|Reviews for Your Heart in Black|
| Sifutoph chapter 3 . 1/18
Oohhhh please finish the chapters soon i really want to know what happens.
| Rex Splode chapter 3 . 1/10
This is a really good story. I've wanted to read a story about their adult years. The only thing i can say i wish was different was that each chapter was longer because of how good it is. I like Tophs attitude and how it carries over to adulthood and seeing her be vulnerable rather than brash and rough is interesting.
| NilaEatsZombiesForBreakfast chapter 7 . 12/16/2013
I really love this story! It's my favorite Tokka story when they're older. I really hope this isn't the ending, and you still have more! I know its most likely impossible, and if it was true I'm sure we would know by now, but I so wanted Lin to be Sokka's daughter! So this fic makes me happy! I even like the whole Suki thing, and poor little Touya! Again I really love this but...
There are a few things though...
Like Bumi is the oldest of Katara and Aang's children, not Kya, she's the middle child.
Tenzin is a year older then Lin, where he's not even born yet here. Tenzin's 52 Lin's 51.
I was thinking that Zuko's daughter (Ursa, which I really hope does turn out to be her name in cannon) is older then the other gaang kids because Iroh II is so much older then Jinora (Tenzin and Pema's oldest child) but I'm not sure about that anymore because Pema is 36 where Tenzin is 52 so she could be around the same age of the other gaang kids, Zuko's daughter just had her son before Tenzin had his kids.
But I guess I can't be a stickler for details because this is a fanfiction after all.
| lapisdreamer chapter 7 . 9/9/2013
Beautiful! You have the characters personalities perfect. I would love to see more
| Phishouttawatta chapter 7 . 1/17/2013
BAH! i need more chapters to reaaaad! MOAR!
| Phishouttawatta chapter 5 . 1/17/2013
well you got the characterization of aang and katara right on the nose...katara finds out about a situation and aang will probably be clueless for a long while :P
| Phishouttawatta chapter 3 . 1/17/2013
ahhhh! he's standing outside the door! AAAAH! so excited!
| Phishouttawatta chapter 1 . 1/17/2013
i LOVE it so far! can't wait until rest of the gaang sees her :D
| Annab1119 chapter 7 . 1/16/2013
awesome your chapters are always great. i love the intensity and sincerity with which you write, it makes it a heavy drama without being depressing or making me hate all the characters
| hagithara chapter 7 . 1/5/2013
i loved it..please write more!
| lovely-logic chapter 1 . 1/2/2013
This is a great beginning. I love ATLAB, but I never read much fanfic for it. This is so bittersweet, so natural. I never imagined Toph as much of a mother, but it fit so perfectly here- she's rough, but touched by her daughter. Also, your writing of her perception of Sokka was absolutely beautiful. It's hard enough to describe what a normal character sees, but compellingly writing a character who's missing one of the five senses is extremely difficult- well done.
One tiny error:
-"ofmotherly knowledge"- should be 'of motherly'
The angst and warm and fuzzies were perfectly balanced here- I felt that Toph spoke as both a lover and a mother, so kudos to you for striking the balance. I'm eager to see where this leads (especially because I actually know this fandom).
| MessengerOfDreams chapter 1 . 1/1/2013
It must be a daunting task, writing for Toph Bei Fong. Not that I really write much for actual scripted work in regards to fan fiction, but I would place Toph next to Moriarty and Iron Man in a list of 'people I cannot even consider writing in first person for'. So, I'm impressed with how you've done this. You've captured Toph, her stubbornness, tenacity, strength and that little sliver of vulnerability she has. Also really appreciated how much she adores her kid. Brings a smile to her face.
Truth is, I didn't expect to tag you, and I make it a personal policy not to read Lemons (I just am not typically cool with watching childhood heroes get along in the bedroom.) However, I have to say, with the excellent character development and the promising premise, you've got me reconsidering that for your sake.
Damn you. X)
| persevera chapter 1 . 1/1/2013
I like that Toph recognizes that she and her baby will be better off if they're not on their own.
Your description of her memories of Sokka is beautiful, especially this line. [I'm clinging to him. I'm clinging to him like driftwood as I'm rocked against the sea of our bodies molding and crashing together.]-I like how you carried through with the ocean analogy.
It's a shame that Toph was so hurt by him that she isolated herself from her friends. I wonder how she'll deal with him and if he already knows about the baby.
| nakala chapter 7 . 12/30/2012
glad you updated and the emotion is so tangible i love it great job
| Moochki chapter 7 . 12/30/2012
Amazing chapter as usual (: I'm glad I was wrong about Suki! But that didn't made the talk between Suki and Toph any harder to read. I can tell you have a lot of life experience in order to write a love triangle without it sounding cliche, it's just that, pure raw truth.
Eager to read more!