so stations of canon despite your attempts to hide it? cringe bad and unoriginal writing

Cringe. All can be said. An author should be impartial. Well a good one i suppose, an absolute garbage one doesnt it seems. Then 99.9% fanfics with their false illogical "cherry morality" prove to me that despite all her faults, Rowling is actually a better person tha most on earth. A staggeringly depressing thought since i co sider has about as moral as Hitler.

Back to the story: Its anothrr Harry Potter K- pretending Teen or Mature, while in reality being basically... What if DOLORES UMBRIDGE wrote Harry Potter not Rowling.
Its all pink, full of deus ex machinas and offers exactly ZERO tension or actual magic beyond idiot authors made up spells that dont fit cos arent greek or lating but willy wonka english like: Bananas Aplentias or Housus Magikus Protectus Harus Potterus For Lifus Fromus Allus Plotus.

Also Dumbledore and Ron bashing cks of course the idiot author who thinks himself a good person does that ;p love how author is anti-bullying but will bully imaginary characters he doesnt like ;p fucking two faced shits of this world.

Thanks for a well-written and entertaining story.

my favorite story

this is the second read through for me. i enjoyed it just as much as the 1st.

great story !

I really loved this story.

I only have two criticisms that I feel strongly about.

One, Harry felt like a side/background character for a lot of the story. He kind of just...was meh. I would have made the majority of the P.O.V from Harry's perspective, with a few smatterings here and there of only Sirius, Hermione, Voldemort, and Dumbledore. I just didn't really get the full "Harry Potter becomes independent of Dumbledore and is super powerful" because he really seemed to depend on Sirius way too much, and he still acts like an angsty teenager. Sometimes he is annoying to read.

The other issue I had was that a lot of things seemed to happen off-screen. Like, usually when Sirius or any other character had a scene where they should have reacted to something important, we didn't get the scene, and instead had them just talking about the event later on with a different character. I kept wanting to read the actual reactions in the moment only to find out that I wasn't going to get to.

The only other minor thing was that I felt like Hannah was shoe-horned in as a later development instead of being planned from the beginning to betray Harry. There wasn't really any sort of hint that Barty was manipulating a female minor (from his POV), and the story didn't really give any subtle hints that it was happening. It should have.

The rest of the story was well written and fun to read. I hope you do write a sequel someday.

Wonderful story, with great writing. I've really enjoyed the journey and wish it didn't have to end.

The only downside was some time confusion during the first summer; it would have been helpful with more dates at the start, like you did later on. Also, the time bubble could maybe be listed as Day 1, etc, rather than an actual date, as that was truly confusing.

Otherwise, thank you very much for a great story, which manages to be unique despite loosely following the canon framework. Keep up the good work

Do you know someone is posting your story as a podcast on AO3?

Thank you for this story! It's unique and well written! A complex story, that I really recommend! Thanks again!

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harry is a child so his behavior is kinda expected, but he's so goddamn whiny and immature at times, even for his age. after all, just because its in character doesnt mean its not obnoxious to read. #HarryIsLameAsFuckSometimes

Im kinda getting a bit sick of this story. None of the buffs to the good guys matter at all, because you just arbitrarily made the bad guys even stronger, and made everything that happens more dangerous. the entire premise of this story has kinda been spoiled since you REFUSE to let the good guys gain any actual advantage, you just keep moving the goalposts. This is just canon except everyone on both sides is equally stronger, theres no real point to it. #BadWriting

yay, blatant unfair interference. fantastic. right off the bat this tournament is already more bullshit than the books. #KindaLame

so ive kinda realized that pretty much EVERY child character in this story outside of harry, and a bit or hermione, draco, and neville is just...irrelevant filler. just side characters whose presence adds nothing to the story besides filling a spot. #KidsAreFuckinUseless

honestly the goblet as a plot device is stupid. its an artifact that can somehow magically bind CHILDREN without their knowledge, consent or presence, and kills the kid if they want out of the bullshit they didnt even sign up for . its a fucking dark artifact.

lets be real, the plot has to bend over backwards to not only make him participate, but also stop him from sandbagging or giving up like fleur did in round 2 in the books. its a giant mess of contrived writing, and no matter what its not going to be good. this story is trying its best to work around just how bad the writing in the book was, and its not really succeeding (i think it impossible for ANYONE to fix), but goddamn do i at least applaud the monumental effort the author is putting in.

#TheMagicCupIsFuckinStupidAndWeHateIt