|Reviews for Jaws|
| AkumuHoshi chapter 1 . 7/7
| m chapter 1 . 9/16/2013
c'est horrible !
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/12/2013
| S. Snowflake chapter 1 . 6/7/2012
I’m happy to see that someone is writing about Bill and Will, who I believe are nice characters despite “Happy Feet Two” not really needing them. I also enjoy them as a pairing and it was nice to see their relationship tested.
I noticed that you need a little work catching your end-of-sentence punctuation. There were a couple of sentences that ended in periods where a comma was called for and other little things like that. A little proofread would get rid of those.
I’ll have to brush up on my research of course, but I’m not sure if sharks really go after krill.
Also, I feel that the sentence “because krill can breath in water” was not really needed.
There were plenty of things I did like though. Like the overall sorrow of the ending and Jill and Bill’s “2.5 krilldren.” Wit and heart overcome flaws.