I'd have thought a spectre would have handled little this situation a lot better.

It seems as though Lily is too naive and states the obvious in her thoughts too often. Even if Jane is her sister, she's a bit of an insubordinate when it comes to her being her sister's lieutenant. On the field they should treat each other as soldiers, and on off times should treat each other as sisters. But that's what I think of Lily so far as a character.

Nice first part, didnt understand the second part.

is there a reason you make so many short chapterrs? why combine some of these really short ones into longer

Excellent work

The Butcher is becoming a bitch. I hope Lily stands her ground.

Damn...

Nice chapter.

Two excellent updates!loved them

Nice chapter

Cliffhanger endings are like drill sergeants using painful and repetitive exercise to punish recruits in boot camp. Both accomplish what the user intends; with writers, they get readers to come back, whereas with drill sergeants, they instill discipline and obedience. But they both have an unintended and profound side effect of creating disdain for their user.

Be careful as overuse of cliffhangers will create that disdain. Its actually an insult to loyal readers, as it shows that you are willing to use it as a cheap tactic to get them to come back. Imaginative ideas and skillful writing (both of which you have shown) suffice plenty to keep the masses coming back.

Keep it coming
From a fellow freelance writer
Lieutenant Jackson James Reaver, US Navy

Nice job, Garrus is making friends...

I always loved the way that V.I desmissed that Krogan...eheheheheh

Surprise ruined...

Damn