|Reviews for Control That Which You Cannot Destroy|
| griezz chapter 11 . 2h
Once again, a humble fanfic writer gets the Horizon event so much better than the "professionals" at BioWare. You still had the emotional encounter with the Virmire Survivor, and they still couldn't join, yet the reactions feel human and authentic. Thank you for again showing us how it should have gone.
| griezz chapter 5 . 10h
BWAHAHAHA! THE DIRTY DOZEN... porn for a Turian... ok, this story just made my favorites list for that line alone. Thought the mission order odd, given that Thane isn't supposed to join until after Horizon, not to mention I suspect almost everyone does all same-planet missions at the same time, so Archangel/Mordin and Thane/Samara/Miranda's sister.
| V-rcingetorix chapter 27 . 7/14
Ok, that is a really good chapter. Speaking as a bio major, I have to agree with the methodology. Remember Steve Irwin? Accidents happen.
Moreover, I believe some of the most successful 'accidental deaths' are caused this way. The USSR had an elite division for that, and you may recall a certain Ukrainian president that had a ... failed attempt. The goal is to get away with it ... unless the goal is to let everyone know who did it ... and just not get caught in the act.
| V-rcingetorix chapter 10 . 7/14
The time-slow/adrenaline is very well written. Worthy of the focus of the chapter. I also like how it has limitations; that way there's no 'perfect' weapon there.
Battle analysis of a new foe was also interesting to read. Generally, the game has them as traditional mooks, minimal interpretation needed. In reality, that would be different ... I'll have to remember that one.
| V-rcingetorix chapter 4 . 7/13
Ashley here ... interesting. Guilty association. I like how you underplayed her emotions, emphasizing the undercurrents, how she believes it to be wrong, but choosing to believe otherwise.
The only major issue I've had with this chapter is the number of POV hops. You made it work, but the vagueness of the people involved makes it a little harder. For example, you could have combined the shuttle POV's without seriously harming the story overall. The Ashley scenes were better separated - the timeskip was much more easily believed at that rate.
My suggestion would be to change the Shuttle scenes to the same paragraph at the bottom of the story, but that's it. The rest works as it is.
Spelling and Grammar, fantastic! Can't tell you how much I appreciate proper grammar.
Keep up the good work!
| V-rcingetorix chapter 1 . 6/28
I love how you have Shepard here. The analysis of his teammates is fantastic!
| BlackRevenant chapter 12 . 6/15
Pretty much all I wanna know.
| V-rcingetorix chapter 53 . 8/5/2015
This is one of the best Shep/Jack fics I have read, on par with Fainmaca.
Hope you keep it up; I know how the writers block can get hard :/
Keep up the good work!
| Himuradono chapter 38 . 7/13/2015
Ah, Ashely, you were always such a sensible and mature person... oh, wait. Never mind.
| Ssg1 chapter 53 . 10/20/2014
Planning on updating someday, or do I stop hoping?
| Kahoko chapter 53 . 10/20/2014
Amazing fic that needs to be updates soon!
I'm impressed by your skills. Each character fits the original game but you give them more depth. Especially Jack's psyche that has not been fully exploited in game, as well as Shepard (so many characters for one plot might explain that). Hence you taking the time to show Shepard's side effect of being resurrected is brilliant. Same for traumatized Jack. Chara dev. is fantastic also, as well as the plot.
Please don't leave me handing too long!
| Choppy06 chapter 53 . 10/9/2014
No more updates? Ever?
| LockedKeye chapter 48 . 10/5/2014
Oh look, and author tract! I'm actually going to borrow something from Tumblr for this
"I see what they’re doing here! It’s a biting commentary on people not taking women seriously!
I mean, except for the fact that at no point in canon or the fanfic prior to this point does EDI say anything like this, and the fact that she’s berating Joker in the middle of a crisis situation where he can’t afford to be distracted, or the fact that the male equivalent of a “cat fight” is usually just called “a fight”, and the term catfight isn’t really gendered and will probably be even less so in a century and a half, and saying that the XO ticking someone off may lead to physical violence or verbal conflict is the exact opposite of trivializing it, or the fact that Joker trivializes just about everything, or the fact that EDI sounds so personally offended she’s totally not just being used by the fic’s writer to crowbar their opinions into the story."
| Alden Kessler chapter 53 . 7/10/2014
this is literally my favorite mass effect the characters to the interactions and the inner thoughts. I hope to see more from this but feel free to take your time.
| imrae chapter 53 . 6/2/2014
Just read through this story today. Great stuff, hope you continue!