|Reviews for Oh Go Suck a Duck, Sirius Black|
| nobody suspicious chapter 6 . 5/31/2016
May I just say I love this! Haha Freya is nearly as clumsy as me, I mean I manage to fall UP stairs, that's a talent! I have to say though the one thing that is niggling at me is the lower case "I"s but I accept that is a me thing. Other than I that I love this.
| ramen-no-juustu chapter 18 . 1/4/2016
Ok well, your fic is freakin amazing. It deserves a lot more reviews... but oh sweet merlin of mine, why did you have to do this?! the end?! There's no sequel, nothing... send help, I'm dying alone on my couch...
i will still recommend this fic to my friends... without the last chapter... it crush your feels.
With pleasure, sorry for my english!
| Mareeweasley7 chapter 18 . 12/4/2015
So I may have just re-read this whole entire story again and I still love it but really really want to know what happens next! Are you going to make a sequel? I really hope you do. Your storyline is amazing the way you write the story, I love! :) xx
| Danneyland chapter 6 . 7/25/2015
"You look like a blast-ended Skrewt on a bad day." (or something similar)
Blast-Ended Skrewts did not exist until 1994. Hagrid illegally cross-breeded Manticores and Fire Crabs to create the creatures. So to have your character refer to them long before 1994 is inaccurate. You could change it to any other simile including or not including magical creatures, but the mention of blast-ended skrewts screws with the timeline of the Harry Potter universe.
| Duh chapter 1 . 10/28/2014
I really wanted to read this story but you don't even know or at least do not use CAPITAL letters and etc.. when needed. Terrible. Find a BETA or something. It is really annoying.
| Rea558750 chapter 18 . 1/6/2013
Pls don't leve it there
| Phoenix Gryffis chapter 18 . 10/24/2012
i HATE peter!
| Phoenix Gryffis chapter 14 . 10/23/2012
she's bonkers but we love her for it.
| JennLD chapter 18 . 9/2/2012
You cant leave it there. Great job on your story i love how she is funny crazy, the perfect match. Are you going to make a second story? Or did she die with the baby and didn't affect the HP books?
| Sharmaine C chapter 18 . 8/15/2012
1 isn't it foul instead of fowl?
2 u didn't use the correct capitalization for i (I)
3 ... MAKE A SEQUEL!
| Guest chapter 9 . 7/17/2012
so you know, your eighth and ninth chapters are the same.
| Sirius' Gal chapter 1 . 7/8/2012
This is a very interesting concept. Unfortunately the grammar may turn off some people. I am by no means a lover of grammar, however, punctuation can get in the way of the readers attention, which in turn will jeopardize your audience numbers. For example;
'Too much hanging around with you' Jake said to me,
This should really be:
“Too much hanging around with you!” Jake said to me
Also make sure you ALWAYS capitalize “I, I’ve, I’m…” and ANY names. Example:
'I feel so loved, Excuse me while i just go and sit in the corner of my room, that i like to call my corner of misery, and weep' i turned to walk away but hit something rather hard and fell onto the floor holding my head
“I feel so loved. Excuse me while I just go and sit in the corner of my room that I like to call my corner of misery and weep.” I turned to walk away but hit something rather hard and fell onto the floor, holding my head.
Another is punctuation at the end of sentences.
'Oh sweet Merlin, why does this always happen to me?' i asked no one in particular
Should be: “Oh sweet Merlin, why does this always happen to me?” I asked no one in particular.
I think your story has a lot of potential. I would suggest putting your story into Microsoft word; this will help with these mechanical issues that are happening in your story. I know it is already complete, however, I would really advise working on it some more, in order to make the sentence fluency and flow of your story stronger. If it would help try to get someone to proof you chapters before posting them, proof-reading saves everyone’s butts, including J. !
| LostFangirl09 chapter 17 . 6/20/2012
If you do write a sequel I could beta it and check for mistakes.
| LostFangirl09 chapter 18 . 6/20/2012
Is there going to be a sequel? I really love Freya's character. This story is too amazing not to continue with a sequel. Please consider it.
| Simply Prettyful chapter 18 . 6/12/2012
Briliant! I'm glad I read it. When's the sequel coming out on here?