|Reviews for Another Love Story|
| Myth Maniac chapter 2 . 12h
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| Edhla chapter 1 . 12/9/2012
Disclaimer: I'm not familiar with this fandom, sorry :(
I like your basic idea and your writing has an enthusiasm that I'm also fond of. There are some nice details, like "smiling at the ceiling."
I found, though, that I had a difficult time reading this because of the spelling, grammar and punctuation. I really, really recommend a beta reader (I have three!) to proofread your stuff and help you with things like commas and other forms of punctuation, as well as being there to keep an eye on things like plotting and characterisation. A beta is unbeatable!
Practice makes better. Good luck x