Thank you for your story … so far. I can only hope that you will decide to finish this tale eventually. I can imagine several ways to slot the current narrative with what can be salvaged from the original books. Since ‘Harry’ is ‘missing’, there may be no need for the TriWizard Tournament, among other changes.

How about ‘The Crew’?

Thank you for your story. It is too bad that some people cannot ignore a story they don’t like but feel they must berate the author. I have enjoyed your ideas so far and hope that you will dust off your muse and finally finish this tale.

Once in a while I find out amazing fic that sadly has been discontinued. No clue if you are still around, but this thing is amazimgly written. Is this harry more mature then he should be? Eh, sure. But it's hard to write kids. The only thing i would nitpick is that we dont see enough of the mafia reality.

Thank you for you story so far. I would really love to see more added

How long would a de-aging potion work?

I knew it had to be something like a magical that Harry knew. Didn’t think it would be Sirius Black.

Still very interesting. I’m a bit worried about Nio really learning about the ‘family’ business though. I think it would ruin it for me if Harry turned evil.

why cant people just read and enjoy the story or use their imagination to fill the gaps or plot holes or better yet write a constructive criticism to explain and not be mean to the authors. i think the story is great and creative about the alternate characteristics of certain people, i especially liked remus in this one than in canon. thats all i have to say good work author i hope you dont give up on writing even though i new this story is abandoned.

I look forward to see what happens when Draco realize that not only is the world he's entering violent as all Hell, but he can't even back out of it if he wanted too. _

For a daddy's boy with a unicorn hair wand*, that is one HELL of a challenge.

(*Unicorn hair "does not lend itself to the Dark Arts", to quote Olivander.

It's why Draco couldn't have killed dumbledore, even if he tried. If he can even manage to hex someone it'd be a moracle.

Which again says a lot about his personality -the wand chooses the wizard that fits it best after all.)

Draco is all bark and and no bite. AND he can't keep his mouth shut worth a damn. ("They raided the manor, but they didn't find the secret room in the study where my father keeps all our Dark Arts objects". Remeber that bragging? Yeeeah...)

He wouldn't last a day in the tough reality of the Mafia.

I wonder if he breaks or toughens up when faced with it...?

Maybe he can get out if Nio views his as a mere Asociate.

I suppose he'll test him (likely by making him kill someone) before he'll consider him a "Made Man" and part of the Family.

Although the mafia tests tend to be a kill-or-be-killed-if-you-fail type thing.

Fucking up or hessitating when trying to assassinate a rival mafia member usually spells death.

And Draco is a spoiled little whimp.

Oh, Snape is going to go BALISTIC!
His godson joining the mafia?!

And Snape is raised in the muggle word.
He KNOWS how short lifespan people involved with them has.

Not to mention Narcissa's reaction.
She desperately loves her son, even if all she does is cry and beg Severus for help when the whole Voldemort thing happens.

Oh, and Molly is gonna blow a casket!
At least if the twins get involved with the mob.
Once she understands what it is at any rate.

Mind you, I CAN see the Twins end up as vastly successful interrogators or something.

Twisted slightly, add a dash of sadism and some torture equipment and/or knives, and that twin-speech thing is bloody terrifying.
Very... Terror Twins, or The Demons kf Gryffindor, as some people have called them.

Either way I look forward to see what happens with that, when you get around to write it. _

Awesome, AWESOME story!

Chapter 12:

If people who read your story tell you it's just bad instead of offering constructive criticism that helps you become a better writer, just ignore them. CLEARLY they are idiots.

However, if someone suggests things you could improve (however badly worded), it's worth considering if their critics have a point, and use that information to improve.

I'm currently reading a book I bought on kindle (Belial: The Demon of Mischief), and I can SEE it's self-published because no publisher would ever allow the overuse of adjectives and long, drawn-out explanations and descriptions that slow the story down and make it both boring AND hard to read.

Despite that, it's a great story. And if the author had killed off aproximatly 1/3'd of it, it would be pretty damned great. On line with properly published books.

I have also re-read the first Harry Potter book, and it's ripe with spelling-errors and minor flaws.

My point is:

Everyone makes mistakes when they start writing, and even the best writers are not great when they start writing.

(And the avrage properly published writer have a large stack of rejection letters and about 10 re-writes/edits before their novel is published.)

So it's always smart to listen to criticism when someone offers it. Provided they say something that makes sense, and not just "you suck".

That said, your story IS brilliant.

