Used to be a fan, but seeing that you’re such a hater of the ship ruins the story for me. So I’m going unfav this.

I'm on chapter 51. So far, one of the most well written soul bond hp fics I've ever read. My only negative thoughts are that soon enough, just like life, this story will end.

Oh and there's been a couple of minor typos and inconsistencies that dont really matter. But as it's a completed 2 parter, its probably a bit late for proof readers anyway!

it's been nearly 15 years since I read Harry Potter fanfiction.

I'm glad that in that time, such wonderful stories have been created

- Harby

Thank you! I loved this story

Soooo… Oliver and Katie dating at this point is weird. Oliver will be a 5th year, and Katie was still at Hogwarts in Harry’s 6th year in the books meaning she’s just starting her 2nd year. At this point a 15yo dating a 12yo is…. Uncomfortable, but additionally Katie wouldn’t actually be on the quidditch team yet, so there’s no reason that Wood would have taken any notice of her yet, or for F&G to comment on her being part of the chaser trio.

I’m greatly enjoying the story, but that little bit broke my suspension of disbelief here

Damn it...I would have obliviated her AND fed her to either Bassy or Fluffy just to make sure the job is done right. NO loose ends. Not with someone who wants to and would have killed you.

This second chances mentality is going to come back to bite them.

Normally I would never even think about killing a child but Pansy is just too dangerous to leave alive.
She has to die asap...child or not. It's imperative that she is neutralized quickly. Her knowledge of the future and who she is/was...both, demand it.

In this case it really is for the greater good.

Use any and all means to take her out.

I don't get it... Why can't Harry and Ginny just start dating now? Or at least by the time Ginny goes to school? Oo

Granted, not all girls loose their virginity at 11 like my cousin did (most wait till they're 13. ...in theory. Can't say I've known anyone who waited much longer.. lol) but they start DATING in... sometimes kindergarten, but for the most part the last year or so of elementary school. Around 11-12.

That's extremely normal. Even if it IS the cutsie pyppy-love kinda thing.

I really don't understand why fanfic writers have their characters wait with dating until they pass the legal age or someshit.

I knew ONE girl who didn't loose her virginity until she was 19, and to this day she lies and claims it happened at 16. Nobody wants to be an .

...but maybe things are different in the states. I HAVE heard rumors of people actually entering churches outside weddings and funerals there.

Anyway...

The story itself is pretty good. Has a lot of logic problems, but you write it well.

Why on EARTH would Rita support the status quo? Oo

If she told conspiracy theories about Sirius it would sell more papers.

Peter being innocent is old news, worthless news, and hardly even news at all.

And Rita LOVES Stirring up trouble, and Sirius being innocent is BIG trouble.

So what exactly is her MOTIVE? What does she, Rita Skeeter, gain from claiming Peter is innocent OVER Sirius being the innocent one?

Because Sirius is no fugitive, thus not newsworthy as anything dangerous either.

PLEASE tell me you're not gonna act like a child with a puzzle that tries to hammer a yellow square into a red triagular hole, and try to forcefully hammer in the story to fit the book series EVEN when it makes no sense. _;

There seems to be some potential presidence that if an animagus is knocked unconscious or dies, it turns back to human.

Which postulates a great question...

If you squash a beetle reporter with the newspaper... just WHAT will the result end up looking like? _

Also... if a bird eat said beetle... will it be split open and splattered all over the place when the reporter bug dies? xD

...I swear... Harry is worse than my half-sister with his on-again, off-again relationship with that fame-digging turncoat of a so-called best friend.

Ron has NEVER shown ANY hints that he actually cares about HARRY. Heck! It takes him a whole war to dig up an ounce of lotalty, and even then I'm pretty sure he'd stop hanging with Harry if he didn't gain something from it.

Ron is the kind of friend that's there when you win the lottery, and loves you and is BFF and everything... until you've spent all your money on him. After that he's gone without so much as a note of goodbye.

If Harry wasn't famous, Ron wouldn't have looked at him twice.

And if Harry bought new clothes, he'd froth with jelousy and put him down for DARING to have something Ron didn't have. But if he said he'd be happy to buy Ron new clothes too, Ron would be embarrassed and refuse, claiming the idiotic poor-man's-pride of not wanting charity.

I guess you stuck with Harry's canon inability to see he'd be better off befriending a grizzly bear or a best of hornets than Ron. *Sigh*

Well... It's in-character at least. Tragic -but that he is in the books too.

