Reviews for Fire Flower
Shana Nakazawa chapter 11 . 12/5/2012
Ah, yang tadi. Link-nya yang bener tuh ini (ilangin semua spasi) - idffnaward . wordpress polling-ifa-2012 / kategori-fanfiction / kategori-ff-mayor / best-hurtcomfort-os/

Yosh, makasih banyak atas vote dan dukungannya. Shana berharap banyak nih, hehe... :)
Shana Nakazawa chapter 12 . 12/5/2012
Hi, there!

Shana is back! *like somebody is waiting for you!*

Oke, hontou ni hontou ni hontou ni GOMENASAI! FC dan FT, gomenasai! Shana namanya telat review tuh telat banget! :'( Biasalah, Direktorat... Sama kan?

Alright, ini review-nya dua chapter sekaligus aja ya? Wah, EYD-nya bener-bener meningkat! Good thing. Ada beberapa kesalahan, sih, emang, tapi gak ganggu dan sekarang fic-nya makin enak dibaca. Aw, Ace dan Deuce berantem... Mungkin yang agak ganggu adalah sikap Deuce yang terkesan... cengeng, maybe? Bisa dibuat lebih 'strong' lagi? Ace, how temper... I like it. Overall, semuanya udah melebihi standar, kok. Ceritanya juga pendek dan manis, lumayan buat bacaan di saat senggang.

Yup, that's all I want to say. As usual, KEEP WRITING AND GANBATTE!

Love,

Shana Nakazawa

p.s. : Tau IFA 2012? Indonesian Fanfiction Award 2012? Fic 07-Ghost Shana, Kioku no Kakera, masuk nominasi Best Hurt/Comfort. Dukung, ya. Vote di link ini : polling-ifa-2012/kategori-fanfiction/kategori-ff-mayor/best-hurtcomfort-os/ Hontou ni arigatou! :)
GroundZeroFirework chapter 12 . 12/5/2012
Wow, that is so dramatic. Just the thing I like. Can't wait for the next chapter. Please update soon.
GroundZeroFirework chapter 11 . 12/5/2012
No problem and give yourself some credit, this story is very creative actually. I liked this chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Shana Nakazawa chapter 10 . 9/26/2012
Hai, FC and FT!

Untuk review ini aku pake bahasa Indonesia aja, ya. Oya, ini juga review buat chapter 9 n 10 ya.

Sebenernya ini udah cukup. Malah termasuk bagus. Aku suka. Dan akhirnya EYD-nya bener! Wah, aku seneng banget, lho! Bacanya jadi lebih enak dan terarah. Cuma ini lho, kalo misalnya dialog ( "Why, don't you go first then?" An annoyed Sice answered Eight. ) lebih baik ( "Why, don't you go first then?" [a]n annoyed Sice answered Eight. ) Jadi habis tanda petik tuh huruf kecil.

Itu aja. Ayo, keep improving and writing ya. Kutunggu chapter selanjutnya, oke? vb

Love,

Shana Nakazawa
GroundZeroFirework chapter 10 . 9/17/2012
First off, no need to thank me. I just like to encourage you to keep this story up and no, it's not crappy. What makes you think that? It's actually romantic and cool and funny. And secondly, this chapter is those three I just described. I hope you update again soon. I want to find out what happens next.
gery toya-toya chapter 9 . 8/20/2012
cooolllllllllllllllll!
GroundZeroFirework chapter 9 . 8/15/2012
Please, give me more chapters. I love it so freaking much! This chapter is so romantic and awesome. By the way, there are some mistakes again but this chapter is so awesome. Please update again AS FAST AS YOU CAN!
Shana Nakazawa chapter 8 . 8/10/2012
Hai, FC dan FT! Kali ini review pake bhs. Indo aja, ya!

Oke, ini bagus. Humornya lumayan. Sumpah, pas bagian di Concordia Palace yg bagian GONE... GONE... GONE... itu lawak bgt!

Soal EYD, masih kurang. Latihan lagi, ya. Tapi cerita bagus, kok. Mengalir dengan baik, well done! KEEP WRITING, GANBATTE!

Love,

Shana Nakazawa

p.s. : kalian berhenti LIA ya? Sepi tau... Oya, fic Let's Get Married Sensei udah apdet, RnR dong, please? :)
Shana Nakazawa chapter 8 . 8/11/2012
Hi there, FC and FT!

Hey, I'm reviewing now! So, please, PLEASE, review my new chapter of Let's Get Married, Sensei!

Umm, aku lagi males banget ngomong Inggris, jadi mending pake Indo aja, yah? Oke, kita mulai. Ceritanya emang bagus, plot-nya rapih. Tapi, jujur aja, EYD kalian masih berantakan. Padahal ini idenya juga bagus banget loh! Romance-nya ngena gitu. Gak ada yang berlebihan, santai, aku suka pokoknya! b

Dan soal humor, suer, yang bagian 'That reminds me WHERE IS CHICHIRI? What if Chichiri is gone… Gone…Gone….Gone. The word GONE kept repeating in his mind.' itu lawak bgt! Aku suka! Yah, intinya mah bagus gitu. Cuma kayaknya konfliknya berubah terus ya? Bakal jadi long fic ini sih.

Oke deh, gitu aja. Ini juga udah terlalu bawel, hehe... Yup, last but not least... KEEP WRITING, GANBATTE!

Love,

Shana Nakazawa

p.s. : kalian berhenti LIA ya? Sepi bgt tau gak ada kalian! Trus, sekali lagi, please review fic Let's Get Married, Sensei! PLEASE! *nangis gugulingan sambil sujud*
Kunagiri chapter 8 . 7/27/2012
Hi, I have to be honest. This fic have potential, especially the plot. Yet, the characterizations and grammars seems... very off. I hope you can cover your flaws and write more.
GroundZeroFirework chapter 8 . 7/21/2012
FINALLY! You updated! I've been waiting for about a week or two! I loved this chapter and I hope you update once more. Fast. Sorry rushing you even a bit or a lot but I want to see what happens next. :P
Guest chapter 1 . 6/30/2012
Nice Story you got here
Keep Updating kay !
Shana Nakazawa chapter 7 . 6/24/2012
Hi again, FC and FT!

Owh, i just realizes my previous review was too short. Sorry for that.

Okay, if you want this review to be longer, then here it is.

I like this chapter, it's cool. I like the story itself, light and fun. But i think you should make the next chapters longer. I'm a bit (remember, just a bit, maybe 5 %) dissapointed by the battle scene, because it can be better. You just have to add some description. It doesn't matter if it's not important. Example, if you write "Ace woke up in the morning and takes a bath" you can describe "The sun has just rises from the east, and a boy named Ace wakes up from his sound sleep. He stretched out a bit, and decided to takes a bath even though it's still early." Maybe that's it. Oh, and some, err... EYD (b. indonesia) is still wrong.

I think that's all. I don't want to make you angry or what because of my fussiness. Keep writing, GANBATTE!

Love,

Shana Nakazawa
GroundZeroFirework chapter 7 . 6/20/2012
Hello again! This is a really great chapter and I noticed that your grammar is improving. I loved the battle scene and the tailing scenes. I laughed so hard when Deuce tried to lie to Queen and Cinque about where she went.

Might I suggest that you make your chapters longer. Like adding some scenes between Ace and Deuce or some scenes of them with the other members of Class Zero but with some A2 smashed in there, of course.

Anyways, I loved the chapter and I hope you update ASAP because I cannot wait to see what happens next. :)
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