|Reviews for Tersmeden|
| Mayumi-san chapter 2 . 5/18/2012
Oooh... Sprinkles... Got any more of that? :D
There are still some spelling mistakes, but yes it's understandable. And the plot is promising. I do hope you continue.
"I almost feel sorry for him for having to listen to me ever day. Almost." - Just a typo on the "ever" word. It's supposed to be "every", but I love this line. LOL :D
Oh, and you should insert a line to separate your notes from the actual story so as not to be confusing. Like that "sunbathing line" hehehe :)
| Mayumi-san chapter 1 . 4/25/2012
Interesting introduction you got there! I will be keeping my eye out for what happens next :)
Oh, and you have some spelling and grammatical errors, so having a beta reader would be a good idea.
Your paragraph breaks have improved, though ;)
"She punctures my bubble in the most painful way possible." - This line made me laugh :D