Yes, you over-explain...sometimes a lot... but that's pretty typical for a fanfic. It's the single most common mistake in writing as a whole.

But knowing that allows you to write a story next time, by watching out for the problem and fixing it before publishing.

And if you don't edit your story at least once before publishing, and this story is litterally your first draft, you're one heck of a good writer.

ALL great writers edit their stories. First drafts are NEVER perfect.

But your story is pretty damned good. And suprisingly well-written.

And the more you learn and practise, the better you will get.

Personally I keep looking forward to the next chapter of this story every single time I re-read it. _

I got to the final episode of How to Become a Mob Boss, and I changed my mind on my theory.

Maybe Sal is more like Pablo Escobar?
Or maybe a mix of him and Whitey?

Not sure if Sal would sell drugs or not, but Escobar was vastly successful.

And he had a way to make everyone his friend.
(And kill those who refused his generouse bribes.)

Escobar is also one of the few who seem to prefer to make his rivals allies instead of just killing them.
(Not kill those who accepted his alliance anyway.
He did kill pleanty of people who went against him.)

Oh, human trafficking. I had forgotten the chinese mafia boss woman. Another business I wonder where Sal stands on. _

(And the related business of "helping" people to escape shitty countries, like cuba, to a wealthy land -for a large fee-, and id the Coyote (people smuggler) is a real ass, he'll charge the family extra to allow tge person they smuggled to go free once they reach american soil -and kill them if their family can't pay.

Admittedly, this is more an american option. In the 90s I think the UK may have been in the EU, so most nearby piss-poor countries could move in on their own.

But IF Britain was NOT in tge EU, it's one potential business. Even IF it's mostly done in america.)

Still love this fanfic tho.

After watching "How to become a mafia boss" on Netflix I have to say I'm impressed by Sal!

Not only because the avrage mafia boss (and his family) have an avrage life expectacy of max 7-10 years after rising to Capo or Boss position, but also because he's hiding the shere amount of violence and murder ALL mafia bosses MUST order to stay alive and put of jail from his son. (Which makes sense, Harry is only 11. But it may come as a shock when he do learn about it.)

I assume he's the british version of the infamous "Whitey" (american mob boss), who may be the longest ruling mafia boss of all times.

And when the cops finally found enough to make it stick, as they always do sooner or later, Whitey pulled off an impressive dissapearance act for 16 years, and only the lack of a good disguise paired with bad luck got him caught at all.

But I DO wonder what will happen when the cops close in on Sal -and they will.

Having someone capable of erasing memory and evidence could help him greatly. (And make Harry work even harder to study and learn magic that can help his daddy.)

But I wonder if he is ruthless enough to handle the dirty side of his dad's businiss.

I also wonder where he stands on the drug issue.

On one hand, selling drugs is the quickest way to get filthy rich. On the other hand it is high profiled, and liable to get you caught quicker.

(So much so that one mafia boss told his underlings that if any of them dealt with drugs in any way, he'd kill them.)

I also think that if Hermione had watched the same show as I did, she'd have a mental breakdown over this. xD

Have Sal beaten any charges? It's notoriously difficult to get things to stick to a good mafia boss, but some are never even charges because they hide it well -but those are less known until they ARE caught, because they keep their head down and their face and name out of the papers.

I love Mafia!Harry, and your story IS brilliant!

I just wish we'd see a bit more of the business side of things. Especially now that Harry is getting older and can handle being taught how to run the business.

I am also curious what Sal's game is.

Racketeering, prostitution, drugs, gambling, protection money/extortion, counterfeiting, and whitewashing businesses are the most common as far as I can tell.

But not all bosses use the same sources of income.

Murder and violence is non-optional -but by and large they kill people who can't keep their mouth shut, traitors, or people who pose a risk to them and the Fanily. And rival families of course.

(With a large number of exceptions that kill people for multitude of reasons, including lack of respect, litterally anyone -even women and children- that get in their way or cause trouble, and especially police or reporters that get in their way. "The Beast" from Sicily being a prime example. I believe his death toll hit four digets or thereabout. Maybe more. It was impressive.)

Sal sounds like the somewhat honerable, strickt rules with strickt punishment, and a small inner circle kind of guy.

But you know this better than me. Lol

I just look forward to see how everything turns out. _

A mafia boss never lacks for enemies after all.

And that's without ec

What a wonderful joke on the Wizarding World!

Whhhhhhhhhyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy? The story so far is so good, why abandon a masterpiece like this?