I wonder what will happen when Molly realize Harry lied tho. *Snickers*

She's EXACTLY the type to confront dumbledore about what Harry said -because the headmaster most likely have claumed Harry being safe with people who love him-, and she'd rip dumbledore a new asshole over what Harry said.

And dumbledore would tell her that Harry's lying -which he is about being thrown out at least, and how he got to use the knight buss.

That's something I look forward to see! _

Kudos for having the first LOGICAL explanation I have heard for WHY someone as old (and presumably wise) as Flamel did not protect the stone himself and let it be hidden in a school full of children.

Double-kudos for using FATE and not Death as the one to be angry.

Death is both overused and illogical. I mean...

Death was there when the first life came to it's end, and will be the last to leave when all life dies.

That kind of lifespan breeds a patience. The human race has only existed a mere blink of the eye in the eyes of Death.

Horcruxes, Philosophers Stone -all forms of attempting to achieve imortality from humans... it's like watching a cat try to read the newspaper! It's downright adorable how the little fluffball THINK it can!

Given enough time, everyone and everything dies. Cheating Death is a myth. All you can do is postpone the inevitable.

Fate, on the other hand, is infamous for having a bad temper, a sadistic nature, and generally hard to predict reactions.

She (or they) makes MUCH more sense as someone to get pissed off if a human refuse to follow the Path she weaves.

Have a cookie! You deserve it!

I'm curious... WHY would dumbledore susoect that two ten year old children, whom both have guardians that limits their movements, and that are -and I can't stress this enough- CHILDREN would be lying to him about not meeting eachother?

Your story is vert well-written, but you may want to keep your characters seperate from yourself.

YOU know they're adult timetravlers.

DUMBLEDORE knows (belives he know) they're two children with zero connection beyond a Soul Bond that appeared on a day he checked in on said children and found them several miles apart with no means to meet.

What makes him so sure they are lying? Is it not more logical that Fate/Destiny had something to do with it? Or magic in general?

Or what if Ginny read a story about him, or was playing that they got married, and Harry had happened to play the same thing with a random girl cuz he was lonely?

Both scenarios are actually equally plasible as the kids lying about meeting.

And the Fate scenario is MORE plasible, considering the whole prophecy debacle.

Like I said: Your story is good. So it's nothing against that.

Just a small tip that you can use to make it even better -and to avoid the horrid trap most writers fall into from time to time: Omniscience/ info-leakage. (The problem where the characters knows things they cannot possibly know.)

I think you got Petunia fairly right. She really DO worry what everyone thinks more than Vernon does, and would act out of character when she is scared, and all wizards scare her.

However, dumbledore threatening with suprise visits will NOT go the way he intend I suspect. Fear tends to make people lash out, and the more scared they are, the harsher they lash out.

Oh, she'll be subdued for a while... but at one point either the fear will be too much, or the threats found empty, and in both cases Harry will be the one who get hit by that backlash.

I look forward to see how you plan to handle THAT problem. _

I mean really. You are making Harry say lies even where truth can be spoken. He needn't have lied about Dursleys kicking him out.

I m curious to know how will you handle paradox of time travel. If future is changed, Harry and Ginny will never fall in that water and never time travel. Will it create two parallels?

No way Harry and Ginny should fall victim to that curse. They are on guard, they have the knowledge and experience of years at war, and it would have no similarities to the other timeline. Also, it would be highly implausible that suddenly something like that would not affect their Bond. For there to be, it would have to be Hermione. But I wouldn't mind if it was any of the four friends - Hermione, Ron, Luna and Neville. Since being more involved in the problem now than in the original timeline, they could be suitable victims.

How are they going to tell Susan about her Bond? It's the same as the secret location of her house. She doesn't know Occlumency, nor does she appreciate them enough to hide such a secret, since they have no deal, no matter how much she is Amelia's niece. It wouldn't take long for everyone to know. It would be a big mistake on their part, when from the beginning they have been determined to keep everything as secret as possible. If it wasn't for the Hogwarts hat, not even Ginny's parents would know, so... Susan? No, it doesn't fit at all.

Otherwise, I'm looking forward to seeing how you fit the events at Hogwarts, with Borgin's death in Azkaban. Because he can't be just a student, nor having traveled back in time as well. Even as adults they didn't have that knowledge, nor were the details of what happened in the chamber of secrets made public enough to copy them to that extent. It's sure to be a very interesting read.