/2015
Ah, Ashely, you were always such a sensible and mature person... oh, wait. Never mind.
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