|Reviews for Fall|
| damnation soldier chapter 7 . 7/9
I really, really want to thank you for writing this. It is one of my favorite stories ever. It's nothing short of perfection. I particularly adore your portrayal of both Takano and Yokozawa. You made the latter truly likeable and a great narrator, something I found surprising and enjoyable as a reader. It's especially difficult to characterize those Tsundere types. I really like that they're still their hilariously crass, masculine, prideful selves yet they're still able to communicate their feelings. Yokozawa's careful concern shone through and Takano's gratefulness for his presence was clearly genuine. The impact is really, really heartfelt. You have no idea how emotionally wounded I felt reading this whole thing. Like pure lip biting, heart squeezing goodness. It doesn't help that I found Takano's character the most relatable. Oh Takano, my poor baby. How you wrote his spiral into self destructive behavior and the total apathy his parents have for him literally hit the nail on the head. His parents have no tact, it's amazing I can't even find worse ways to hurt your own child than what they just did here. I can't even like- *sighs* Basically you've succeeded in ramming me with a truck load of feels and I just love you. I really do. Keep on doing what you're doing. 3
| Flyawayfreedom chapter 7 . 6/27
Oh i forgot about poor sorata. Takano's parents suck, and Mrs takano thinks she could use money to compensate for everything.
| The Black Flamingo101 chapter 7 . 6/24
Ah, this chapter was magnificent. I do enjoy a good dysfunctional family, and dear god Takano's fits the bill. The way you laid out their family issues was great. The resentment, the absenteeism, and the cynicism make such a toxic combination. No wonder poor Masamune is in pieces.
"Given the present state of your son, I'm glad he's not mine!"- Holy fuck that is brutal! And the Un-Father of the Year Award goes to...
Mom isn't much better. Yokozawa has ten times the maternal instinct she has. And speaking of bright spots in this, I can't praise your beloved White Knight enough. Yokozawa is totally carrying the comfort aspect of this fic, and doing it marvelously! You know, lemons and smexy things are great, but this friendship just soothing and beautiful to see. You still keep such a realistic, manly roughness to their actions, but it is no less tender and caring. Takano's expected skepticism of Yokozawa's help and his new "friend's" rebuttal is so wonderfully triumphant. Takano is so not used to people truly caring about him that he hardly recognizes when it genuinely happens. It is both tragic and wonderful.
I very much enjoy the funny notes in this as well, such as Takano not even liking cherry. LOL! What an ass. I can't help but love him though.
Lovely, amazing, poignant, and comforting my dearest! I guess I should go get some work done to reward you.
| The Black Flamingo101 chapter 6 . 6/18
Just finished rereading this fic, and I have to say it's one of my favorites. Now this is manly comforting at it's finest! Tragic Takano is an addiction I don't want to cure myself of, not to mention the caring but gruff Yokozawa. These two make me squee!
It's so interesting to see a story where it's not external hardships that cause a character's downfall, but internal. Is it wrong of me to say that Takano's path of self-destruction is kind of endearing? Though I suppose it would be far more tragic if we didn't have Yokozawa around to give some much needed comfort. Addicting concoction there. And now you're adding family drama? I'm all a twitter! I seem to have a huge motif in my own writings of family dysfunction and I find Takano's extremely scandalous. Plus the fact that he still has Ritsu's number is so heart rendering. I don't think Ritsu will ever truly know how much his disappearance effected Takano, nor do I think Takano will ever let him.
Oh yeah, I love, love, love! the way you edited your previous chapters. While I find both of your scenarios for Yokozawa's family history to be plausible, I do like the tragic aspect of his parents never being around, and his subconscious longing for family care that later leads him to the Kirishimas. My god I could keep ranting about this story for days!
I can't wait to see what happens next! Can I bribe you with anything?
* big pleading uke eyes/ lip quiver *
Keep being awesome!
| Flyawayfreedom chapter 6 . 6/18
Are you kidding ? I bet there's a ton of us waiting for your story. Funny thing, i was re-reading this just yesterday. I look so forward to this.
*bows* PLEASE CONTINUE !
| phuthee chapter 6 . 6/18
Great to see another instalment. I'm so glad you watched YTNB. Hopefully it inspired you to write more Yokozawa or hopefully Yokozawa*Kirishima?
| Ally chapter 6 . 6/18
YAY NEW UPDATE! I LIKE WHERE THIS IS GOING! I've always wanted to see more of Takano's parents in canon so I'm excited for the next chapter. My heart broke when I read about his phone only had 3 contacts, and one of them was Oda Ritsu. Angsty Takano is my favourite thing to headcanon! Yokozawa is such a kind soul as always, always keen to see how people interpret Yokozawa/Takano's backstory.
| Tentai.t chapter 6 . 6/17
Sensei, as always you weave such an awesome awesome tale! I love how you paint Yokozawa so well; his gruffness yet caring side really speaks volumes about how much of a good man he is. I'm excited to see how you will fill in Takano's character and his past.
Keep writing, Sensei! Nothing makes me happier than seeing an update notification from you.
| deadharbor chapter 5 . 4/2
Your Yokozawa was dead on. I love this story and hope you continue soon.
| mywinterfireflies chapter 5 . 11/20/2014
Pls write more...its really good...ps put ritsu also...:) xxx
| Tentai.t chapter 5 . 11/18/2014
Sensei, you make this nurse proud of our dear Yokozawa. I can so understand now why he would so utterly dislike (and that's putting it lightly) Ritsu. Poor Takano. I want to just wrap them both up in snuglis and kiss them both goodnight! Well written sensei - as always.
| phuthee chapter 1 . 11/18/2014
Just a crazy thought. Have you ever thought of giving this story a happy ending. Like in an alternative universe kind if thing. These two would be so great together.
Hint - Junjou Novelist. :)
| The Black Flamingo101 chapter 5 . 11/17/2014
Ah, good ole manly hurt/comfort. Just the soul food I needed. I loved this chapter. Whether he takes this as a compliment or not, Yokozawa really is a natural nurturer, and I love seeing him go full throttle and put the needs of Takano above his own. His horror at seeing the way Takano has let himself go and let others abuse him is powerful and intriguing. How is it that this fic is heavy and comforting at the same time? I guess that's the power of hurt/comfort and a fantastic writer.
I also love how Yokozawa sacrifices his own pride in order to make sure that Takano lives and gets him to a hospital at his own expense. It truly speaks volumes of the kind of person he is beneath that lovably gruff exterior. His anger at Takano's words of being better off dead also shows that he truly values human life and wants to see his "friend's" potential shine. I imagine there's lot of healing to be done here, and I simply can't wait. This work is dark, deep, and soothing, and I'm in love with it.
On a last note, the rice paddy thing made me laugh out loud. Leave it to a bubblehead like Onodera to pick an odd fake last name. Heh heh.
Thank you darling for this wonderful update.
| Guest chapter 5 . 11/17/2014
It's nice to know that there are still a few chapters to come! :-)
Although, this chapter broke my heart, even more than Yokozawa in the novels breaks my heart sometimes. I could actually feel his panic in this one, and it makes me already sad to know that there won't be a (romantic) happy end for them.
I'll be waiting for the new chapter!
| Alcuzey chapter 5 . 11/16/2014
My apologies! I am still here! I must have forgotten to reply last chapter! I have had it pretty busy over her(couple of rescues, big and small!)
But I like this chapter...you have awakened Yoko's innate need to nurture and care. I think that is what makes me so lovable and interesting.