Reviews for Due Payment
Monado Boy chapter 3 . 7/31/2013
Ok. That was hilarious.

Moving on, SMITZY! I remember your prequel story from like, a year ago! I was really impressed with your ability to make all the points come together at the end.

As for this one, it's a bit early to say. The final few paragraphs of Chapter Two were a little too obscure for the reader. Was Anabel upset about Gary calling Ash a"lucky bastard", or just holding a grudge from the overall harrassment? Both? Neither? Did you explain in a later chapter? I don't know; I'm not that far yet. Keep up the good work!

F4R
Alatum Laminis chapter 5 . 7/10/2013
I started snickering around mid-chapter...and couldn't keep myself from laughing out loud by the time I reached the end.
WhiteEagle1985 chapter 5 . 7/9/2013
Interesting chapter here!
The Clown King Of Chaos chapter 5 . 7/9/2013
I love this so far! Cannot wait for more!
Fortunately, i just found this today, so i suppose I avoided having to wait like everyone else in a weird way, but whatever.
LightRayPearlshipper chapter 5 . 7/8/2013
There wouldn't be enough grass types in Unova for Ash to do monotype... Definitely not enough.
RyoshiMorino chapter 5 . 7/8/2013
Haha, nicely done. It was hilarious. I'm so glad you're back in action, this story had become one of my favorites :D
LightRayPearlshipper chapter 4 . 5/25/2013
Ash will catch a Deino which will evolve into Hydreigon eventually. He will also get Riolu at Flocessy Ranch which will help him develope aura powers and evolve into Lucario later on. He felt guilt about Pikachu, so he should come back. They should each get one Solosis to evolve into Reuniculus eventually. Maybe give a Scolipede to Ash after evolving from a Venipede. For his flying type, he will receive an egg that hatches into Rufflet which is to evolve into Braviary. Ash's Solosis is interchangeable with Meloetta from BW season two that he met the first time around when he went through Unova or switch Pikachu with Meloetta.

Anabel will have Solosis to evolve into Reuniculus as stated before. I can't think of many psychic types in Unova. She can also catch a Riolu at Flocessy Ranch. This will still allow telepathic communications because Riolu can use aura. She would also catch Musharna, Gothitelle, and a Beeheyem with an interesting personality. If you don't want Meloetta with Ash, then you can give her Meloetta as she is part psychic type.

Please hear me out for this part. For the major conflict with Team Plasma, I believe that they should be after Reshiram to fuse with Kyurem and Ash should get Zekrom. This would be tribute to the old Team Plasma who was after fixing the truth that pokemon were abused by humans and should be liberated. The reason for Ash to get Zekrom is because Zekrom is the dragon of Ideals and that is what Ash represents. He represents the ideality of pokemon living with the right trainers, not the releasment of pokemon. He sees it as cruel to release a pokemon and in a way, represents Zekrom here.
LightRayPearlshipper chapter 3 . 5/25/2013
I don't get what happened here.
The Generic Ficer chapter 1 . 1/20/2013
I have team Ideas for Ash and Anabel.
Ash: Reuniclus, Simipour, Druddigon, Zebstrika, Bouffalant and Escavalier
Anabel: Fighting-types. The fighting-type compliments the Psychic-type, and if you add Scrafty to her team she will have a way to counter Ghosts.
A great fic so far. I don't strongly support AbilityShipping (too one-sided for my liking) it is a good fic, and it captures what Ash might see in Anabel.
RyoshiMorino chapter 4 . 11/25/2012
Dark types for Ash.
WhiteEagle1985 chapter 4 . 11/13/2012
What? No Pikachu for Ash! Blasphemy! It's not new (think Trainer of Legends or PseudoMaster) and it's not right!
Aspertia City as the first gym instead of Striaton? Double blasphemy!

No teams planned out? Mockery!

All in all a chapter that makes me say goodbye!
Ability King KK chapter 4 . 11/12/2012
Wait, why is Pikachu not there? There'd be no way Ash would ever leave Pikachu behind, no matter what.

As for the teams...for Ash I say just go with what he has in the animé as they are pretty cool and/or badass. Oshawott, Pignite, Snivy, Unfezant, Scraggy, Leavanny, Palpitoad, Boldore, Krookodile? I see nothing wrong with them.

For Anabel, considering that she's a Psychic-type trainer, obviously Psychic-types are needed. How 'bout a team of Gothorita, Baltoy, Lunatone, Swoobat, Starmie, and Darmanitan.
TsuinRasengan chapter 4 . 11/12/2012
Ash
samurott zoroark volcarona sawsbuck unfeasant and beartic personal best from my games three from white three from black

Anabel:
gothitelle reuniclus musharna darmanitan sigilyph and beheeyem best unova psychic types
CristianoIvan1093 chapter 3 . 9/20/2012
Great Chapter and can't wait for the next update! :)
Kzer chapter 3 . 8/12/2012
HAHAHA! Nice chap but u should probably change this fic to M.
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