Passive aggressive kidnapping

I much liked it
very goods

I'm suprised your notes on a possible romantic relationship for Nio doesn't mention Daphne Greengrass.

Not much is really known about her, but the majorety of fanfics write her as an Ice Queen, and/or politician wife type person.

As far as a mafia wife goes, Daphne WOULD fit the bill.

That said, the mafia is notorious for keeping women and children as far away from the business as possible -so someone like Ginny COULD work, as a housewife type.

But she'd work better as the kind of wife who doesn't even know what her husband is doing. So for your story she may not be the best.

(Hermione would be an unmitigated disaster with all her moralism. And the Mafia may have started out as a group that helped the little people, but they quickly moved into a whole lot of amoral and downright evil shit.

I halfway expect the Diadones to fight the turkish mafia over drug territories, for instance. Although I THINK the Italian mafia takes a dim view on human trafficking cuz of their respect for women, as opposed to turkish...anything...who view women as sub-human cattle. Or close anyway.)

Of course, there is always the possibility of a joining of the Zabini and the Diadone families if Nio marries Blaise.

Both families would see the benefits of such a union, as both families are powerful in their own rights. If on different shores.

(I also like blaise. Lol)

But I would say that whoever you choose (and an Heir to a mafia family MUST evetually marry), Nio would care more about doing what's best for the family, and doing his duty, than about romance, when choosing a life partner.

He may sleep around and party (although he doesn't seem that type, still it is not uncommon), but when it comes to marrige, business comes before pleasure.

Daphne could bring money and political pull in the wizarding world, while Blaise could unify two powerful families.

Whatever you choose tho, I hope you keep updating this fanfic!

I love this story! _

Love this story.

I enjoy how Harry is starting his own criminal empire without looking like a bad guy.

...I meant to say Diadone. I don't know why I mix this up with Vanhan, beside botg stories being great and magia harry.

Oh, and it suddenly struck me WHY so many people write dumbledore as Evil... or a theory on why...

It's hard to imagine how someone who is good can hurt people, isn't it?

-I- may have studied psychology and humans for long enough to see that even the nicest person can easily become horrible monster, and it's the best intentions that often causes the worst harm.

(Hitler was all good intentions, to name an example. And his own people loved him because he DID save Germany from a horrible situation and gace them hope.

Of course, his good intentions and using jews as scapegoats spiraled out of control and turned into something the avrage person think is the most horrible thing ever, since no one cares about genocide in africa or other obscure non-euopean/american things...

But he meant well.

...just like dumbledore.)

My point is; Villain Dumbledore makes no sense, and he becomes 2 dimentional and flat.

If he is genuinely upset over the harm he causes Harry, but his attempts to both help Harry AND the wizarding world crashes and he can't do both and sees sacing thousands better than saving one... THAT is In Character for him.

(And if he hadn't, say, insisted of giving Harry a childhood, and fucking trained him, many people around Harry would still be alive, like Sirius.)

Anyway... I rant... lol

Keep writing. Aside from dumbles, you're doing a great job! _

I love your story, I really do. And you write it really well too! _

But you have an itty-bitty problem with...dumbledore the OOC Villain...

Sooo...

Presuming the problem is that it can be hard to write a good/kind/righteous antagonist, can I suggest a video you might find valuble to watch? _

m .yout ube watch?v16eJZmW_cGE

I had to split it up (cuz ff net have issues with links) but if you copypaste it and close the gaps it'll work fine. Easy-pecy. _

I hope to see your awesome works become even more epic in the future -and see more of Vahan.

Even knowing from the start that this was long dead and abandoned, this is one of my favorites. It was simply fun to read. Its only weakness is far too many coincidences at the start to get all the characters lined up, but once it gets rolling its a blast.

It’s a shame this fic has been abandoned. Oh, well.

I really like your version of Hermionr and Neville.

I wish you would update.

Please update’

Sweet interlude. I enjoyed seeing how Remus became like this. It’s a nice deviation from typical canon Remus.

It kind of disturbs me that Sirius left an innocent man to die in Azkaban after suffering for years. Even if the guy was unpleasant, it’s not like he deserved AZKABAN.

This is such a nice fanfic. I can’t wait for Hogwarts