Reviews for put on the red light
chirikyubi chapter 1 . 7/21/2012
D Squirrel chapter 1 . 5/2/2012
Such naughty, delicious dreams Monroe has. Lovely, beautiful story.
A Reader chapter 1 . 5/1/2012
I really enjoyed this story! The way you used Monroe's dreams to reflect on and further reveal his inner turmoil was awesome, and you did it so well that the segements weren't choppy but rather flowed into one another. I also like how you kept things vauge in some parts, more of hints than outright statements. Well done and keep up the great work!
Incendiarist chapter 1 . 5/1/2012

Very nice. I love how you used the minimal dialogue, and also, the page-breaks. I'm a sucker for page-breaks.

The only thing I have an issue with is right at the beginning, "because his blood is already pounding". I think you're looking for "because his heart is already pounding", or possibly even "because his blood is already boiling". There's no real sense in blood pounding, and phrase comes off as awkward with its unfamiliarity.

But other than that... Impressive.