Loved it!

Guerra was great

Leaving Xanatos alive and in Dooku's hands - 後患無窮。

The way Yoda manipulates Qui-Gon in both of these opening chapters is hilarious. Qui-Gon's concern for Obi-Wan after Mixo's death and the way he carefully works to extract how and why Obi-Wan feels guilty for it is masterful.

I adore this alternate first meeting of Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan. There's so much nascent potential for what their relationship becomes, and I like how you've sketched not only the individual characters but also the relationships between them. Yoda activating Qui-Gon's contrarianism in the name of the Council is such a healthier way to initiate this relationship than the Jedi Apprentice novels did. And your Dooku is just what I always thought he should be-insightful, refined, and an excellent Jedi.

*cackles* inversed psychology at its perk here xD

Loved your take on this! Possibly even more so than the original! And that last scene in the council room had me laughing out loud. Good old reverse psychology!

And so, Obi Wan's ridiculously traumatic apprenticeship begins...

I haven't read the original books, so this is all completely new to me.

Quite an introduction to the galaxy, that he just happens to bump into a 'kill my own bodyguards for no reason' Hutt on a random commute.

If Bandomeer was an Ag Corps assignment, why was there no one there already?

I agree with Dooku, it was not Xanatos' best idea to kidnap a Jedi and expect nothing to come of it. Dooku is tricky to write, most people over foreshadow his eventual fall in his depictions... and to be honest, I think you fell into that same trap a bit. Yes, twenty years later he falls, but if that becomes too evident now the question arises as to why nobody caught it sooner.

If there's one weakness in your work so far, that would be it. Dooku and Palpatine didn't get away with their schemes for so long without being good at hiding their natures...and Dooku must have been on good terms with the Jedi at some point, he can't be completely cold to everyone including his old apprentice.

This is still great work and I'll keep reading the series, but I'd watch the over foreshadowing if possible. Too many callbacks/forwards can end up hurting your story.

I had a blast reading your story and seeing how Obi-Wan became Qui-Gon's apprentice.

Very nice, thought its been forever since I've read the JA series, I like your's better, and I'm curious to see what you have planned next. Thank you for sharing. :)

wow... this was exactly what I wanted for Obi-Wan. Right from the very beginning I loved this whole thing. Thank you so much for sharing.

You captured Guerra’s personality beautifully

My friend introduced me to your stories when I was still living abroad, and we read the one shots aloud as we'd cook together~ I'm so glad to finally properly start your Lineage series! I ended up messaging so many sections to her that I loved (particularly the last scene with Obi-wan and Gui-gon with the council haha), so I just wanted to say thanks :D

So I read this and Lineage II last night when I should have been sleeping. I just wanna say, I absolutely love the AU you've created here. I mean, I love the JA books. But to see you write Obi wan as the hesitant one in their apprenticeship is fascinating and adds a level of vulnerability for Obi. I almost feel like the Obi's emotions are DEEPER in this and hit the reader harder in THIS than they did in the actual JA books. The difference between someone else not wanting you and you thinking you don't deserve to be WANTED. Someone's own mind will always be the most damaging weapon against them, and you've shown that here. I absolutely love how you've constructed this. Beyond the story though, your writing is phenomenal. From one writer to another, I greatly enjoyed reading your work and you can ask anyone that knows me, I tend to be kind of a fanfic snob. If I'm gonna read it, it has to be well written. promising stories lines that were poorly written have lost me in the first few paragraphs. No so here, my friend. You had me hooked from the first sentence. And the fact that you have 98 stories on file just makes my day.

Oh Yoda, you sneaky little troll.

i had so much fun with this book! this new perspective of the original story was so refreshing and deepened the lore beautifully for me. ]